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| forgotten flow |
  
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5 | 83.33% |
| Linguistics |
  
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1 | 16.67% |
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03-05-05, 08:25 PM
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I'm no vet!..just skilled
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Linguistics vs forgotten flow
IP: 2168 98AB
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20 - 30 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic: Thoughts before drownding Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 03-06-05 at 08:25 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
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03-05-05, 08:37 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Linguistics has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-05-05 08:37 PM.
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03-05-05, 09:10 PM
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
Forgotten Flow has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-05-05 09:10 PM.
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03-06-05, 04:54 PM
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I'm no vet!..just skilled
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IP: 0825 899A
~Spirit Submerged~ . Curious feeling....lookin over edge of cliff time has come now....for death I wished feet rise, eyes close....air lifting my shirt wishin for worse...pain...missing the hurt sudden shock....no feelin...loss of breath pause for stress..press..caused on chest eyes bubble..blood stops..lungs collapse wantin other choices but that time has past should of thought before...but never relized the pain I'd cause...the look in others eyes slowly i fall....scared....cant see the depth devil has found me....marked me with a hex I'm blessed...wit hatred...for self and others still smutherd...in water...why must I suffer but I've chosen this fate...forced my wake no i cant complain...wit the choices i take waves thrash above...air...I cant catch enuff legs flale about..sudden danger such a rush heart slowing.....arms weak from pressure how far have I gone? its to hard to measure memories flash...sunday school teachings bike rides wit father...Oh what was i thinking how could I do this...so selfish in my acts jus a hellish fact..im done..takin soul to max a price on beileving? not thinking wit reason I turned my back to god...who was i seekin I searched for truth....and found my awnser at the bottom of this lake...man the chance of figuring out the past...thats all I thought about headed strait for hell...path to heaven in doubt
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03-07-05, 07:14 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
aight yall. my mind works deeper than most so yes this is the thoughts i'd be thinkin. if its too comple for u to understand, then dont penalize me for it. DONT VOTE. i figured it would be better if i spitted from my real thoughts. so here they go...
My body submerged in this water is nothing. My soul’s been drownin in sorrow for years/ So I leave this frigid world as an adolescent who fronts about having no fears/ But I do have fears. Like how my father took out his rage on his child of the oldest age/ And used five fingers to beat his face, then sat and laughed as he bleeds in pain/ Then this ten year old became a man and used my newfound brains to extract revenge/ Asked my dad to move with him and made his and his wifes life livin hell for months on in/ So I ask u why would I have any thoughts on losin my air circulation to H2O?/ I’ve died before, I’ll just come back once again and make my presence known/ I tote the spirits of the young and the old as i enter the soul of the mighty god Poseidon/ and face the embrace of the most un controlled substance since the Watts riots/ wrap myself in chains to keep my instincts restrained as i enter this saturated domain/ see only God can judge me, and only his son can relate to my pain/ i wonder what my mom will think when im gone, the unepected death of her youngest kid/ Cant be a whole lot since she doesnt thihk that much of me as i live/ 16 years old, girlfriend's already got a kid and mine's soon on the way/ at least he wont grow up and have a rageaholic father like me/ and its likey, that i wont be allowed to die if i drown in this moment of time/ cause i've spit verses at God too, so i might've pissed him off wit my rhymes/ so fuck it, here goes nothin, im soon to be dumped into the ocean blue/ time halted for 20 lines in my mind to let thoughts go through... ~Yung Duke~
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03-07-05, 08:10 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
uppin.............................................
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03-07-05, 10:15 PM
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I'm no vet!..just skilled
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IP: 0825 899A
upppppppiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnn ddddaaaaaaammmmnnnnnniiiiiiittttttttt!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!
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03-08-05, 08:49 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
gkrbfewhkjadhidshkjcdskl<<<<<WTF was that?????????
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03-09-05, 10:15 PM
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I'm no vet!..just skilled
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IP: 3240 794D
upsy dazy.............................................. .........people vote
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03-10-05, 07:37 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
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03-11-05, 08:52 PM
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
Upupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupupup
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03-14-05, 11:34 AM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: 6410 8237
dfljfslks dm;sdfjljvojhfroujrkm,vli fjuoxjdhfjdsj l;sdjflkjodjoijdf ;dj foadsadj
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03-14-05, 08:52 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 5A97 ACD3
Voted For: Forgotten Flow
Damn...this battle was hot I just had to go w/forgotten flow...the emotion u put into this was amazing. I was feelin everything, structure was a lil off, but u made up for it with the vividness of your description. Not taking anything away from linguistics, cuz ya shit was hot too, but Flow jus used the topic and his personal experiences to create a mad tight verse...keep it up yall good shit!!! Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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03-15-05, 09:41 PM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
uppin............................................. .................................................. ................
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03-16-05, 01:23 AM
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IP: 5867 FD83
Voted For: Forgotten Flow
this was so hard to judge... Ling: you locked the whole thoughts approach, you had nice imagery... so much emotion was felt. the lines were the shortest ive seen since provoke. you had a nice layout, you came through with the Topical... every word fit , had nice flow the struct made it so easy to read line to line, however i wasnt really feeling the style, i liked the way you wrote just the feel, but i wanted a background image of the whole thing as well, still dope.. nice. forgotten: wow, the words spoke to me, i feel like this has happened to me with a different effect. you have nice style, but i think your bars are a little stretched, tone them down a little, other than that your imagery was hot, your flow was decent. the overrall image was easy to picture in my mind. wisely approached, you came with a background image and i liked that. its not nessecary but it helps to clarify the motif of the topical youve exposed through your eyes. word? nice job done here... vote/ forgotten
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