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Old 08-18-08, 11:49 AM   #1
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2. Lay Fear vs 9. Eddie - Vote

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PLAYOFFS ROUND ONE

2. Lay Fear vs 9. Eddie


Due times:
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- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
Lateness = -2 votes even IF your opponent allows you to post late.
Max. extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

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10 min and 20 max. for regular battles. 16 min and no max in champ matches. If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts. Playoff matches there is a 30 max. for lines.

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Old 08-18-08, 12:00 PM   #2
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Old 08-18-08, 03:11 PM   #3
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Old 08-18-08, 09:47 PM   #4
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Who the fuck?
I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..
Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..
Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..
Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..
I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..
so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die"..
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Old 08-19-08, 11:20 AM   #5
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goodgame..


ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you
noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores
faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one
its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips
your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch
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Old 08-20-08, 11:54 AM   #6
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Who the fuck?
I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
Lol, this was some tight wordplay. Well worded punch, I liked this a lot.
When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..
Cocky swagger, the wording could've been better.. but in general it was a nice punch.
Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..
lmao.. I may be biased to this because I think wrestling punches are sweet.
Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..
Nah, this was some weak shit man.
Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..
I'm almost 90% sure someone will say this doesn't rhyme, but IT DOES. The punch itself though was too basic and had no real power to it.
I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..
The concept was cool, the wording was completely fucked up I thought.
so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die"..
Lol, not the best but it has an element of humour about it. It is a definite "closer" punch.


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ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you
Not to clown on this punch, I'm sure others will find it funny.. however, because I know who Eddie is and I know he isn't fat.. this punch lost its power.
noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores
I wasn't really feeling this at all, sorry.
faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
OMFGLMFAO!! This punch was raw as fuck, best of the battle.
while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
So, yeah.. this punch just wasn't hitting for me.
all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one
Played concept, but flipped nicely.
its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips
Nah, the wording was off and the concept was weak.
your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch
This was a decent closer.



So, I really hope this battle doesn't succumb to the curse of chain voting... because it is close I know, but I honestly have Eddie taking this battle. Lay said he was coming hard in the playoffs and this week.. I don't know.. his verse just doesn't seem to be hitting that hardness that I am used to seeing his verses doing. I thought he had a couple of shit concepts, he flipped a played concept nicely.. he also had the best bar of the entire battle.. but overall his verse wasn't nearly as good as I would expect from him. Also, the fat punch at the start lost its meaning on me because like I said.. I know for a fact that Eddie is not fat. Others might like it though. Eddie didn't come close to as hard as I've seen him come in previous battles. He is a raw battler, but this week he seemed to coast with an above average verse. He had a few punches that I liked, they weren't spectacular, but they definitely made me laugh. He had a general cocky swagger that I've seen him use before, and overall his verse was just more appealing to me. The sphered and sting punches were his best, they both had me laughing.

So....

Vote: Eddie
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Old 08-20-08, 02:00 PM   #7
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I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
^Pretty good opener. Fresh wordplay.

When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..
^Didn't like this one as much. But alright.

Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..
^Thought this was shit.

Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..
^Yeah, this was pretty shitty too.

Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..
^This was pretty dumb too.

I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..
^I agree with with Solo. Wording was fucked.

so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die".
^Haha. Simple, but still funny.





ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you
^I thought it was kinda dumb, but still kinda funny.

noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores
^Didn't like this much.

faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
^Lmao. That was fuckin' disgusting but funny.

while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
^Didn't like this one.

all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one
^Played to fuck, but still alright.

its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips
^Nah, shit is weak.

your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch
^Ehhhh, kinda alright.




Honestly, I thought Lay took this pretty easy. I thought Eddie's verse had an alright line here or there, his opener was pretty good. But overall, Lay had a few more decent punches than he did. I thought Eddie's verse was pretty boring to read. Lay's wasn't much better, but his punches were better even though it wasn't fun reading either verses.

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Old 08-20-08, 03:31 PM   #8
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I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
nice shit
When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..
cool
Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..
no
Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..
o.k
Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..
ehh
I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..
Wording made it meh, cool concept doe
so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die"..
lol


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ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you
o.k
noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores
Nice
faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
cool
while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
ehh
all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one
cool
its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips
cool
your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch
decent flip


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Old 08-20-08, 04:13 PM   #9
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Who the fuck?
I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..

