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01-18-05, 07:16 PM | #1 | |||||||
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LADY~FIYA vs WICKED CLOWN
IP: 5671 DBDD
CHECK IN BY FRIDAY OR TOPIC WONT BE GIVEN POEMS DUE BY SUNDAY EDIT YOU LINK WITH AT LEAST 2 OTHER POETRY BATTLES IN THE LEAGUE YOU VOTED ON VOTING ENDS WENSDAY AT 12 EASTERN TIME.NO LINE LENGTH AND DONT WRITE A TOPICAL THIS IS A POETRY LEAGUE I WILL DQ YOU IF YOU WRITE A FUCKING TOPICAL I HATE THAT SHIT ITS NOT POETRY WINNERS RECIEVE 100,000 R.V SORRY NO SHOWS DONT GET PAIED YOU GOTTA ACTUALLY WIN GOOD LUCK TO BOTH
TOPIC-HEAVENLY PATH
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01-19-05, 12:37 AM | #2 | |||||||
Only the Illist
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IP: 1AF0 6ADD
c h e c k...
c h e c k... |
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01-19-05, 12:38 AM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 74E2 4E7B
checkity checkers......... good luck, wicked clown..
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01-23-05, 10:46 PM | #4 | |||||||
Only the Illist
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IP: 1AF0 6ADD
Golden Steps Looking down the face of eternity staring into the collective soul of all that is right gone from this life of sin, slowly i repent i accept into my life all that is powerful and good where once i was weak i am now strong i grow stronger still with the time that slowly passes my once dark and unenlightend soul is now a flutter with hope and the prommise of a new day, a new dawn and a new life to make all the wrongs into rights to replay every hateful second of my existance i kneel as i pray, i vow to only do right on my remaining journey so as i can meet god that fateful day, the day of my judgment for him to touch my shoulder and tell me ive done good as i pass through the gates and walk up the golden steps into the awaiting bliss i know my journey is complete |
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01-24-05, 12:21 AM | #5 | |||||
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IP: 34D2 D886
The Heavenly Path
----Familiar flesh, colors more sanguine……test a clear, pure and white mist---- ----Best friends, worst enemies, constant drama……hope, trust, and faith beyond belief----
----Forbidden sins and mistakes……cleansed spirit, purged souls, existence----
----No common doubt, for, you see the end..…the brakes seems like it won’t slow to stop----
----Tip-toeing on cracked, open egg shells……walking the tight ropes for the safety that follows----
----Either ashes to dust……or the sudden dust to ashes without questions just answers----
----Sins ending in purgatory……training your mind for eternal happiness, believing it’s promised----
----Voices never fading……sunshine as a dream, curtains are yet to be pulled, but they too wait----
----broken stairs by choice..…or the home with shiny gates, one could only wish and hope to pray for----
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01-24-05, 12:22 AM | #6 | |||||
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IP: 34D2 D886
Note: It is written in this format to present the heavenly path vs. the world’s tunnel.. The path is a stairway, it starts off as both being similar in size, because people of the world sometimes don’t know the difference between the two.. The farther you go the longer the stair.. You should get the rest.. and good luck, Wicked Clown..
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01-24-05, 12:56 AM | #7 | ||||
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IP: 1EDC 673C
lady got this one, sorry wicked i read your and loved it efore she dropped but man hers hit me, and her format of writing it was so nice,
lady gets this, wicked i knew you bith ould come good but she came 1% harder man get at mine
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01-24-05, 03:23 AM | #8 | |||||||
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IP: 5671 DBDD
Ok Wasnt Much Creativity From Either Of You That Made Me Mad Fiya You Had Good Vocab Imagery Wasnt Good Emotion Was Decent I Wasnt Really Feeling Your Poem Here Like I Usually Do I Understood The Poem And Where You Were Trying To Go I Even Liked The Writing Of It But I Feel You Aint Write The Issue Properly Here It Seems Rushed.
Wicked Like I Said Neither Of Yall Had Creativity Much You Had Decent Vocab Could Be Better Metaphores Is What You Lack And Need To Work On Good Emotion And Imagery Here The Imagery Is What Set It Apart From Fiyas Poem Here I Liked How You Wrote It And Approached The Topic From A Nice Prospective I Was Really Feeling Your Poem More Here Even Though It Shouldve Been Longer And Stop Writing In That Color Its Fucking Annoying. Vote-wicked Clown
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01-24-05, 06:57 AM | #9 | |||||||
Only the Illist
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IP: 1AF0 6ADD
thanks for the vote... 1-1... good luck LF
DONT FREEPOST AGAIN HOCAKE READ THE RULES THEY ALL TAKE EFFECT NEXT WEEK |
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01-24-05, 11:00 AM | #10 | |||||
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IP: 3037 50B7
Fiya had imagery and structure but Wicked had emotion, which I value above all other categories. His emotion made a swirl of colors be envisiioned in your head while Fiya yours seemed predictable and less enjoyable. But still good job both of you.
\\//ote = Wicked Clown
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01-24-05, 05:39 PM | #11 | |||||
Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 2C90 8920
im gonna hav 2 vote 4 wickedclown by a lil bit........wanted 2 vote for lady fiya but it jus didnt feel right
The thing that seperated the two poems was the emotion...more emotion came through in Wicked Clown's drop and it got me more involved in the poem...Lady Fiya's drop was not the usual sickness that we seen time and time again and i werent feelin the structure even tho u explained it.....it was a decent drop but lacked creativity and emotion...i say dis knowin Fiya gon drop sumin deep nxt week 2 shut me up.. no h8 ..Peace..RTF plz My vote=Wickedclwon
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01-24-05, 06:22 PM | #12 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3240 794D
Aii yAll Ima Have to come off a Thin Limb and Vote for Wicked But It was barely Won if ya ask Me because LAdy came Hard I really wanted to vote for her but It somethin Was Lacked I jus cant put my finger on it but i can tell it was absent LOL.....BUt I think you did Great but Wicked came out and did his thang And He did it better So my
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01-26-05, 08:07 AM | #13 | |||||||
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IP: 5671 DBDD
wicked clown wins closed
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