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12-08-03, 06:55 PM | #1 | |||||||
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21 Rule (1-0) vs 22 phillie Blunt (1-0)
IP: CB2E 7CE0
topic: It Wasnt An Accident
Due date: dec 12th Vote ends: dec 15th
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12-08-03, 07:58 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 1B3B C284
checkin in
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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12-10-03, 04:53 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 1B3B C284
It Wasn't An Accident Mom
Anger and hate live through my cold runnin vains Love it slowly fades away the envy always stains Pushed me from here lowered my self-esteem Punished me for being blessed or so it seems Three years ago I was one poor amazing athlete one of the best.. Didn't think possible cause I grew from concrete First year of rep soccer I made the provincials Yet you held me back from all my principles Destroyed my hopes dreams and main priorities Sterotyped my life path cuz of the poor majority So now i'm focused on one particular dream Accomplish ya wish make ya emotions scream I'm.. Creatin a future letter for you in a mortal crime Prepare a drastic action prevail it at a certian time Leave you gutted emotionly take away your love Ridacule your beliefs spit on the angels above Take your bible and burn it in the fire of hate Make you feel ridiculous for your seen mistakes Never once did I judge your morols on ghost Sat back and listened to every word you spoke Turns out me bein me wasn't in your eyes natural Me going professional wasn't living nor spiratual So you smashed my dreams like a fallen glass Didn't try to catch me you let me helplessly smash You was my mother My map suppose to guide Help me stay strong but that you didn't provide You incouraged failure the roads weren't marked Our journy as mother and son can't be sparked All because of this deminishing of my dream you killed... My ego and love by trying to raise surpreme This letter proves my mystic hate of lies Your a christian so am I I pray your demies For your actions of holding me back strong This letter is to prove what you did was wrong When you read this you'll realise I still hold a grudge And because of your inpulse then you have no love For you finding this letter is my faithful punishment You killed my soul tied my talent down in harrisment Emotions of hate are from a lost acomplishment What you did in the past wasn't at all an accident
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 Last edited by rule : 12-10-03 at 04:57 PM. |
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12-11-03, 08:19 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
in, n' deacon im officially 3-0
maven btk fgee
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12-13-03, 06:16 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
sorry for bein late..
Birth My mom 16, father 20.. wheres the hope?, Especially that night when the condom broke, Nights of bickering, hate portrayed, Father left for mistakes he made, Dad dismissed, when the news hit him, Knew he had a child, but wanted nothing to do with him.. A life distraught, parents un-passionate, as My mom would yell.. ......................you were only an accident, Crashing The Car I grew up, mother was somewhat nicer, until i smashed up the front end of the chrysler, she screamed at me, heart its in vault, and even the insurance knew.. it wasnt my fault, it was an accident, i would plead for her to hear, complaints about my birth, her eyes that tear'd, always went back to that.. whats the use, for every problem, im her general excuse, The Wedding I met a gurl, though life was hard, believe it or not, it was the gurl in the other car, insurance covered, legal issues apart, she talked to me, n' grasped my heart, mother furious, still enraged for the instance, and wanted nothing to do with me- -when i brought her home for Christmas, torn i walked.. the isle of love never cared, as i looked down the chapel.. she wasnt there, The Night Soon after, i started to get enraged, from feelings had, have feelings left insane, My mom went back to me, a son that doesnt, she bickered, until the knife tip hit her stomach, i could deal, with what was delt, for the life i had, and love un-felt, killing her was the only thing that i felt passionate, as on trial i sat.. "It wasn't an accident"
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12-13-03, 06:25 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 1B3B C284
good piece....that was well writtin....good luck...lets get some votes
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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12-15-03, 11:52 AM | #7 | ||||
Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
I liked the way rule wrote, ..calda, ..was to nice in my opinon , ., ..but i feld the style rule wrote his piece, some nice lines, ..good vocab..flowed good..both were enjoyable to read..but rule's verse was better in this battle = )
Vote = Rule
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Fuck you Last edited by Edicius : 12-15-03 at 12:02 PM. |
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12-16-03, 02:40 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 3A1D AC66
Hmm.. (dont count my vote.. but im just trying to get
people to vote on this.. but ima break it down ne ways) Rule.. Never really seen ya shit before.. and you came dope here the concept was good... YET, you really got caught up in the story to the point where it seemed like you didn't know what you were talking about. Your structure was on point and Some points were basic.. and the finisher didnt rhyme well at all, but thats fine, because you did a decent job with this. Calda.. For bein rushed, it kept me hooked. It was a bit basic, but to the point which is what i like to see. The concept was ehh.. but you handled it nicely. Glad you ended it with it not being an accident.. that was a good change up.. your story telling is on point.. but you lacked originality.. creativity was there.. n' flow was on point.. another decent job here Though a VERY close bout here, and i wouldn't mind seein a rematch sumtime.. i do THINK (key word think) that calda took this by only a bit. unofficial vote - calda (not swaying.. just trying to upp for people to vote n' expressin my views on this piece.. still 1-0 Rule |
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12-16-03, 02:59 PM | #9 | ||||
Banned: Permanent
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IP: 3A1D AC66
deacon.. did u sign out?
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12-16-03, 09:27 PM | #10 | ||||||
wanna play doctor????????
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IP: EEE7 9777
i've seriously gotta say this here was the hottest of the week...
i was really suprised...Rule stepped up the best he's ever done... n Calda was good like usual...but also a little better than usual... well damn... both of the flows were on point topics were hit well...good stories n all emotion was deep on Calda's...so was Rule's imagry...close there too...i really don't want to vote... it's too hard...lol...but since i'm in Rule's crew... in a battle this close... i won't vote... save any bitching or whatever ya know.. props |
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12-18-03, 06:33 AM | #11 | |||||||
-Merk Squad-
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Calda came like he usually does (great), but i think
rule put in that little extra effort trying to top you Both lovely piece's..but rules imagery got it for me Props both... V. Rule |
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12-18-03, 03:43 PM | #12 | |||
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IP: A9A7 727D
rule wins.
you voters are indecisive assholes. [closed]
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