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Old 07-28-08, 01:19 PM   #1
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HW Champ Match Kirk (23) vs Lay Fear (14) - Vote

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Kirk vs Lay Fear

Due times:
Check in due Wednesday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
Lateness = -2 votes even IF your opponent allows you to post late.
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Old 07-28-08, 01:28 PM   #2
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Old 07-28-08, 01:35 PM   #3
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I hear that....
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Old 08-01-08, 03:44 PM   #4
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I need an extension, bro.
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Old 08-01-08, 04:50 PM   #5
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Alright, that works.
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Old 08-02-08, 06:25 PM   #6
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This mother fucker. Always gettin' called out on recycling.



Tryna be like Heath or somethin'? You'd love to jump in a film, dude.
But bitch, you don't even need to snort a line for my punches to kill you,
Though as much as you like makeup, not possible you'd pass as him,
And if you ain't a Joker... Then you seriously think that you can grab the win?!
Who cares if you kill it in LLL junior... Bro, forreal, that place is trash,
Cause half the faggots you invited over here from there... are placed in last,
Only 14 weeks this season? That's somethin' dumb and that's not as fun,
I expected atleast a week 16.... since you're so used to droppin' um,
Cali thinks you're a cheater and dickrider, you need to tell him the facts,
Cause this fag just prefers a man on the inside who can cover his ass,
You make bitches SICK but think you pimpin' like you impress a crowd,
Cause you make them yell GET LO.... Pukin' just before they get the S T out,
Last week for you wasn't even fair. Anybody readin' knows thats clear,
Cause you've had practice layin' Solo.... every night for the past year,
I don't care much about this battle, man. But this fag is never quittin',
So if I lose, I'll just DQ you for recycling every verse you've ever written.



Goodluck.
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Old 08-02-08, 10:16 PM   #7
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..I recycle concepts?

Quote:
Originally Posted by Kirk vs Format
You don't please bitches. Format is lame and thinks that hes God sent,
Last time a bitch said "OH FOR!" I asked "whens the last time F had an original concept?"


Quote:
Originally Posted by Kirk vs Adam
Thinks he conquers the sack. But dude, you're a joke with all chicks,
You got them sayin' "OH ADAM..... up and count how many votes you lost with."


Quote:
Originally Posted by Kirk vs Lay
Please bitches? Haha, Ya get clowned cause your things refered to as mighty thin,
So next time a bitch says "OH LAY!" they'll be raisin' glasses for my title win.



try an diss me..your lazy an failing to continue your run with the belt' kid, you suck.
n I'd say pick up the slack......er, but then the whole league would try helpin you up.
see ya style of punches ain't hard to mimic, I better mean it..
an I'd throw in a "OH KIRIKK" line too..
....just to compensate for the all the times ya girls NEVER screamed it.
I'm putttin your life at risk,..run kid,..cuz trust you've never felt worse.
an I'd say Save your breath...but you should prolly worry about rescuin yourself first.
your run was nice though..but its about time someones showed you the door kirk.
kid after this to swallow your pride..you'd have to scavenge whats left off the floor first.
actin like your the best..heaven or hell kid, I'm positive this seize'll be quick.
an there's not a satan or ahgod thats better..but I garuntee theres a Lay that EASILY is.
I'm stompin you out so..dealing a beating, n you got a whack style..I'm honest
no pain no gain..an after this you could say Kirks achieved thousands of miles of progress.
see you live farrr beyond city limits..but still I'ma make sure you'll be smothered first.
an its not that he lives on the outskirts - its jus that his girl refuses to let him under hers.
don't be stressin the doubt..its only a true fact you' proved your less in this bout.
n consistency's ya strong Suit..but we know your more comfortable dressed in a blouse.


pz, gluck bro.
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Old 08-03-08, 11:27 AM   #8
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Tryna be like Heath or somethin'? You'd love to jump in a film, dude.
But bitch, you don't even need to snort a line for my punches to kill you

Cali thinks you're a cheater and dickrider, you need to tell him the facts,
Cause this fag just prefers a man on the inside who can cover his ass,
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try an diss me..your lazy an failing to continue your run with the belt' kid, you suck.
n I'd say pick up the slack......er, but then the whole league would try helpin you up.
see ya style of punches ain't hard to mimic, I better mean it..
an I'd throw in a "OH KIRIKK" line too..

I'm putttin your life at risk,..run kid,..cuz trust you've never felt worse.
an I'd say Save your breath...but you should prolly worry about rescuin yourself first.
your run was nice though..but its about time someones showed you the door kirk.
kid after this to swallow your pride..you'd have to scavenge whats left off the floor first.

i though it was a real close battle but lay had slightly better lines

v/Lay
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Old 08-03-08, 12:44 PM   #9
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Good explanation, man.
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Old 08-03-08, 05:11 PM   #10
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Honestly man, I've got Kirk taking this battle.

I want him to lose so badly I almost feel like voting for Lay strictly for that reason. But, Lay's verse man I just couldn't get into. I think that he stretched his lines almost all the way through and it ruined the whole feel of the verse. Its one thing to have decent lines, but if a reader can't really get into them because it feels like a chore to read the verse... they tend to lose a lot of effect. Lay, didn't you say "quotes are gay" when you battled me.. and now you dropping 3 of them. LMFAO! Honestly, I thought you had some cool concepts in there, but there was a few gay concepts.. one that comes to mind is the save your breath line.. no offense but that was horrendous my friend. The slacker line was forced, the OH KIRK line didnt really play out to any effective nature.. it just seemed to simplistic. The outskirts line was cool and the swallow your pride was nice. The satan/ahgod/lay bar was pretty weak and the closer was fucking gay. Overall this was one of your weaker verses that I've seen. Kirk had a shitty opener I thought, as a matter of fact the next two bars were fucking weak to... he dropped the week 16/weak 16 play which I felt was ok, but a little bit overused now. The CALI punch could've been worded a bit better, but then you had the makin chicks SICK.. GET LOST bar going on which I thought was funny for some reason. Then you followed with the line of the battle flipping that shit from last week on him and the closer I thought was cocky, the swagger helped and did a nice job of finishing off the verse.

Overall, I felt that Lay had TWO decent bars and Kirk had THREE. Then overall Kirks verse was more polished.. he had an overall better rating in the punches department and it was just easier to get into and appreciate.


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Old 08-03-08, 08:13 PM   #11
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interesting battle...... not bad on either part i'd say...
kirk's verse was decent, i only saw a two good lines i really liked. the "man inside" line and the weak 16 were pretty good in my opinion but the rest of the lines didnt really have an effect. they either lacked a hard punch or had no punch at all.
i cant realy say i liked lay's verse that much better better... i wanna point out how crazy stretched those lines were, and how horrible the flow of the verse went, i feel like the punches and concepts were New to me, and made me go "oh" but they werent That great. the Oh Kirk line was pretty much expected and didnt hit too hard. it seemed like a bunch of his punches just had the same format and i felt it was kind of repetitive.
I do have to say though, kirk edged this one. i feel like the horrible flow of lays verse took away too much from it and made it just look like a set of punches rather than a flexible verse... i had to read it two lines at a time and stop to try and find the flow, which really took away from the punches, Especially if i didnt like the punch anyways. kirks verse flowed better and had a better overall feel to it as well as the "inside man" wordplay which won the battle for him. works well on both levels
yep yep
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Old 08-03-08, 09:12 PM   #12
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2 - 1

Kirk wins (27) and Lay (14)
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