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Myself | 4 | 100.00% | |
KOOL COL-B | 0 | 0% | |
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08-31-06, 05:37 PM | #1 | ||||||
Whys That?
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Myself vs KOOL COL-B
IP: 5285 DC82
Topic: Under the bridge
Line limit: Open Check in due 3rd of september. 11:59 Pacific Battles due 7th of september.11:59 Pacific Voting will end 11th of september. 11:59 Pacific Next round will go up 12th of september Looser leaves the tournament |
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08-31-06, 06:17 PM | #2 | |||||||
Tha 1st member of S.W.A
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IP: 5350 A834
tha bridge, queens bridge, th th, th th tha brige, th th th tha bridge, th th th tha bridge
werd
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09-01-06, 09:59 AM | #3 | |||
1926
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IP: 3240 794D
..... I'm here.
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09-02-06, 05:02 PM | #4 | |||
1926
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
"Environmentalists and neighborhood groups in Charlestown and Cambridge are gearing up a last-ditch campaign to block state environmental approvals for the Central Artery project's 16-lane Scheme Z interchange. Mayor Flynn met yesterday with Charlestown residents to hear their concerns that the 11-story, 700-foot-wide structure, which would cover an area the size of Boston Common at the northern entrance to the city, would overwhelm their neighborhood with visual blight, shadows, noise and air pollution." - Peter J. Howe, Boston Globe Staff
Watch the lost homes-pebbles fall across the levels of distrust in the form of broken decks, cinderblocks, & metal. Twisted rebar scars the insignificant, as the city starts to give in to the last minute heartache in Cambridge. Sucking dust fog misers through clots of cloth fibers, searching for our front door under spores of hot tires. Cambridge, MA: June 12, 1971 Grass noels and swinging feet traded for gravel and industry, for profitable rather than placement in a jaded synergy. Dope sales fail as the streets spar for the right to live in spark; community implodes for peeks at lightening bugs in jelly jars. Stick your tongue out and capture black winter from the side of ditch as the plow rolls down the cracks; lick the dirty snow as is blows off the overpass into your lungs. "The grotesque monstrosity that will be the new Central Artery requires a certain power of imagination to be grasped. Maybe that's why people are only now beginning to get upset about it." - Robert Campbell, Boston Globe Correspondent As the dandelion's backs collapse, and we find sun from under the black lungs of central arteries hung, the nooses drip sandy skies along youth blessed limbs gone spry, while the knots clot and streets lose lives. From box tops on Boston blood clots, I sift shadows of lost Monday flowers wondering where the sun's gone, and why the last note I saw was the pallbearer of gun shot. "Several environmental leaders and employees within state environmental agencies are accusing the Dukakis administration of bending and sidestepping environmental protection regulations in a rush to obtain final approvals for the $5 billion Central Artery/Third Harbor Tunnel project." Hostility mounts sounds of desperation, on concrete grounds grasping threads of light now, from the cracks of center stages. Faces grow pale in the midnight months, days know no sail, The slate strips lives as son's grip knives; take the veil, close your eyes to your own unsure crimes of hope and desperate times........................... we're all blind, it's time to learn life's loopholes of fallen nights. Sources in state government said that Environmental Affairs Secretary John P. DeVillars and agency heads under him have been facing intense pressure from Artery officials to approve a proposed 16-lane interchange called Scheme Z despite possible infringements on protected parkland at the mouth of the Charles River and questions about adherence to environmental review procedures." - Peter J. Howe, Boston Globe Staff Beneath the artery overpass, a city screams, a city chokes debris and midnight masterpiece, and from the Central Artery we live life as Z ... the long forgot community. |
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09-06-06, 03:06 PM | #5 | |||
1926
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
... if you no show I'll fucking lynch you.
