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06-06-05, 11:29 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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O.V Dose (3-0) vs. Dizzee Rascal (1-0)
IP: 1AD2 C386
Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday
No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your poetry battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues! Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count! Your Topic: Poker face
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06-06-05, 01:55 PM | #2 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Checking in goodluck man
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06-06-05, 04:59 PM | #3 | |||||||
Maggot
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IP: 3CFB 2791
check....u2...it looks like i got one that will show this time
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Songs: O.V.Dose - Saturday Night Fever Battles: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/7/ovdosemusic.htm |
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06-10-05, 07:27 AM | #4 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: C9A2 1C80
Extension granted till Sunday due to exams
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06-11-05, 01:02 AM | #5 | |||||||
Maggot
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IP: 3CFB 2791
Topic : Poker Face
I brandish my poker face whenever life turns ugly My lack of emotion quietly humbles somebody above me in their own made up food chain which has invisible boundaries I dont respond to people who think they have to put dow the weak to make themselves feel better about their crippled hearts I use a blank face...its mission is to guard my beauty marks My ego starts to step in using cruel words as weapons It wont stop until all of your flas are spotted like leopard skin I wont let it begin, its hateful nature is laced with ignorace Take a deep breath ...pretendin yall are imagination figments When im finished protecting myself i set out looking for someone else Who I can share my experiences with including the anger i felt They try to help but every suggestion they lendin ends up in violence Why would I beat a guy when the only thing he struck is a pose Its senseless like a numb deaf blind guy missing his tounge and nose I show my emotions to only those who are closest It'll be a cold day in hell before my heart starts to open I hope they dont recognize what my secret weapon is and thats the reason why i try to keep my lips expressionless
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Songs: O.V.Dose - Saturday Night Fever Battles: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/7/ovdosemusic.htm |
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06-12-05, 03:35 PM | #6 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Ok Poker Face - Hence Satan's poker fate of world etc
Fire melting satans eyes a place full of lies Despise the witheld spiritual ritual war cries Tries a stable assault his opinions diabled Dancing with jesus and his army of angels Able to neglect the glands of famine that stands Like massacred fetus souls of innocence in his hand Angels in amazement lucifers expressions adjacent But his blood froze like periods of glaciation Abrasive he held an empire declined to perspire Desired for sweat to steam on satans eternal fire Choir of angels couldnt comply questioning why? The try gambling souls for an outcome of lies The sky rains blood clouding death in the cards Promosing souls captured in tortured minion yards Shards of vanity dictated in emotions so there no sanity So as satan folds his set so does the rest of humanity In the place he neglected to show the fate on his face And our souls on opaque cards cus they loosing with no trace........ |
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06-12-05, 11:19 PM | #7 | |||||||
Maggot
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IP: 28AD 5545
It wont stop until all of your flaws are spotted like leopard skin*
aiight lets get some votes on this
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06-13-05, 07:06 AM | #8 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 439B E775
O.V.Dose: strongest aspect of your piece in my opinion was the emotion and how you portrayed the thoughts and feelings of the person. Imagery was there but not that much. Enjoy how you went into detail about the reason of the poker face, different scenes and switching back and forth between several emotions. Flow was decent, bit off here and there, some rhyme words didn't come out the right way and all that. Structure was cool, had few insightful lines in there that made the reader stand still and think bout it, this I liked very much.
Dizzee Rascal: what I enjoyed so much about your verse was how you managed to combine strong imagery and raw emotion, your lines were packed with both aspects that made this an interesting piece to read. Flow was good, kept ya lines rather short, had nice sound expression...this all improves your flow. I like how you approached the topic, based on Satan and such, didn't actually expect any of you to come with it like this so that's was a pleasant surprise. Structure was okay, went indepth on the matter as well, pictured different scenes. In the end, my vote goes to Dizzee Rascal, he had this edge to his piece, different approach and all that.
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06-13-05, 07:13 AM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: F792 A5CF
O.V Dose-
Nyce concept 2 your peice. emotion wuz really strong throughout, not enough imagination in the portrayal ov ur ''poker face''...concept wasnt AS creative as dizzee rascal, but it wuz still strong & pretty insignhtful, culd ov expresed ur lines a lil better in places, few ov 'em were mad stretched so it took the sting out ov the flow as u read along, good emotion, u beat dizzee rascal in dat aspect ov ur peice, but da imagination an creativity ov ur scheme lacked a little.. Dizzee Rascal- Really nyce drop, emotion culd ov been a lil more deep & meaningful, but styll u got da win, good vocab, nothin wuz stretched each line wuz short & str8 to da point in ur peice, imagination wuz goiod, u had a more creative concept & scheme 2 ur topic thats fo sure, creativity in which u used ''the devil''throughout wuz strong, original...an very very diffrent 2 O.V Dose but datz wat i lyked most about ur peice, real good creativity in ur concept vote=dizzee rascal
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06-13-05, 07:41 AM | #10 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 439B E775
Closed, Dizzee Rascal wins
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