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Old 10-24-04, 05:05 PM   #1
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Nostradamus vs Abstrakt

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Lololmao...
Ayo, We Both Missed The Deadline...
I Just Went To Go Post In My Verse And That Shit Was Gone...
So Just Accept And Drop So We Can Get This Moving...
Same Rules...
I Think It Was Like...

50 Lines...
Regular Voting Rules...
No Dick/Hate/Crew Ect...
500 Post LIMIT To Vote...
Topic: "Falling"

Uuuuuuum, Ya Thats It Mayn...
Do Your Thing...
I've Got My Verse Finished So Ill Drop It Soon...
And Ill Make It So You Have One And A Half More Days To Drop...
Cuz Thats What We THOUGHT It Was...
Good Luck Mayn...
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Old 10-24-04, 05:05 PM   #2
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Abstrakt has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-24-04 05:05 PM.
 
Old 10-24-04, 05:14 PM   #3
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12:28 AM Eastern Time...

*Where Am I???*
Find Myself Naked In A Field Where Time Lies Delt Paces...
Everything Slowly Finds Itself And Yeilds To My Tell Phrases...
The Sky Painted By Red And Blue Color Types Colaberating...
No Clouds Line Ages To The Youthful Mother Lifes Souls Exasperation...
She's Created Such Greatness To See Its Amazing...
Trees Same Phases Of Lush Green Tips And Placemins...
I The Adam To Cracks Lands To Find The Passions...
Find The Beauty Battered And Re-fine The Past Visions...

*Every Light Has Its Darkness*
Double Take Every Scenes Great Degree Of Trancquility...
Then See Out Pereferial Vibrant Shades Of Spectrum Greats Fillin Seas...
Walk Over The Water And Never Stop At Thoughts Of Faulter...
Keep To Steps Soft As Clovers And Walk Till Dusks Brush Falls Burned...
Reach The Brink Were Beauty Seams To Bleed Like Sinks...
Put My Hand Out To Touch And The Air Feels Like Skins...
Continue To Push As This Rubbery Texture Rips Threw...
Tear Down The Blue And Sit Against Bare Stripped Gloom...
Black Space, At The Brink Of Safety And Question...
Guessing For More Beauty I Break Free And Step In...

*Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah!!!*
I Slipped Up And Pick The Wrong Side In This...
Falling Up, Maybe Down What Is This?, Only I To Witness...
Feels Like Floating Cuz I Yet To Hit Ground Moaning...
Starts To Feel Euphoric Without Weighed Down Slowing...
To Much, Stomach In My Mouth So I Threw Up...
Gut Had Had Enough Of Flying Threw Dust...
Start To Scream But No One Can Hear Me...
Its Rediculous, I Was Just Standing Right Near Peace...
Now Its Like Im In The Middle Of Heaven And Hell...
Every Inch I Dont Feel Pass Im Regrettan This Tale...
Wanna Wake Up And Just Forget All This Happend...
But I Dont Know If Im Dreaming Or Swallin Past Sins...

*THE LIGHT!!! IT'S COMING!!!*
And Just By The Time I Didnt Know Weither I Could See Or Was Blind...
The Light At The Tunnel Suddenly Seamed Sort Of Mine...
Just Then I Came Into The Light And Was Confronted...
Images Of My Evils Rushed In As My Guns Combusted...
Babies Screaming, No Food, There Hungry...
There Parents Were Robbed At The 711, He Didnt Eat Because Of My...
My Little Daughter Bewilder And Alone Crying For Something...
I Gave Her Away, Couldnt Aford To Buy All Her Clothing...
Cuz Crack Was A Crazy Drug And So I Saw In The Next Clip...
See Me Murder My Friend, Then Use His Money To Inject Shit...
See Picture Of Bodies Piled Up, Fuck I Remember Each Of There Faces...
Names, Dates, All So Faint Till Now When Its To Late To Reach For Changes...
Now No! I Dont Want The Light Give Me The Dark...
My Own Life Starts To Replay And Its Seazes My Heart...
I Cant Breath, Choking On These Scenes...
Maybe Its Better This Way, Broken Loves And Lifes So Now I'll Redily Bleed...

1:50 AM Eastern Time...

*Sirens Blaring As A Medic Breaks In The Room*
Medic: Sir, Sir, Sir Are You Alright?!!?
Holy Shit...
GET A STRECHER IN HERE HE HAVING CONVULSIONS
He's Going Into Shock Lets Get Him The Hell Outa Here...

1:37 PM Eastern Time...

*Wakes Up In A Hospital Bed*
Man: What... What Happend???
Nurse: Sir You Had A Drug Overdose...

...!!!FLASHBACK!!!...


11:45 PM Eastern Time...

