This was feedback posted for Empire
 

just checkin how the votin n stuffs goin on my crew members battle......

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

checkin this shit out...... crew battle.......................

Voted For: Empire

Empire has this one..... I liked his verse ebtter .... his sounded more convincing... i liked it.... he used more emotions and i liked his flwo beter....

Vaqlor you had a pretty good verse ... but i liked empires verse btter..

Peace!! Return tha fava on mah battle \/ \/ \/

Coninue>>>>> From ^^^^^

Empires vocab was alright .... i liked the variety....

Valor .... your vocab was good too .... you used some pretty nice words.... lol i had to look one of them up...

Empire.... you had some good flow... beat valpr in that ....
but valor your flow was good ... but i understood emps more...
Over all i thot empire had this....

V/ Empire... ^^ as seen..

Peace

uppin number 3
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This was feedback posted for VALOR
 

Vote - Valor
Reason:
Pretty good battle....Valor came with better emotion, and imagery than Empire, but Empire had the flow and vocabulary no doubt.....BUT this is a topical battle...so the way I see it..is you have to be on topic...therefore Valor got this for telling an emotional story with good thoughts and concepts.....and imagery...Empire had a good story...but it wasn't really vivid...it seemed cloudy in some areas and not really too emotional.....which is why Valor won in my opinion....not a bad read from both...

Somebody fucking get that polled....goddamn new sites....

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

I can not post a vote becuz I dont have 200 post, but here's who I think won and why.Empire won. His rhyme structure was strong, complex, and apparent and he did'nt even use stanzas (which is really cool cause I hate stanza's with a passion). it flowed really well and it seemed very genuine and emotional. Voltors was alright. Return the fav and check out the first time I tried to be a rapper. it's Selah David vs. Certifiedthug/gangsta

Voted For: VALOR

im voting for valor because i felt his more. it looked like empire jus tried to use a lot of big words(which is good) so it seemed better. empire had better vocab but his structure wasnt very good. some of his lines were crowded. valor's was more deep i think and i liked that idea of the prayer at the end

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

checkin tha polls

ok 2-2 should be 3-3 damn valor this will be close :thumbup:

upin number 5
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Voted For: Empire

vote goes to Empire, you take ths battle man!!!

flow was nice from both half, but i think over all Empire takes it, it was consistanly good and the structure was nice to!

punches deffinatly go to Empire, his punches were hard hitting and funny, valor your piunches werent bad but they didnt hit as hard as Empire.

overall, definatly Empire, vote to Empire

good battle guys, please return the favour and drop some votes on the battles below, thx

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Voted For: VALOR

i feel that Valor won this battle with more emotion and a more
creative peice in my opinion he actually came pretty good in this
i was def feelin it so i read it over 2 times pretty good i think.

Emire your peice was ok i wasnt really into it to much because
your structure made it kind of boring and as well you didnt give
as much detail and had less emotional lines, you took the vocab though.

decent battle VALOR win with a better peice.

V/ VALOR

Voted For: Empire

Ok... Where to start.. Empire took the battle no doubt.. He made proper poetic connections.. The rhyming was good, he would have benefited from formatting his verse properly. He also had good emotion.. Now..

Valor... Your verse was nothing more then a big dissapointment for me... You talk about being the king of poetry on this site.. But reading this battle verse, I really cant see any reason you would even try to make that claim. Im not hating at all, Im only speaking truth man. Let me tell you why I thought yours was sort of wack poetry.

For starters, all you did was tell a story.. There were little to no poetic connections or imagry.. I mean, it was more or less a topical without structure or flow and at times without rhymes.. To put it nicly, it was below average poetry.

You need to seriously work on your verbal imagry skills and start reading peices from people like Lyric and, shit, even take notes from empires verse. Because your peice on this battle sucked.

And one more thing, the bit where you wrote,

*puts his head down and cry's softly*

Was really wack.. It had nothing to do with the peice and really.. It made no sense.

Please elevate A LOT before you try to tell people you are the king of poetry and that sort of shit again.. And no, Im not hating at all on this, I have no beef with you and I dont want you to get mad cut because of my comments.. I want you to take them as a form of critique and try to improve for next battle.

Vote- Empire