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12-31-06, 10:37 AM | #1 | |||
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19. TEF (5-6) vs. 20. Stanza (10-12)
IP: F956 A220
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12-31-06, 09:11 PM | #2 | ||||
Please excuse My Sickness
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IP: CCBE 9926
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12-31-06, 09:55 PM | #3 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 9051 E2C3
Yeah
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...898#post3131898 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238908 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238898 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3132351 10 Lines.
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01-02-07, 08:45 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: CCBE 9926
Tef?
Rap Is like Models Full of Skilled dimes and voters are ready to jus smash it and your skills could be the doorknob of models..and niggas still wont grab it Man your verse so wack niggas close they eyes when they scroll pass it Your skill Is jus Garbage in Disquise.....And nobody wants to Unmask shit and everybody know Yo Girl Is like a Police officer Jus flashin nigga's for the money Tef likes to holla at the ladies....bcuz seeing them close their ears looks funny 5-6?....Oh I see Thats Your age I Thought It was your battle rec Im the ace of the Card Game nigga...This joker gets Laughed out the deck Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on -done-
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01-03-07, 06:11 PM | #5 | ||||||
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LoL.... You aint hear no Audio fool, good fake personal tho. ok look
IP: 600A 6F23
He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed
Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas I seen the ball drop for the new year but Stanza? He’s~fagging He waited for balls to drop too…This homo gets excited for T-Baggin… …And he’s having, A history of bad names? he’s~on~par To Influenza Stanza name, he thought of Old ass Nissan cars I clicked your myspace bro, wack punches make you look like Kool Moe dee? 2 wack bars in the mag?.. You aint spitin crack you do it, we hopin you’ll O.D fucka
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01-03-07, 07:30 PM | #6 | |||
Flyweight
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IP: B66A 4983
stanza
Man your verse so wack niggas close they eyes when they scroll pass it Your skill Is jus Garbage in Disquise.....And nobody wants to Unmask shit ...ight just Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on ...ight tef He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team ...lol His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas ...lol I clicked your myspace bro, wack punches make you look like Kool Moe dee? 2 wack bars in the mag?.. You aint spitin crack you do it, we hopin you’ll O.D ...ight stanza, the two i quoted were your best to me, the others i thought your concepts were ight but i wasnt feeling the execution, the models thing was so-so at best, and the ears thing i wasnt feeling at all... tef, my vote would go to you, more consistant, better creativity, some good humour, and a pretty descent flow as well, id say your opener was the bar of the match for me... V:tef |
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01-03-07, 07:48 PM | #7 | |||
Light Weight
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IP: 7E01 785E
Stanza
Rap Is like Models Full of Skilled dimes and voters are ready to jus smash it and your skills could be the doorknob of models..and niggas still wont grab it ^^Huge stretch. His skills could be doorknobs of models? That just doesn't work. Too abstract. Man your verse so wack niggas close they eyes when they scroll pass it Your skill Is jus Garbage in Disquise.....And nobody wants to Unmask shit ^^Better than the opener... but i'm just not feeling it. Nothing hardhitting, and everybody know Yo Girl Is like a Police officer Jus flashin nigga's for the money Tef likes to holla at the ladies....bcuz seeing them close their ears looks funny ^^Horrible wording... i get it but the wording made it take a sec. 5-6?....Oh I see Thats Your age I Thought It was your battle rec Im the ace of the Card Game nigga...This joker gets Laughed out the deck ^^Okay, but no real connection. Not bad, though. Set-up seemed like it would take it in a different direction but it was decent. Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on ^^Wording is killing you... "pick at you being mute" is just plain bad. You had a nice concept but the wording fucked it over. vs. TEF He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team ^^If you tied this in to Stanza it would be a lot better. Right now it's just okay. His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas ^^This was played, seen this a good amount of times. With that said, your wording's improved. I seen the ball drop for the new year but Stanza? He’s~fagging He waited for balls to drop too…This homo gets excited for T-Baggin… ^^WHAT!?!?!?!? DO NOT DO THAT ~ CRAP. That's fucking wack in itself. Aside from that, the punch is weak. …And he’s having, A history of bad names? he’s~on~par To Influenza Stanza name, he thought of Old ass Nissan cars ^^No... not liking. Weak wording with a noobish style and a weak punch. I clicked your myspace bro, wack punches make you look like Kool Moe dee? 2 wack bars in the mag?.. You aint spitin crack you do it, we hopin you’ll O.D ^^Terrible set-up but decent, yet played closer. I think TEF gets this, although that "~" nearly had me going with Stanza. Overall, he just came with harder punches. Vote: TEF |
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01-04-07, 02:37 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 685C 0602
Rap Is like Models Full of Skilled dimes and voters are ready to jus smash it
