Legend
Sinnister
Paranoid

They could not silence our tounges with their malicious lies,
Their unforgotten violence, remember those who died.
My mortality left behind,strength arise, my entity freed.
Cries of life, forsaken by god, I wander aimlessly.
I beseech you all, my calling for the fate of all, believe.
Take me away my soul was caged, now released
Walking over the abyss with angels by my side
Although there's nothing else to see, I'm blind..

My voice lost, a hostile brain generated
Kept in one, failin to reign the frustrated
A ghosts trigger, justice was provoked
This lost soul spoke, hopeless and a joke
Fragmented people, scared to be equal
Always lonesome, but faired to be lethal
Hesitation was provin, situated at dawn
The wolfs moon, fearing the cats yawn
Impossible to be defeated, easily won
Rank extortions explode, carrying a lone
My kingdom functions, ly all this desperation
Unable to conceive, thy twist separation

hookx2:
The names of the dead whispered in tongues
Voices lie still, songs left unsung
Bury these words in ashes and blood
Here lie the worlds of dreamers decayed and unloved


In this world of the desperate and lost cast in filth
Compassion condemned in this nightmare fulfilled
Born and enslaved to this modern age
Where blood stains each step of this path we have paved
What price for our reign, what cost for their fate,
In this night un-ending when dawn comes too late
For each life that's stolen and each cry unheard
For our lust that's written in scars on this Earth
The lies which they teach with forked tongues they speak
Of this world created to conquer, to rule their greed.......

hookx2:
The names of the dead whispered in tongues
Voices lie still, songs left unsung
Bury these words in ashes and blood
Here lie the worlds of dreamers decayed and unloved

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Damn this was actually pretty good, I liked the hook, nice touch.

Paranoid:
Your flow was great, structure on par. The shortness of your lines just made it stand out all the more. I like your choice of language. All in all, nice job bro.

Sin:
Damn man, nice job on the hook (i'm sure it wasnt TOO hard to come up with, but it went along good) Your structure wasnt as good as Par's, but it didnt seem to hinder your flow much at all. I liked the vocab tyou used, not overdone, just enough.

You both seemed to get your points accross well enough, keep it up!

7/10

RTF in the link on my sig, peace.

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Blow It - Topical

Hurry up and drop some links so bonehead doesnt lock ur' shit

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Blow It - Topical

^^^^^^^^^^Thanks For the warning man..............

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lol, no prob man

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Blow It - Topical

Fine
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2453341

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nice stuff but lines too short flow was ok you could've easily rhymed it more structure somewhat like mine

my facts never phony they please and has taste like macaroni and cheese hit targets with guns and get market funds like investers, account blank need amounts in banks like
Bill Gates have ill fate on computers be boss everywhere with software

^wtf

anyway thanks for the feed Mentalz.

uppin

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2454430

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shaft 26 , please don't free post in my open mics

Thank You

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good stuff i also liked the hook need a little bit of help on structere

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props to both of u sinnister u came hot on this good flow and the 2nd best flow ive seen from a dope topical head

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^^^^^^Thanks, For the feedback.,..................

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