ah... yea Commune... nvm remove that vote then........
i forget to much shit... but damn i wasted 15 min typing that shit up.....

Voted For: Nostradamus

alright heres the deal...this wasn't one of my more favorite verses from either of you....they both had there pros and cons just like always....Nostras....i felt you over did it with the mutlis...they wern't forced, and fit, but it seemed like whenever i could pick up any kind of flow, the multis stopped, they seemed somehwat incosistent and it made me had to stop reading a time or two....but it was a really good verse...definately worth reading...

now for you abstrakt...i started reading your verse, and it was losing my interest fairly quickly..it seemed like you were trying to be to descriptive...and even as descriptive as it was..i felt it lacked the imagery it needed to be impressive in that area, how ever..you definately picked it up towards the middle, and it got very enjoyable to read...you had kind of a twist at the end...but i didnt think it was a very effective twist...it seemed kind of generic to me...but all in all..this was a good verse too...also abtsrakt..i liked the outline....that really helped with the mental picture...

all together...i thought both verses were good...but i give it to nostra, for he used the topic as a metaphor, and i liked that a lot...you i guess could say you did too, cause in fact he was not actually falling, but he thought he was....so anyways...decent battle...i have seen better from both of you though...stay up playas

This was feedback posted for Nostradamus
 

shit was dope from both sides....................

Voted For: Nostradamus

Damn you niggas and your fucking 50 line max shit....

you need to break it down to like 30 or 40 lines so that people will actually vote instead of gettin tired of reading half way and just be like oh well i like this guy more so ima vote him


Nos-Your veres was good... imagery was there and your emotion was strong.... only thing that i didnt really care for was your shit being centered and the fact that you didnt do it free verse i like topicals alot better when they are free verse.,... other then that no complaints vocab and flow was good


abstract-your ish was okay aswell but i didnt really feel the emotion as much as i was with Nos's verse but the the rest was about even so that is why im giving Nos the win beucase i felt his emotion better

v/Nos

return favor with my Topical battle aginast conclusion on FL

and i need for one of you guys to battle me beucase i wanna see how good yall are and shit.... pm me

Word. The commune aint a crew, its a division of the best topical people on the site. Has nothing to do with crew votes. And Ikynovel, Ill do a freeverse one for you next time I battle.. And I will battle you soon as all the people Ive promised battles have gotton battles.

For now, you should battle abstrakt while your waiting for me, he might of lost this one.. But he is pretty good compared to a lot of the other topical heads on this site..