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Old 05-14-03, 04:02 PM   #1
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The Last Time

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It has been a while since the continents divided.
It's been a black and white dream since the last time silk ran down my coat of arms.
A concerto of crackles from the fireplace, and still no sound like the breath you gave.
Natural oils engulfed from a freshly lit match, and still no place quite as warm as inside you.
Our minds spoke in swaying motions like a pendulum of sharp wit.
Together, pouring toward the center of ourselves, like boiling water.
We knew we would have to evaporate or overflow eventually. And that was the last time.
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Old 05-14-03, 05:01 PM   #2
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uppin it. man i can't anyone to say anything about my work?
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Old 05-14-03, 08:18 PM   #3
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come on man i just want to hear what people think. i need some critisizm so i can make my skills better.
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Old 05-15-03, 01:01 AM   #4
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< Likes it.
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Great spirits often encounter violent opposition from mediocre minds.
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Old 05-15-03, 05:33 AM   #5
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your the only one - everyone else is sleepin on it.
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Old 05-15-03, 03:57 PM   #6
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this shit is like a hookers bed - its gettin mad slept on....
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Old 05-17-03, 07:11 AM   #7
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y'all suck if you sleep on this anymore. this is some tight emotional poetry and no one can add something to it. not a good job or even some constructive critisizm..............
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Old 05-17-03, 11:03 AM   #8
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to me that was bullshit. i know you could do a lot betta than that. that shit sounds like sumthin i would write. yous a lot betta than that kid. apply yaself dog.
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Old 05-18-03, 04:14 PM   #9
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its not a rhyme it was just some poetry. i wasn't tryin to battle someone i was just puttin out some poetry.
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