This is dedicated to a nameless ex.
As we all can relate to this piece

Wallowing in self-sorrow... Trying to forget today and live tomorrow...
Outsider to my own mind... It's like my time is borrwed...
Completely random meeting... Another girl claims she feels me...
Did she care geniunely or was this another case of pity...
Then it hits me... Depression comes from a heart thats empty...
Its tempting...
Maybe for once a relationship will be fufilling...
Everything's going well... depression is suppressing....
Stoicism fading while love keeps progressing...
Problems at home abound... Pain comes in throngs...
But somehow its theraputic... Finally have a shoulder to cry on
Erased my hurt... And placed my in a positve house hold...
God damn I love this girl... let the truth be told...
Months pass... Everything on the surface is great...
But the subconcious begins to inkle of hate...
Issues of jealousy and trust begin to show their face....
Seems like no matter where I go... I corrupt that place...
Issues grow constantly... From jealousy to rumors of infidelity...
I thought this was perfection... How can all this be?...
The end draws near and I find peace again....
Think atleast out of this I've gained a friend...
Realtionship turns malicious... how the fuck can she do this?
Goes from friend to friend... That hurtful fucking bitch!!!
Luck runs out for her... She finally comes back to me...
And for some reason I take her back... Chrit gives into lunacy...
Pain still remains... but I stay the same... I'm now a sado-massacist...
Constantly wondering how love can hurt and fufill like this...
Finally scrap it... Tired of the emotional slaughter...
It seems I've fallen literally... for the Devil's Daughter...

Wow, this was a great piece. It had madd emotion. I can relate totally, maybe thats why they call me Devil. Im feelin this piece. Great job. Everything was awesome on it. Keep droppin. Much respect.

Hey Chrit it's a small world, didn't know you were involved with what sounds like my Ex...Anyways it seems to be the same old game huh? Well as for your drop, I liked it. Simple Structure and nice blend of vocab, you did a good job at detailing the happenings of the relationship. I hope you just relax and let things work themself out. Women are always going to be there, it's after they have an understanding of what a real relationship is, they drop the bullshit. Stay up and keep focused dawg, right now a woman may just be your worse enemy, if you know where I am going with that... You should....

Bounce

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Outsider to my own mind... It's like my time is borrwed...
sounds liek one of my lines
president of my own mind, not really in charge, but i buy time
coincidence?.....prolly

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anyway chrit, great drop, feel the emotion, nice departure form the abrasive nature of your battles and open mics, it reveals a more vulnerable part fo you, quite asthetically pleasing

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Y'know what? I can honestly say that due to never being in such a position, I can't say I can relate to this peice.

Although, I've watched enough Sailor Moon to know what jealousy and all that scheiße can do to people.

Gotta say, I've never read any of your peices, have I? Either way, I'm glad I looked into this. And yes, even though you are better than me, elevated beyond description, and have one of the best battle records, I'm not just saying that this was a great peice because I'm sucking up either.

It really was one.

~Irenic~

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Quote:

Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

sissy

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this was a good poem, i've never read a poem from you but this was a unique piece, the title and the way you brought it was very complex. good shit man. keep it up

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

it was very well told
it was very good indeed
hey chrit i enjoyed reading it for what it was dogg
not just bcuz u wrote it

Upping this

I'm lovin this piece right now. Each line drew me deeper and deeper in. I can relate to this so well, you dont even know...but not with the Devil's Daughter,more so like Son, dont get it twisted .....
i often wondered that, this reads just like something i would've wrote.... much respect for this piece, for the vocab, word usage/play, flow, structure, being just right, and for picking a topic I can so closely relate
keep writin
keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
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the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

this was nice....i guess everyone has this in there lives it was deep every word dropped the vocab used... the feelin was there...really nice...


peace

good peice
the mood changed a lot
i liked it
i know how u feel

wow great piece. there was madd emotion in this pieces. the vocab and the way used used the words was great overall i think this was a great piece