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Da MaGiCiAn 7 | 1 | 16.67% | |
FreSh_EmCee | 5 | 83.33% | |
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05-19-04, 04:48 AM | #1 | |
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Da MaGiCiAn 7 VS FreSh EmCee
IP: 8D4A 5365
10 lines
normal rules checking in gud luck
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Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
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05-19-04, 05:01 AM | #2 | |
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heres ma verse:
"Magician" be wearing his "Outfit", with his "Cape, Hat And Magic~Stick" 1 Both me~and~you be "Seeing~Through" his rhymes like a "Bad~Ass~Trick" 2 Hows this guy supposed to be "Gangsta" when he's pullings "Rabbits Out~Of~His~Hat?" 3 I'm "Cutting" his rhymes to be "Permanently Shorthaired" like a "Siamese Cat" 4 He's got "Mixxed MC" on his "Sig" there on his "Respect List" 5 "Ghosts" cant see themselves in the "Mirror" so how u supposed to "Reflect~This?" 6 This guys like a "Wack Magician", everybody knows his "Secrets" 7 He "Used~To~Be Gh0St~MC" and got "Banned for Cheating",that left him "Speechless" 8 I'll ram your "Toes In Your Mouth" so next time u'll be "Unable To Speak" 9 And then you can tell me how it feels to "Taste Defeat/Taste Ya Feet" 10 Explanation: Line 2: Saying that i can see his weak tricks (rhymes) and like seeing through tricks (chicks) trying to be nice juz to get ma possesions Line 5: In his sig he got a respect list with Mixxed MC in it who got banned for cheating Line 6: Basically sayin that he has nothin against me to diss me with.. and he aint allowed to feed off my verse.. so whats he supposed to do? Line 7: Saying that people can see though weak magicians tricks, saying hes weak and i found out his secret that he got banned previously Line 8: His old nick woz Gh0st Mc and he got banned for cheating Line 10: ''Unable to speak'' meaning that he will be speechless after I drop my verse because he will have nothing to say.. ''Taste Da Feet'' and ''Taste Defeat'' both work as one.. ''Taste Da Feet'' works well with the first line because it means he is literally tasting his feet. And ''Taste Defeat'' sounds exactly the same as ''Taste Da Feet'' so it all works round as one good punchline gud luck, holla bak
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"First we lost Eazy, then we lost Pac
Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
Tupac Shakur, Me Against Tha World ____________
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05-19-04, 05:20 AM | #3 |
GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP: 4289 77F4
^^^^ dawg...a little word of advice...don't make your "explanation" longer or have more content than your actual verse because it would get ripped on.
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05-19-04, 07:18 AM | #4 | |
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IP: 8D4A 5365
lol aiight sorry, juz making sure ma point woz being get across properly
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"First we lost Eazy, then we lost Pac
Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
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05-19-04, 12:23 PM | #5 |
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IP: B1D7 A20F
Damn nigga u got like 18 lines goin its big lol well lets see
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05-19-04, 12:29 PM | #6 |
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Normal rulez no Crew VOTES RIGHT????? no Hate votes RIGHTTT no DICKRIdEING VOTES RIGHT!!!!!!
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05-19-04, 12:52 PM | #7 | |
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IP: F87E C296
checck in
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...i didnt pick this, sorry i gotta knock u out wit da quickness... ...Dey say Dis trick slick, Not even tylenol can cure my sickness... ...I dont mess wit hoes i jus get da Pro sluts... ...Ya 13 man crew will be left like a bakers dozen of Doughnuts... |
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05-19-04, 12:56 PM | #8 | |
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IP: F87E C296
iight son check it check it dis shit was spit in like 5 minutes look...