Good opener..................

When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..

not bad....................

Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..

was'nt feelin.................

Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..

Nah...............................

Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..

Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..

no..................................

I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..

no....................

so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die"..

poor finish too.....................

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ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you

kinda funny..............

noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores

ok................................

faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth

lol liked.......................

while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit

hahaha funny.......................

all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one

not bad...................

its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips

lol funny again.....................

your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch

not great but not bad..........................


Ok gotta do this quick coz iv gotta shoot out...........
Eddie you started really well but after 2 bars you seemed to jus fall off and your structure was really bad.
Lay your verse had many lines that made me chuckle, your wording was good but alittle off maybe a couple of times but still think you took this one by a long margine.
Eddie your verse lacked wording and structure and general punches after the first few or so.
More to come from both im sure but iv gotta say alittle dissapointing from eddie after nick's praise before you dropped, although it was a good drop from you lay i'd say you have a few more levels to rise up yet.

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Old 08-21-08, 01:24 PM   #10
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ya chicks packin baggage, dont' brag bitch I'd rather jus fued
shit faggot..even ya girls Figure of speech is fucking fatter than you
descent, but figure of speech has been used before..original setup though....


noone even noticed your whore, shes ugly an I'll be boastin some more
ya know its reached its Boiling point..when ya girl's STILL coated wit Sores
nice

faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
LOL, this had me laughing at work


while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
barely descent, i think the wording coulda been better



all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one
nice

its new homo..you want in vtl? you want out?..so choose a week to quit
an I wish you'd Make up your mind..but then it'd be familiar with ya cheeks an lips
LOL

your weak admit, styles legit? I'll pummel you til ya head rings like this
try to copyright..but to mimic me ya gotta learn how to NOT swing like a bitch
barely descent...wording a bit off


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Who the fuck?
I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
descent


When I pull out - I'mma bust until this fag screams out he'on want nomore..
I ain't perverted - we all just hope I creep ya verses out, and evasively shut the door..
barely descent

Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the

rinnng.
descent



Ngga - my fuckin' fist is just viscous and raw..
I'll beat you to within the inch of your life..
...........THEN feed that baby dick to my dog..
Nah

Those played concepts can't save you now..
You're old shit is a hoax..
..Infact, I swore they were drowned at a Salem Trial..
descent

I hate you clown - and the set-up of ya rhymes, should be burned alive..
My winning votes here - 'slike heads usin' ya style - it'll stop around '05..
barely descent cuz this is getting played

so pleeeaaase - I'll be moving on to the next round to make heads fly..
While this ngga here's tryin his hardest find a dope way to word "Ed Die"..
barely descent


^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

This was a good battle. Eddie came descent throughout his verses, but I believe that Lay had

a more funny verse that had better concepts and ultimately won the battle for him...


Vote - Lay Fear, better punches
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Old 08-21-08, 10:44 PM   #11
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I peepd ya matches - Ionno wtf you thought, cuz'..
But if ya shit 'sfeared - then my shit's baseball bats and golf clubs..
Forfeit or feel four fists til' ya eye gleams..
I'll make it Sting til it rocks facepaint, does the Scorpion Death Lock, and skydives in the rinnng..

vs.

faggot thinks he's a movie star, Samuel Jackson?..you ain't real so move
butt Eddie's in Shaft?..but backwards that statement simply reveals the truth
while your compared bitch..'Eddie' we know your gay cuz ya files coherent
take ya outa special Ed,..leave ya wit Die like queers usually style their hair wit
all that streched shit, lines stickin out.. that'll just cause you to lose son
I know ma fists Structure verse pretty hard..but didn't realize youd fail to use one

this was a decent battle. i wasn't feelin much of nething after eddie's Sting line. it was just okay-under par shit imo. i feel like lay came a lot more consistant and that Shaft line was pretty creative. ima have to give this one to lay for consistency n shit

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Old 08-24-08, 09:09 PM   #12
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Lay wins 5 - 1

Lay Fear advances to ROUND TWO of playoffs
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