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07-25-05, 09:46 AM | #1 | |||
Skadoosh!
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LW TITLE: Sixth Sense (4-3) vs. E.C (3-3)
IP: 970C 3B57
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07-25-05, 10:06 AM | #2 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 0D11 88C9
ok this is a nice topic to do....yea checkity checkmate e.c. g/l man........
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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07-25-05, 02:13 PM | #3 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
check.... i got this g'luick to you aswell mate
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07-28-05, 09:09 AM | #4 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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Con~Sequences
IP: 0D11 88C9
...The actions that I made took the final flight
I gripped my hand but I always used to gripe Freely within myself it started to escape, my soul Until some actions that I just couldn’t barely control... The sequences of my life went by so fast and turned into pieces My sins and deeds were made into one form through the thesis All that it could find was locked in a cage philosophical rage That I express my emotions on this... fucking old page My life actions, too deep to swallow fully, I’m depressed Never will tell if it’s a fake or the truth but I still confessed That these actions I receive are about to withhold my stress That I feel boredom in my mind when my heart feels interest All u can see is lies, now that u know the truth in the eyes Of the beholder I think in my mind that this story is to be wise I give out actions to follow but for some reason I wont obey So finally I find the final way, and start to say what I have to say “ The consequences I took were looking and started the escaping The hole in the mind was enough to escape it was a humungous gaping Followed the sins and deeds to my heart inside the esophagus plagued There laid the tombstone of the things I said in my head where I played But why was this happening to me as I saw the reason, it was on purpose I went up to reach my nostrils and sneezed as I came out onto the surface Wet around me, as in a different plateau just so deep in a different level So much steel I felt the metal, that’s the way I started to see who was the rebel” ...After all these phrases, im on a summit Can see all the faces, and land on my stomach The the eye that focused light, I could see the lenses The sequences were lies as I just told u my con~sequences... --------------------------------- EXPLANATIONS- i used consequences in a different way con~sequences that means con=lies sequences=actions.....its jus in a different way.......
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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07-29-05, 08:23 AM | #5 | |||||||
Evolution
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Consequences
IP: 0DD2 7DAA
As i sit here cold, all on my own, the floor is freezing, a bag of loot by my side, and my stomache is bleeding, i start heaving, believing that god isnt with me today, he's saying all those bad things you've done, it's time to pay, my life aint over, it's just begun, i'm living an honest life, it pays big, no need to lie........... i only carry a knife, hitting one bank after another, times can only get better, untill this day i was shot, gloomy, it left me deader than weather, . . . . . . . . It started on a cold day, the ice drops were frozen, the light shined on me, like it was me being chosen, my time to shine? but i didn't think i could do it, too many times before, but i guess i gotta go through it, one more time and its a big break, if it goes to plan, so i take a gun, and secure it in my right hand, walk up to the entrance, stare at the clerk, she screamed, i burst open the door, and shouted " EVERYONE PLEASE LEAVE!", shots of sharp sounds surrounded the building, they ran, i walked up to the desk with the gun in my hand, "PUT THE MONEY IN THE BAG BITCH, DON'T TRY ANYTHING STUPID", she started shaking and crying, i could tell she was a new kid, barely in her 20's blonde hair, pretty stunning from back here, i stare into her eyes gently all she did was track fear, . . . I've got the money, lets break, sirens start to crowd the area, helicoptor in the sky, swat came, which made things alot scarier, kill or be killed, "FUCK IT" i let loose with the pistol, capping cops, killing all the mother fuckers, untill there backing stops, i made a run for it, 3 shots in my back, i turned round to shoot, got another one in my stomache, there was no sign off the loot, i saw it fly in the air, i started crawling "DAMN I NEED TO GET UP", started running slowley, fast as i could then i got fed up, my time has come, it was meant to be "NO LOOKING OUT?" "GOD I THOUGHT WE WERE BOYS THAT HELPED WHEN IN DOUBT!", "Sorry son, your time has come" " WELL I SUPPOSE IT'S GOODBYE", there is consequences for all your actions................................ ............................now it's my turn to take that trip to the sky!, |
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07-29-05, 02:09 PM | #6 | |||||
Still The Dopest Alive
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IP: 3240 794D
Sixth Sense:
Decent verse, i think you could have wrote it a little better. Your imagery was ok but you should work on that a bit more. Be more descriptive in some areas. Your vocabulary was great though and that made up for some the abscence of imagery. The story was a little foggy in my eyes, it really didnt point out much about consequences and i understand you broke the word down to use it better but i think you could have wrote something more entertaining. Overall: 6.4/10 E.C. : You also had a decent verse, i liked the plot of the story and the idea behind it, but that idea has been used a million times. Be more creative with the storyline next time, use a different set up or a different ending for your story. The whole "doing something illegal and dying" bit is played out but you were still original in your story. Decent vocabulary, imagery was on point, and your verse flowed off the tongue pretty well. I think you took this battle but you could have been more creative. Overall: 7.1/10 Vote: E.C
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07-30-05, 05:59 AM | #7 | |||||||
Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
k will do that next time thanks for the vote....
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08-01-05, 06:33 AM | #8 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 1EAF 3328
Voting is closed, E.C wins
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