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Valor 10-26-04 10:23 PM

Rough Times-- by: Kaotic.Theory and fluidmoon
 
Rough Times

-fluidmoon-

Life is tough these days, so many hard choices to make,
Wars and crime, grimey shit going on,too much to take,
Can't handle the force fed fear through images on t.v.,
Thats all we see, trusting no one, including ourselves,
Because the anger spreads, appearing closer is the ledge,
Such an easy way out, but it happens constantly, can't deal,
People need to feel safe, but what is it? when its no where near,
The road is a long one, and there is hurt and death awaiting you,
Around every corner there is a dealer, murder, voices calling you,
To cross over, pressure is strong from peers in the threshold,
Of confused hearts and minds, lying faces twist in the cold,
Be bold,for life gets easier with age they tell us,yea,how so?,
We grow,wear the signs of our burdens like masks,when we get old,
Our war paints deep, and time continues to tick, the clock will tell,
The story of our lives,of who will go to heaven or to the depths of hell,
Life is rough, deal with it, because who knows what is next for us,
Live this day like it is your last,be strong,cus life will continue to get rough...

-Kaotic.Theory-

The streets i grew up in could be rough on days
homocides, other crimes kept kids from being able to play
people crying,people lieing,even people dieing
for actually having commen sense for life , trying
to survive,takeing care of there family
trying to be something that others say they can't be
it's sad when you have to walk to school every day
seeing bodies in the bushes at times decay'ed
its ruthless,trying to keep your head up and survive
actually careing about what happens or goes on in your life
which others dont care,because they never had a parent growing up
in group homes,not having them there when your sick or throwing up
its rough,but what can you do,its the life that some people choose
but pray everyday that its not your life or your family that you loose
but you have to live with it,and learn to move on
its crazy,your whole life and friends can change in a second
just the other day i seen my homegirl who was pregnant
and doing drugs,with no remorce on her baby
acting like other scared parents,being shady
i try not to let it faze me....
i sometimes think back to when i was just a few years older then a baby
innocent not knowing the problems that surround me
thanking god i was never abandoned,which some weird lady found me
its sounds mean,but its the truth.....
...man
only if people knew the trouble with the youth

Kawn Flixx 10-26-04 10:33 PM


wow

a collaboration...in poetry...good idea...

I liked this very much...Kaotic good emotion BOI...

and fluid you always d real good on these drops...

Props to both...peep mine I'm bout to drop in like 5 minutes...

peace

Triple_N 10-26-04 10:41 PM

WOW I was thoruoghly impressed by this.....FLUID your imagery an way of indirectly describing your thoughts is amazing...you make the reader think an thats what peotry is about...wow I am just amazed by your talent...kaotic...yours was tight as well your imagery was nice....an your way of wording gives your verse more power nice shit....both of you were spectacular..wow great job y'all

fluidmoon 10-26-04 10:42 PM

thank you so much for the feedback,,i'm trying to see if this collab in poetry idea will fly,,if it does,i will be adding a forum for it in here,and peeps can collab on ideas and there words can flow together,and i appreciate the feed man...1

Key... 10-26-04 10:47 PM

Am Speechless.

THis ama nominate the best poem this month until i see someone who can top this am serious.

Valor 10-26-04 10:55 PM

thanx for all the love

fluidmoon 10-27-04 11:18 AM

Thank you all for the feed, i very much appreciate it....1

Ikynovel 10-28-04 12:00 AM

This was a truely great piece...

Kaotic Theory-your piece was great... the flow was good your stucture was on... your emotion was superb and i really enjoyed your imagery

Fluid-your part was good aswell... had good rhyme scheem but my only adive is to keep your verse free verse...


yo valor try and find our collab that we did ova on RB and we will bring it ova here.... ima bout to drop my piece that was nominated for Legends on RB

look out for it its Litmus Test

Valor 10-28-04 12:08 AM

word thanks man

fluidmoon 10-29-04 05:48 PM

U~P~P~I~N....for some more feed...and love for the ones who gave some...lol

Valor 10-30-04 02:22 AM

uppin......
...

fluidmoon 11-01-04 11:27 PM

yea, wheres the love people? i will shut this forum down...nah i'm playin..lol,uppin for the feeding...i'm hungry

Valor 11-02-04 02:40 AM

this is rediculous....:(

*cry's on fluid's shoulder*

Lil Nae2 11-02-04 03:38 PM

this was deep i like it nice collab everything in it was true it was really deep and made me think alot keep droppin da both of you

iamthatdude87 11-06-04 05:42 AM

capitol D-A-M-N......lol thats all i have to say nice collab like dv sed the best poetry i seen in a long time stay up


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