Yo peep this.....


Thee shall come with forceful life
Life shall change with notion of force
Men will die in a graceless war
Iraq burning with a thoughtless claim
Oil- the vice of modernity,
Thousands killed, many more deprived
Homes are burnt, empires will follow

Humanity dispersed, the “Law” is ignored
Chaos will reign for decades to come,
Until Bush blushes in a blast
Blair will follow with boring brochette

But scars will be left without a doubt,
The orphan will ask, where is my dad?
Mothers will answer with devastation
The world will remain in anarchic state
America will vanish with its vanity
Europe will rise with a new confidence
Then the game resumes with remorseful result.

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dont sleep on me people...........................

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This was very well done...

...it was powerful and raw piece on a very relevant and important subject...a left-wing perspective maybe...some of the views expressed maybe a bit extreme...but in such situations, extermism is always apparent...and i've said it before, and i'll say it again, the right wing is suffocating the left wing to such an extent, that is is growin a bit desperate and becoming more and more extreme....

..anyway, i like the vivid imagery in this piece...the way you flowed from word to word, not letting structure restrain it too much....just leaving it as raw, but still well excecuted as possible..

...respect...

DAMN FInally SOmeone IS AWAKE IN RB...thnx VAr..for the comments and yo feedback.....Respect..fosho


UPPUN...........

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i was feelin that right there...you see i am originally Iraqi...i aint tryin to front or nothin but i think this war is just for economics..tryin to change one regime and replace it with another one...anyways dunny nice drop..one

Thnx man doesnt matter if you Iraqi or American or African we all human spieces feel me and this WAR is just Bullshit...anywayz thnx

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good ish...nice topik...well used words....

tHNx g........THIS ONE IS GETTIN OLD AMA WORK ON MY NEXT ONE.....LOL

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that was ill

I think Bush jr. is gonna pull out just like his old man did and ultimitly accomplish nothing. Actually, I gotta lot of strong veiws on this war. Mine sorta coincide with yours too. I just aint never try to capture them in poetic format. Props to you for doing so, I don't think I could even if I tried. This was rather awe inspiring and I'd bet a rough subject to work on.

~Shalom~

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Quote:

Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thnx for all comments it was hard to put it in poetic form....keep givin feedback and all make love not war...like people say....


WUn

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this subject is fabricated----I think the depth of this matter is really shallow---

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alright as for the poem not bad keep it up----

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Deacon...lol u comedy dawg but thnx for the feedback

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