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makaveli-rest | 0 | 0% | |
John Dough | 5 | 100.00% | |
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02-15-04, 09:06 PM | #1 | |
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John Dough |vs| makaveli-rest
IP: 1481 46A3
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spit as soon as possible Normal rules and check in.. good luck |
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02-15-04, 09:09 PM | #2 |
Flyweight
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IP: B9CF C1DC
checkin in il be done in 10 to 30 minutes.................
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02-15-04, 09:13 PM | #3 | |
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IP: 1481 46A3
check i'm a lil busy right now
so..it will prolly be like 30-40 mins |
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02-15-04, 09:16 PM | #4 |
Flyweight
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IP: B9CF C1DC
im riding in my escalade
with my extra blade in my pocket in the other one i got my rocket i got out the car and poped it the guy was john dough down in one blow he didnt think thats why he was unconus in one blink i poped it again now he dead got hit straight in the head sorry it was short but im in a rush and have to go somewhere |
02-15-04, 09:42 PM | #5 | |
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IP: 1481 46A3
Ya great kid..ya elevated..going up against u..I'll fall
fuck that.. ....I don't know whether to post 2 lines or not at all! Damn looks like you took a shit..then went and posted it Wait hold up..let me go get a fuckin mod to close this So ya tupac huh? are you just looking for a bit of fame? Cuz ya punches are about as played..as well..ya name! Its wrestling match..but in tha opening seconds u get pinned You want pacs name? well i guess you'll get shot up like him! Fuck a closer..shit..don't need one..i don't know whats worse Reading ya fucking name..or reading ya fucking verse! |
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02-15-04, 10:09 PM | #6 | |
Rare One
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IP: 283B 08F8
im riding in my escalade
with my extra blade in my pocket i looked over your verse first. its more of an open mic piece in the other one i got my rocket i got out the car and poped it you have flow i mean.. but other than that you really dont send any punches (disses) to your opponent, i mean this IS a battle the guy was john dough down in one blow also you need to connection your lines better, follow through/set up era.. vise versa... this will give better stroy telling ability when battling some one he didnt think thats why he was unconus in one blink i mean yours sort of had that but, it seems liek your stilla newer emcee, which is fly, but you need to work on rhyme shceme, flow,metaphors, PUNCHS... i poped it again now he dead got hit straight in the head [b] yea heard me? Start with workign onyour punchlines.. after that develop a better flow/rhyme scheme, then comes multis, then comes metaphors lastly you should try for is wordplay. Ya great kid..ya elevated..going up against u..I'll fall fuck that.. ....I don't know whether to post 2 lines or not at all! kind of a fast flow here.. sarcasim, g thats not in rap now a days. eh this opening could have been better. not much of a diss Damn looks like you took a shit..then went and posted it Wait hold up..let me go get a fuckin mod to close this coudl havebeen a much better bar. punch was straight but not that hard. follow through wasnt bad i suppose but really needed more of a punch to it So ya tupac huh? are you just looking for a bit of fame? Cuz ya punches are about as played..as well..ya name! eh, alright personal shot for this battle, could have came harder with the strength but decent for the battle Its wrestling match..but in tha opening seconds u get pinned You want pacs name? well i guess you'll get shot up like him! not impressed by this bar... wrestling match was an ok concpet but you didnt follow through enough with it nor direct it. the follow through was basic in my eyes, but alright Fuck a closer..shit..don't need one..i don't know whats worse Reading ya fucking name..or reading ya fucking verse! good ending, sort of had direction that was dope to it. connected punch bar, which is the kind i like set up and follow through.. over all you had an alright verse for this battle seemed a little rushed and could have came off better but its all good. i would work on you consistency for punchs and your flow. but really i would start with working up better metaphors which might add to your punchlines. vote- John Dough Took it witha better verse, more consisent punchs. Drop an honest vote, then ill come back and poll vote for you http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113612
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02-15-04, 10:16 PM | #7 | |
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lol...i took a total of 4 minutes on this battle
i was busy...outcome..you forgot to poll vote 1 |
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02-15-04, 11:58 PM | #8 | |
Flyweight
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IP: F978 8610
makaveli-rest
im riding in my escalade with my extra blade in my pocket in the other one i got my rocket i got out the car and poped it dont know where the 1st bar ends, so broke it off here...regardless..very wack!! the guy was john dough down in one blow umm...no he didnt think thats why he was unconus in one blink weakkkk i poped it again now he dead got hit straight in the head wack closer man, very very wack ~~ John Dough Ya great kid..ya elevated..going up against u..I'll fall fuck that.. ....I don't know whether to post 2 lines or not at all! this opener looks hella better than that dude's Damn looks like you took a shit..then went and posted it Wait hold up..let me go get a fuckin mod to close this not bad.. So ya tupac huh? are you just looking for a bit of fame? Cuz ya punches are about as played..as well..ya name! had a good beginning, lost it whith second line.. Its wrestling match..but in tha opening seconds u get pinned You want pacs name? well i guess you'll get shot up like him! kinda played..ehh..ok i guess Fuck a closer..shit..don't need one..i don't know whats worse Reading ya fucking name..or reading ya fucking verse! ehhhhh, so-so Overall, makaveli, dude, your in a battle .. this isnt story telling time..you really need to elevate badly..and John, you arent quite in the same boat, but if you were battling someone who actually knew what they were doing, you prolly woulda got beat..no hate to either, just being honest aiight? Vote ~ John Dough (i'm almost at poll vote, sorta..if this aint decided by then, i be back aight?) |
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02-16-04, 12:10 AM | #9 | |
Flyweight
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IP: F978 8610
y0, hit this up man, i took the time for yours...thanks..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114198 |
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02-16-04, 03:17 AM | #10 | |
Light Weight
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IP: 9CA0 C805
makaveli won this easily.....lol.....ok...maybe not....makaveli...u need to really concentrate on DISSING YOUR OPPONENT.....there is no point for a breakdown or quotes in this battle....it is obvious why John won...he had punches and a better verse that dissed his opponent....also.....Mak. u need to up ur vocabulary...and extend ur lines a little more for room to diss your opponent instead of talking about what vehicle u ride in...(opener)....
Vote - John...for having a verse that dissed his opponent instead of talking about himself.....
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02-16-04, 04:42 AM | #11 | |
PuRe AzN..
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IP: 7716 E80A
do i really have to explain this vote.. ok i guess.. this easly was a merking.. who really thinks that john dough had a chance?? i did lol mak should really coscetrate on trying to hit the oppentent with a punchline instead of actually hitting yourself with a loss too bad try and elevate a lot
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02-16-04, 01:50 PM | #12 | |
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IP: 1481 46A3
Uppin for tha kO
This is number 2 Trying to type 50
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02-16-04, 02:20 PM | #13 |
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IP: F42F 549C
ok if u gunna take four minutes to post that weak ass shyt just dun post
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02-16-04, 03:14 PM | #14 | |
Sane Scientist
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IP: 6142 D2A2
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Micaville-Rest: Once again elevate…Your battle should be way more directed towards Your opponent stop battling heads until you elevate. You battle was ridiculous John Dough: Flow was on point as well as structure…That’s all I need to state. Was good enough to beat him…John advice battle other heads that Are on your level so you can elevate. Stop battling emcee that are not On your level. Vote goes to JD Better verse period. |
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