IM maad tired i shoulda battled u hella later.... Dis nigga couldnt elevate if i put him in a elevator... i'll write magician on your forhead so i Kno where i shitted... if u get me mad i'll start bustin caps and u gon need a bullet proof fitted.... Ya 'style' wouldnt be 'dope' if u could Rock 'Coke'..... Da only way u can 'Bust' a 'Cap' is if ya "Caps lock broke"..... If u think i lost this battle fa real you not Smart.... get me mad Ma tips be flyin out da toasta like Pop tarts... its a (W)rap so i'll Foil ya bitch, Ma flow stay hot so i'll boil ya quick... IM like a "King" wit a "Flu" cause im Royaly Sick.... its wack but i aint stretch ma lines so its maad short aand wack...wut do u expect from a 5 minute flow
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...i didnt pick this, sorry i gotta knock u out wit da quickness... ...Dey say Dis trick slick, Not even tylenol can cure my sickness... ...I dont mess wit hoes i jus get da Pro sluts... ...Ya 13 man crew will be left like a bakers dozen of Doughnuts... |
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05-19-04, 12:57 PM | #9 | |
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iight dats it cause it was maad borin 2 battle...cause u took like an hour 2 write ur verse n shit...i took 5 minutes...~1~
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...i didnt pick this, sorry i gotta knock u out wit da quickness... ...Dey say Dis trick slick, Not even tylenol can cure my sickness... ...I dont mess wit hoes i jus get da Pro sluts... ...Ya 13 man crew will be left like a bakers dozen of Doughnuts... |
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05-19-04, 12:59 PM | #10 | |
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IP: F87E C296
who doesnt kno dat i got banned from gh0st mc?...dats cause somebody thought i was cheatin...Because me n Mixxed are brothaz...and ma freind chris signed up on his computa and den it said dat we was all usin da same user name but it wasnt true cause i aint Lyrical demon....so dat line was kinda wack....I call dat a Bobo move....
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...i didnt pick this, sorry i gotta knock u out wit da quickness... ...Dey say Dis trick slick, Not even tylenol can cure my sickness... ...I dont mess wit hoes i jus get da Pro sluts... ...Ya 13 man crew will be left like a bakers dozen of Doughnuts... |
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05-19-04, 06:35 PM | #11 | |
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IP: 8D4A 5365
yo dawg u aint gotta explain y u got banned n who mixxed is aiight? its a battle lets juz let tha verses talk........uppin [1]
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"First we lost Eazy, then we lost Pac
Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
Tupac Shakur, Me Against Tha World ____________
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05-20-04, 01:36 AM | #12 | |
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IP: 8D4A 5365
come on peeps uppin [2]
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"First we lost Eazy, then we lost Pac
Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
Tupac Shakur, Me Against Tha World ____________
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05-20-04, 05:09 AM | #13 |
GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP: 4779 5259
"Magician" be wearing his "Outfit", with his "Cape, Hat And Magic~Stick" 1
Both me~and~you be "Seeing~Through" his rhymes like a "Bad~Ass~Trick" 2 ^^ decent opener I'm "Cutting" his rhymes to be "Permanently Shorthaired" like a "Siamese Cat" 4 He's got "Mixxed MC" on his "Sig" there on his "Respect List" 5 ^^ these are not hitting hard I'll ram your "Toes In Your Mouth" so next time u'll be "Unable To Speak" 9 And then you can tell me how it feels to "Taste Defeat/Taste Ya Feet" 10 ^^ DEFEAT LINES ARE WACK AND PLAYED OUT SINCE 4 YEARS AGO...that's an automatic loss IM maad tired i shoulda battled u hella later.... Dis nigga couldnt elevate if i put him in a elevator... i'll write magician on your forhead so i Kno where i shitted... if u get me mad i'll start bustin caps and u gon need a bullet proof fitted.... ^^^^ dats hard punch...but not creative Vote: Magician...punches/verse was not as played out |
05-20-04, 06:16 AM | #14 | |
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Both verses were pretty basic. Fresh MC, no need for all them expainations homie! lOl... Your verse was no where near being too complex to understand.
Fresh MC had more personals so he gets my vote. Ya'll pretty much tied in every other category besides dat. Vote=Fresh
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05-20-04, 11:53 AM | #15 | |
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Yeah.. Fresh MC had that defeat line which was semi decent. However, in order to elevate, you should try upping the wordplay... for instance having your foot in your mouth means something. So try to use that one line, than saying "so now you can taste da feet" in the next line... instead of just "cram your toes in your line" which is not only a bit obvious for the wordplay, but also not a great punch. Just off the top of my head.. you could do something like
"this kid predicting victory, but i got his ass beat now he taking back his words.. so i got him tasting da feet" ^ that's not great, but at least it's a little cooler in my eyes. anyway, v/ fresh.
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