*I Need A Fix*
Look Right To The Table But I See Books White From Drug...
Shook Pipe Loose From Bud And This Crooks Life Runs Strung...
Hold The Cold Hard Titanium Bar Abut Old Large Folds...
Hold One Bold Light That Lights The Fire Amungst Scared Molds...
Drop My Hands, Breath, Stop It And Drop It On The Orange Seat...
Sit Back Off My Land These Scenes Seam From More Than Reach...
Slouch Down And Close My Eyes To Let These Times Drownd Out...
Found Now Lost In Mind With A New World With Binds Wound Bout...

...BACK TO THE PRESANT...

Nurse:Had You Been Found 20 Minuts Later You Would Have Been Dead...
*The Man Weaping, Speaking To Himself*
Man: My God...
My God And Heaven In All It's Beauty...
I've Been Given Another Chance...
*Begins To Cry In Joy*

.Fin.
 
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Old 10-25-04, 11:35 AM   #5
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Topic: “Falling”

“We hold these truths to be self-evident that all men are created equal; that they are endowed by their Creator with certain inalienable rights; that among these are life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness.”
US Declaration of Independence

The Evaluation Of Law
Look,
I seek knowledge from the man behind the pen, define a trend..
See I skimmed views on equality only to find your lying again..
There’s many men, marginalized, and its hardly disguised..
And yet these patriotic toxic lies are still Regarded as wise..
I aint pessimistic, yet my predicament thickens my arteries..
I’m unemployed, you say health care, I reply with pardon me?..
It startles me, these philosophies faced at my kitchen table..
No silver spoon, I was condemned to never be rich and able..
The system aint stable, its based on ideals that’s all appalling..
Truth is we’re forgotten puppets to governments,
.................................................A nd were constantly falling..

The Worlds Conundrums
Were falling ill to aids, teen pregnancies are becoming rampant..
Our rivers stagnant, embellished by chemicals ignoring chances..
To stop this poverty, it bothers me but equality’s a fucking joke..
Stipulations of being un-privileged, is staying inside a rifle scope..
We chain smoke, and people are always dying from second hand..
But the health systems run by capitalists.. That cant understand..
I quit believing man, these people opposed to electric execution..
But they happily, every day, kill themselves with their own pollution..
Plus the constitutions confusing, in fact I’m losing respect for laws..
I try to decipher societies lies, but sadly can never detect the cause..

Corruption Of The Mind
Eradication of my sanity, my nationality actually racks my mentality..
Constantly in angst over issues of insanity, possibly my bad reality..
My dad brushing me off, never talking man to man with me, neglected..
Like an infection, never respected, I’m the art of loneliness perfected..
A close inspection, proves my views are based on immense injections..
Corrupted mind on heroin, actions laced with intense perceptions..
Of street life, my right mind was long gone before my sentence..
What’s equality? I was fucked by their system without repentance..
Plus endless trenches are constructed to separate me from the rich..
I’m falling victim, my predicament lives the saying...........Life’s a Bitch..

My Physical Situation
I’m straight derailed, impaled on the pole where my flag sails..
My Government did me wrong, calling correction... Packed Jails..
My worlds stale, cant pay the rent, but hell bent to feed my kids..
I’m struggling without electrics, no water and no food in the fridge..
My life’s shit, sometimes I’m off coarse with traumatic realities..
While facing fallacies, incorrect, always resulting in technicalities..
And abnormalities, see I’m tragically walking life without support..
My last resort of petty theft, earned my sentence from a criminal court..
With deep subliminal thoughts, enforcing my daily mental breakdown..
Suddenly realizing Satan’s a permanent resident at my place now...

A Greater Perspective
Where does it end? I could go on forever questioning issues..
Debating views, yet I’m guessing the public~really~aint~amused..
Look at the bigger picture, expand your mind, you might find..
That war, famine and corruption~currently control......Man kind..
Plus my right mind entwined inside~the conundrums of equality..
Their laws bother me, honestly, its as if authorities conning me..
See their systems a mockery, and I don’t need to explain..
I’m simply feeding your brain, with truth’s~that’s clear and plain..
I figured their game, decided I aint playing cause its absurd..
Shouting at the top of my lungs the answer....
.................................................. ...........But nobody heard..

(Even the greatest civilizations, are falling asleep on the curb.)

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Old 10-25-04, 01:06 PM   #6
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Good battle. Lets get the votes rollin now.

