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05-02-05, 06:53 PM | #1 | |||||||
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This verse here......
IP: 00C0 B13D
A verse i did. Im leavin the rest of the story out, so take what u can from it.
He saw em comin like chicken and flipped a bitch German engineerin my ass, he clipped a ditch And flipped the six Between his, the bitches blood and the blow it left a cryptic mix Evidence was needles fully loaded, tips drip with fix Jaw wired in the hospital, its his lip that clicks Like Starvin Marvin, often off in A high searchin for the only lost endorphin Hes past hittin the weed but I watched him coughin He said, save him the money, buy an auctioned coffin "Deaths waitin by my side, my only option off'rin Hell or here", grabs a tape, says "This my last accapella here Put it on one of ya beats, buy your ass some Belvedere" I ask which to spill for him, I can trade the Bel for 'Clear Saw him turn red faced, but he held the tear Ignorin visions of him leavin waitin till his health appeared But thats hopin against hope And if he dies out of respect, Ill blow more sherm and less coke Tie the hemp to firm the best rope Thinkin I can make it to heaven when it aint my turn but lets hope
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-02-05, 09:57 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 00C0 B13D
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-03-05, 12:07 AM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 00C0 B13D
KIlluminatic..................
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-03-05, 07:01 PM | #4 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 00C0 B13D
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-03-05, 07:42 PM | #5 | ||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0268 34D0
Ay, I'm feelin this verse...nice multies...structure was pretty nice...topic was kinda deep...
Overall...8.5/10 Return tha favor |
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05-03-05, 07:55 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 3508 3A5F
yeah i was feelin' this, i could relate to this well.
nice flow, very personal. guess who this is? |
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05-04-05, 12:24 AM | #7 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 00C0 B13D
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-04-05, 12:37 AM | #8 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 79B1 EDD4
some decent vocab but you gotta work on
maintaining a good structure throughout ya verse, keep you lines equal in syllable counts that will help the flow, try to work on your bars instead of just writing them n leaving them, a lil more work and you could had some koo shit in that verse, just think outside the box man i was thinkin this is more a topical verse.... . i thought this couldve been koo...good concept) . He said, save him the money, buy an auctioned coffin "Deaths waitin by my side, my only option off'rin . bodies dropin to save money, but youve seen my britle coffin death awaits by me honey, i wish you could move so i could off-him . ^^add more wordplay and a better ryhme scheme... hope this helps, hit up my drop, its just for laughs
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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05-06-05, 03:59 PM | #9 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 00C0 B13D
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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05-06-05, 08:54 PM | #10 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
closed no link , pm me a link and this will be re-ope[ened
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