and your skills could be the doorknob of models..and niggas still wont grab it this had horrible wording and was difficult to follow wut u were going for with it. It made little sense and was a poor analogy at best. Man your verse so wack niggas close they eyes when they scroll pass it Your skill Is jus Garbage in Disquise.....And nobody wants to Unmask shit This was better than the opener, but still was not that impressive, the first line was decent, but the second was nothing special. and everybody know Yo Girl Is like a Police officer Jus flashin nigga's for the money Tef likes to holla at the ladies....bcuz seeing them close their ears looks funny Again, poor wording makes it difficult to follow, and makes it less hard hitting. I guess I don’t know if the punch would be hard hitting even if it was worded better though. 5-6?....Oh I see Thats Your age I Thought It was your battle rec Im the ace of the Card Game nigga...This joker gets Laughed out the deck Second line was alright, still not very well worded, the opener was not hard hitting at all, had a pre-school type feel to it, but the second line came back nicely, just need better wording Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on This was a nice line, just very poorly worded, dragged out, try cutting out some syllables and just needs to flow better. Overall, the wording was very poor and really hurt the verse. Punches were not very hard hitting, but could have been improved with better wording. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team I liked this line…nice punch, solid opener started out very well. His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas Went from a nice start to a poor follow up, wording was a little off, and the punch is played and did very little I seen the ball drop for the new year but Stanza? He’s~fagging He waited for balls to drop too…This homo gets excited for T-Baggin… While im not a fan of the homo lines, this was decent. It was a nice attack, again doesn’t compete with the opener, but decent line. …And he’s having, A history of bad names? he’s~on~par To Influenza Stanza name, he thought of Old ass Nissan cars This just wasn’t hard hitting at all, in fact…it had almost no relevance, other than the ending multi was decent. I clicked your myspace bro, wack punches make you look like Kool Moe dee? 2 wack bars in the mag?.. You aint spitin crack you do it, we hopin you’ll O.D This I liked, the first line made me laugh a lil and the ending was decent as well. Overall, the opener and closer were good, and the best two lines of the battle. Some poor wording and played punches hurt the verse. But the punches that did hit, as well aas the whole verse actually made sense… Vote: Tef |
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01-05-07, 04:49 AM | #9 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: 670E 9063
5-6?....Oh I see Thats Your age I Thought It was your battle rec
Im the ace of the Card Game nigga...This joker gets Laughed out the deck Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on VS. He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas This battle wasn't all that impressive. Stanza, you seem to be stuck in a place where you have nice concepts but really crappy wording. TEF has improved though, his concepts are still there and now he is improving his wording in places. Although you do need to drop any symbols you decide to put in the verse unless they are necessary for the punch because they look gay otherwise. Anyway, your verse overall was better and your quotables were stronger than Stanza's. V/ - TEF |
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01-06-07, 12:04 AM | #10 | |||
I Hurt.
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IP: F956 A220
Uppin over no-shows
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01-06-07, 02:48 AM | #11 | |||
Light Weight
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IP: 5163 CDCF
Nigga You jus Hatin bcuz Rapverse knows the Stanza's the realest Don
I could Pick at you being mute .....But thats what voters do to their Speaker when yo audio is turned on vs. He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team His record here is respectless, he rhymes bitter and recklace If losing's a state of mind…Stanza’s brain is probably bigger than texas ^wtf @ spelling "reckless" wrong tho lol .. this was an avg battle. i thought stanza's closer could've been cool with a nice set up & proper wording. i quoted it ne way, but still could've been a lot better than it was. wasn't feeling anything else from stanza's verse. tef's 'ball drop' set might've been alright if he'd approached it a differently, just comes across as lame the way he worded it. btw, what was up with having those random "~" things in only that punch?? regardless tef's opening two sets were enough to take this. v/ tef would appreciate it if both of you voted on the punchline league final once it's up. thnx. |
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01-06-07, 07:59 PM | #12 | ||||
Light Weight
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IP: 2029 97B3
not a bad battle here. i was going to break it down line by line but decided i'd just read it and write about it. Anyways, Stanza, your wording is pretty much killing you here, your lines are mad stretched and they drag the concepts out too much. Tef, you dropped a couple concepts i've seen before like the WAC line and the state of mind, but regardless of that your wording and execution was still better here. I have Tef taking this one here, slightly harder hitting punches and alot better wording.
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01-06-07, 11:01 PM | #13 | ||||
Semper Fi
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
I know im not the best at wording my lyrics but i havent been feeling your wording since we battled way back when and it seems it havent changed. Your a good lyracist and both of you had some good punches but tef stood out more like
He should quit textin and do sports so he won’t look all steamed Cause he represent the WAC better than the Boise state football team Both of yall did good just tef stood out more to me v/ Tef
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01-07-07, 01:26 AM | #14 | |||
I Hurt.
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IP: F956 A220
TEF WINS 6-6
Stanza LOSES 10-13 |
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