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09-06-06, 05:13 PM | #6 | |||||||
Tha 1st member of S.W.A
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IP: 5350 A834
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a guy named "Myself", he wuz depressed, he would sit and contemplate then hiz girl called him up like "hey wuts goin on? im late" he found out tha condom broke, he impregnated hiz girl n plus he got an STD, so now he hated tha world moms kicked him out.he needed food, and lotion fo hiz rash so... he tried 2 win verbal emotions fo tha cash $100 could put food in hiz body fo tha next week but 1st round he got k.o.'d by a godly magic sex beast named KOOL he packed hiz shit, hiz baby mother n kid couldnt afford an apartment, so they moved under a bridge he shouldve stuck wif skateboardin and hardcore rock but he tried rap, now hiz mattress iz a cardboard box layin there, high, smokin sum sherm wif hiz bitch how'd he afford that?? ... he's got sperm on hiz lips anyway, they layin there hungry, lookin at graffitti covered walls when he asks somebody fo sum change, they say "go suck yo muthaz ballz" they starvin. but they got sum shitty couch from 1980-sumthin hiz girl's like "OMMFG, i think tha babys commin!!" they cant support it, so he kicks her. ouch, hobo style abortion they throw tha corpse in tha river n let it float out into tha ocean now he's like "fuck this shit" he wants 2 git a gun n go insane thoughts of homicide/suicide start runnin thru hiz brain but he dont have a gat, so he takes a broken peice of glass slashes hiz girls throat wif it, she grabs her throat, chokin and she gasps then he stabs it thru hiz stomach. its no wonder he did cuz that spicca got fucked frum livin under tha brigde lmao werd
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09-07-06, 03:35 PM | #7 | |||
1926
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IP: 3240 794D
Lmao ... wow
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09-08-06, 08:06 PM | #8 | |||||
All these Dead Presidents
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IP: 20E8 620D
Well i'm not quite sure what the hell to say.
Atti - Good verse, really good verse. It's a crying shame it was placed against such b.s. I really enjoyed the story line here. Not much I really need to say though considering what the opponent had to offer. Col B - Wtf? There is nothing to say. This was attrocious at best. =D \V/ - Atti.
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09-08-06, 08:53 PM | #9 | ||||
New to RV
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IP: 2FC3 39DD
uhm yeh
atticus - *copies post from rb* yeh i read this on rv, shit was dope. this seemed to have a slurred word scheme that brought multisyllable strings along very well, and with not any over the top vocabulary, but enough to make it seem complex, the quptes however, did seem to mess up the meter, i also loved how you took the topic and jut made it a little more complex and metaphorical than most peopel would've done.. so good job woith that, and great job with the piece. colb - uh, enough slang and incorrect spelling. rhyme scheme was decent. lol at the originality though, i give yout hat, but it wasn't that good.. not atrocious at best like powit said... but pretty bad v- self
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09-09-06, 12:31 AM | #10 | |||||||
Under Oath
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IP: F8C0 2149
KOOL-B that was pretty funny and flowed nice an all , but damn dog this is a topical tourney not front lienes, i can understand your concept and what your getting , atty your creaitivity is beyond insane wordplay flow sructure, vocab, you really killed it nice job
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09-09-06, 02:40 PM | #11 | |||
WhoAreYou?
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IP: A181 D033
Myself - you did a dope job with this i liked how you got the articles and pictures to put the words you wrote into greater context. thios increased the level of relevance and emotion in this piece and i thought that was pretty dope. i thought the vocab level was adequate for the desired effect of the piece. good drop
Kool - it was funny and you made an ok attempt at the topic, but it just wasn't enough to take this at all in my opinion. vs/ Myself |
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09-10-06, 08:21 AM | #12 | |||
Poet's Daughter.
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IP: FCDF A479
myself- This was a good piece. I liked the way you approached and the quotes. Your imaginary was good, I had a picture in my mind of the people being trapped under debris and scraps of metals, made me think of ants, Lol. Your take on the Topic was refreshing, actually it gave me some inspiration to write. The metaphors in your verse was very decent, I liked it, also along with your wordplay, very creative. Uh damn I wish I can explain more But I gots to get to work..Grrrr good verse.
Kool Col-B..Nice verse, really made me laugh, it was very much entertaining. Again I have to go to work, wish I can explain more, but I can say this more people on this site need to write something like Kool Col B, not something generic. Good verse "the topics aren't the problem. the shitty cliche topicals you unoriginal dick shits write are" ...So on that note. My vote goes to Myself, I really did Liked Kool Col-B, if he wrote more and detailed more in his verse, using metaphors ect ect to support his storyline, I would vote for him. Good battle.
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09-10-06, 12:19 PM | #13 | ||||
Just searching.
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IP: 707B E979
Atticus - I disliked the quotes in the middle of the piece and skipped over them...they had no relevancy to the verse itself, though it did to the topic; and I understand the last part of the poem (albeit the misspelling of 'forgot' when it should be 'forgotten') where you mentioned Z because it was in the quote, but, they really halt the flow of the entire piece.
Anyway, the topic was alright. Liked the jellyjar-firefly metaphor...prettty decent vocabulary...you missspelled gnoll, shitface...uhm...8.5/10 Kool Col-B: Perfection. Quote:
The execution of this line is impeccable. The flow is breathtaking, and the way you misspelled every single word conveyed a sense of a hidden genius. .05/10 Well... 7/10 cuz it was sexy. Vote: Atticus |
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09-10-06, 05:01 PM | #14 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
Myself advances to second round
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