my inner self behold secrets of love
the city in me
I keep it drugged
like a Los Angeles street
luggin heavy feelings in tears
you've been gone 4(for) 6 years
out of reach so in fear
I'm tuggin at a higher plan
a reason from higher judgement
to keep these memories
below me bestow me
you surround me with tsunami's
cover my L.A
my ocean need a latitude adjustment
I'm strugglin
in my own water I strangle in confusion
and anger
you rise a liquid angel
your so beautiful
the water subsided
my city turn 2 silver and gold
no longer black and coal
like atlantis with earth rearranged
we're one at home
baby you changed me

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Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds'
nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...

I focused myself to write this more in a hip hop style rather than in pure poetic form. I hope that helps in getting the most out of what I'm trying to say.

__________________
Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds'
nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...

This was good. Nice dedication to your love. Love does seem to change people. Either for the good or for the worse. But I liked this. It was sweet, the flow was good, and so was the vocab. Overall, I liked it, good job.

This is very...sweet (yeah, not the best word to use..but still).

It struck some chords. Very personal and just had a kind of 'elevanted innocence' to it.

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hey just enjoy, its not personal at all. The message I'm giving is that I am the city and my gf is the ocean. She gives me tough love 2 make me see who I really am so I can change. hence the city turning into silver and gold. Just 2 tell u what it means going by how I wrote it.

__________________
Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds'
nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...