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05-18-03, 07:00 PM | #1 | |||
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Just to think.
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A drip from a brush the drip that i touch
i sip from a cup the image of such clarity the earth the people the plants the dark every element different uniform set apart look into they eyes of all people you see and say to yourself .not one is like me. think of the artist that constructed such think of the oceans the rivers the love imagine lust and the sight responsible think of commitment the sign stoppin you our world is unique in each every aspect find two equivlents isnt wont be and hasnt think of the paint used to create our souls our mold see the stranger ask who it be think of the fat ugly pretty skinny tall short and look how we come together beautifully think of gods tears used for the oceans he is a sad being over fixed with emotion think of the one you love think of smiles consider life as a whole. the jury in its trials think of your life the greed envy and hate think of yourself. and realize you are ..... one of a kind. beautiful. and great......
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05-18-03, 07:26 PM | #2 | ||||
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nice poem yo.
it makes you think. deep shit. keep it up. if u combine ur poetry into ur rappin if u do audio, you'll be straight.
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05-18-03, 07:46 PM | #3 | ||||||
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lol, ignore what I said on AIM. I'm an idiot and it usually takes some time for me to understand what the writing is about, if I ever do.
You asked about the content. I think it's really good. Everybody should take a look at themselves the way you described in this writing. "look into they eyes of all people you see and say to yourself .not one is like me. think of the artist that constructed such" I think I sent those things to you on AIM. Thats the lines that stood out to me most. I do think about those things, like I said. I like the ending on it too. I wasn't expecting you to tell me to think about myself. I know you're waiting for this response so I'll go ahead and post it up for you. I thought this was a really good writing though. Different than the ones I've been reading on here. Keep posting more of your stuff. |
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05-19-03, 12:12 PM | #4 | |||
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up.
damn i must suck. i get slept on like city benches..
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05-19-03, 12:51 PM | #5 | ||||||
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I'll get on another name and respond to it again :P lol
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05-19-03, 04:40 PM | #6 | |||||||
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Alright i checked your piece and i think it was written well. It reminded me of that TLC song (only i dont remember the title)LOL.
The structure of it at times threw me off but some people like their stuff written differently.Overall pretty nice piece -1-
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05-19-03, 07:59 PM | #7 | |||
Sand
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word
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05-20-03, 03:18 AM | #8 | ||||||
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i liked this
true feeling sure does make you think Love you Pe@ze |
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05-20-03, 05:01 PM | #9 | ||||||
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Tight poem. Awe inspiring message. Nice writez, Sand. Stay up n keep blessin us.
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05-21-03, 12:18 AM | #10 | ||||||
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ay, that makes me feel good bout myself! keep doin what u do
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05-21-03, 10:17 PM | #11 | ||||||
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he always seems to do shit like that with his words......
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05-22-03, 02:00 AM | #12 | |||||||
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Ahh i like this... this had a strong message on both a personal level and also a wordly one.. Not only inspiring us to realise ourselves as unique, and in our own rights all beautiful.. but also in realising that, helping us to understand that so is everyone/everything else.
We are all different, no two are alike, and yet we all, as fellow inhabitants of this beautiful creation, share in common such indivual beauty. The variety of life all fixing together to make our World united, and beautiful. Great Verse
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05-22-03, 09:37 PM | #13 | |||
Sand
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thank you for the replies...
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