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Old 10-25-04, 02:14 PM   #7
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Voted For: Nostradamus

alright, alright...
this was prolly the best topical i peeped...
abstrakt, u came stroing as hell...
ya vocab was straight, the way in which u used the topic in some parts was off the hook, but.....
the light verse wasnt the strongest, your best peice was the i need a fix, u came strong as hell, an i would be suprized if this dont go down to the wire at like a 5-4 or somthin, because i am not gonna vote for you, but if people do, i can definately see why.......

nostra, u just keep doin it dont ya?
i dunno how u keep comin up with these topicals, but i am truely amazed at how deep n meaningful your peice was...
from the evaluation of law too the prespective peice, your vocab an emotions were right on point....
i'm sorry to vote against you abstrakt, an i'm just votin on this battle cause i wanna elevate in topicals an i got so into each verse i feel i needed to voice my opinnon...
only thing u lacked was the emotion an in some places your vocab was a lil off.....
but from what i've seen of topicals on this site, this was by far the best topical battle i have checked out
my hat goes off to ya both, an much propps.......
nostra just took it cause of the emotions in each peice, the story telling type of ways n the creativity of his peice..
much enjoyed an definately no hate to u abstrakt....

could i get a returned vote in my sig?
it'd be much appreciated

peace yall an keep the kickass peices comin
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Old 10-25-04, 02:58 PM   #8
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Wow...
And To Think Me And Nostra Wrote These Drops Last Minut...
Real Nice Job Mayn...
We Wanted To Give The Readers Something Special...
I Think We Definately Accomplished That...
Tite Drop...
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Old 10-25-04, 03:16 PM   #9
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Voted For: Abstrakt

yo tight verses on both parts. great imagery and vocabulary. i really enjoyed reading both pieces. Nostradamus take this one though, his piece was one of the best ive seen to date on RV. His piece took us thru America and the problems facing us today with very insightful imagery as well as questioning of todays laws and values. Dope piece, Atty I liked your piece as well. you took a whole different perspective on this topic. nice storyline. any other time you would have took this battle, but Nostrodamus stepped up the game in this one. Nice drops to both.

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Old 10-25-04, 03:17 PM   #10
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Voted For: Abstrakt

yo tight verses on both parts. great imagery and vocabulary. i really enjoyed reading both pieces. Nostradamus take this one though, his piece was one of the best ive seen to date on RV. His piece took us thru America and the problems facing us today with very insightful imagery as well as questioning of todays laws and values. Dope piece, Atty I liked your piece as well. you took a whole different perspective on this topic. nice storyline. any other time you would have took this battle, but Nostrodamus stepped up the game in this one. Nice drops to both.


my bad this should have been a vote for Nostradamus.
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Old 10-25-04, 03:20 PM   #11
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my bad this should have been a vote for Nostradamus. im pm'ed strobe to change it.

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Old 10-25-04, 06:40 PM   #12
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checkin the polls....tight shit from both......

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Old 10-25-04, 06:44 PM   #13
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Voted For: Nostradamus

Oh shit... i vote this for the battle of the month this is a very dope battle very nice too...... very good... now on to the voting........
Atticus: very dope verse... nice lines and nice overall.... you had very dope imagery and i felt you was on the topic the whole way except for some parts..... you flowed iight but it wasnt as good...... some parts of your flow came seriously messed.....i give you props on your vocab... very good and impressive.... your stucutre wasnt that good..... the subtitles of each scene was very good and it matched with easch verse.....and it really got me into reading it....i had to read it about 4 times before feedbacking on this.....also i like how you did the flashback which gave it a little bit more excitment but you do that in some of your open mics.....yours i gotta say was the most creative out of the battle and also the most original.... i read some it again and i fugured that some parts didn't have a very great rhyme sceme......but i liked how you posted good vocab as the rhymeing.....nice topic and nice overall....

Nostradamus: your shit was very dope nice one and you stayed very well on the topic.... firsdt... you had way better flow than atticus..... it was very good and it flowed trhought the whole verse..... you had also very nice structre which was very good... nice...you had very nice vocab... very good and some words i didnt even know.. it really was suprising.. but both of you were a tie on vocab..... on more creativity.... i'd say abstrakt had a better and creative verse.... especially the verse subtitles it was good..... nost had ok subtitles for each verse....i'd say the better impact in the end was Nost... his was staying on the topic and had a better end in my opinion........you had a very great rhymye sheme it was very good and it rhymed through out well..... but atticus had a bettter well though out beginning .. i didnt like nostradamuis beginging that much... only at the end it seemed to get better...

Final Vote is :Nostradamous but this topical battle was very close and was definatly one of the most dope battles i've ever seen... shud be recorded....
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Old 10-25-04, 06:46 PM   #14
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RTF... is my open mics..... and if you dont post a feedback... i'l take back my vote....cos my shit gettinf slept on.. i posted a very long explination... so you feedback on boths


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=153440 open mic http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=1677560 open mic
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Old 10-25-04, 06:53 PM   #15
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Aren't You In The Same Crew As Nostra???...
Cuz If You Are Then That Cant Count...
Get Back To Me...
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