..........shit....hol up ima pm strobe fo dat...ight.....

Uping for votes please,,...

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...................Cant Be fucked with this shit anymorE............

..................................UpIng This Shit Please....................

This was feedback posted for SUPERVILLAIN
 

checkin polls stay SV.................................

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^^^uppin' for feedback.

being this was my first topical......

1) im actually great with the spelling......obviously, the only reason this piece has errors in it is because i tried to consolidate my letter space so that i would be able to keep my structure on point.

2) battlecats...pick who you want to, but fuck voting just for big words (no disrespect). im mean, yea, big words add a sophisticated feel to a verse, however, i felt there was no need for them to be used all over in my verse. i honestly thought that my multies made up for my vocab or "lack there-of". my intention for this topical was to express a general point of view from a industry standpoint. it was about the message...not the words i used. if spelling and big words play into the voting process for topicals...then in the future, i'll keep that in mind.

3) if the verse seemed rushed, its because it was. the original verse was dialogue between a veteran rapper and a new aspiring artist about the trappings of the music business. i couldnt properly execute the concept because i was not able to use different colors (to differentiate speakers) for dialogue purposes. so, at the last minute, i just crammed the concept together as one piece and submitted it so i'd make my deadline. i know that by doing so, my verse had lost some of its edge and creativity, however, i am confident enough with my work to dismiss any perceived "excuses".

4) 4fil...arent you on my team??? lol.

what up crit??? this shits mad slept on homie. i'll do what i can to up it a few more times playboy. i havent been online much recently.

oner.


...the super...

Voted For: CriTiC

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super-aight u had a nice drop..........coulda been better.......you had real basic vocab.........ya structure was good tho.......nice topic ppl....................you came at this good but you lacked imagry and emotion..........and they really help a topical..............keep it up tho........and keep doin ya thing

critic-aight u came at this harder............you had a lot better vocab than super.................you had emotion and imagry more in your verse.......yours flowed welll...........you came at this just better............ya structure was aiight......i liked how u broke it into pieces...........it coveyed it more as a story.......good drop

plz return the favor...
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ewpost&t=163144
honest explained only....
peace~1

Sup thanx for the votes,,..

SV I thought you had a nice deep verse, when I started my
topicals I droped the same way. More of a story then a verse
and people would complan about my verse not flowing right.

So I decided to change my style totally coz I though I would
have to drop something great to get a win off you.

All the big words in my verse, it wasn't my intention to just
drop loads of big words I thought it added dept to my flow
thats all.



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crit, much love fam. you did your thing. if or when i catch this loss, i wont be bitter in anyway whatsoever. lyricist to lyricist.....its been an honor brotha. hold it the fuck down.

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topical rematch??? your rules, okay? im hungry for more practice. honestly, i believe our next battle will be the one to watch for...im focused. hollar at ya boy pimpin'. oner.

c.s. up...

...the super...

since i cant vote then whatever im still gonna leave my feed back,
SUPERVILLAIN won this hands down i thought hes verse was more better enjoyable and had me feeling hes entier verse crit or whatever i thought u'r verse wasnt that good like everyone saying it is, i thought ya lay wasnt good ya flow was ok u stood on topic but i wasnt really enjoying ya verse i got more outta SUPERVILLAIN then u'rs no hate just facts

vote: SUPERVILLAIN

For sure SV when this ones done and dusted we go again..

Hang-man if you wanna go topical holla @ me thanks for
the feedback.

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good lookin' out hang. much love for the positive feed cutty. stay up bruh.

UPPIN'!!!

...s.v. deadly...

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