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Check in by: 11-25-04 at 03:01 PM

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CriTiC has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-22-04 03:02 PM.

SUPERVILLAIN has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-22-04 03:05 PM.

CRHYME SINDICATE vs. MIND OVER BODY
Topical : Trapped


“The Grand Rap Trap”

welcome to the music business…

deep n my soul I got da hunger for mo after eatin cats at a house party show
if da cash flo reflects my success then of course I need it, I must hav dat doe
makes no sense 2 say no, shit no, cents is pesos, enuf gathered is a payroll
since im tryna get a big say-so, I need 2 be greedy and start a bankroll
flip it…come bak then make loans, gain sum take home n stay paid full
rather then b a victim of circumstance trapped, ima b da one 2 take souls
industry vamps suk harts dry n even leev bone marrow siphoned
being narrow minded… theres no chance of hope n no way 2 find it
paradise can b leased 4 a price, all dat island sunlite can leev u blinded
but my sight?...my vision?...ill try 2 defy it! im on point like an arrow guided
if ever n a denero crisis, im ai-ite goin bak 2 da neighborhood dat i lived
chillin at home with a wife, kids, the white fence...the private life shit
ive ben told those used 2 holdin c-notes wont return 2 dem streets broke
instead they sell their souls for hot singles, loose ho's and lots of c- oke
not everything can be controlled, one can only play the hand u hold
trust me i know...yo...we all believe that we wont be the ones to fold
dont b lured by da money, da dames, da druggies, dope buggies or fame
they’re all priveledges and perks...but this job is work and its all a game
r u willing 2 play? theres alliances n broken ties, triumf and hopeless times
dyin and growth of life, all suplied if ya signin, autografin thos dotted lines
ask da best...success n excess leads to unrest…and much stress 2 depress
mo money, mo problems...often no funding or solvin so we robbn wit teks
more often then not today, the main vets trade respect for paychecks
they drained payments, now these brain deads sank depths over great debts
should’ve paid less for the gray lex., eight ‘vettes and gay plane/jet
its insane that bank comes and goes quick enough to maim n break necks
its safe 2 say the only way to escape is to fail…or do a child porno tape
retire early…or die in a hail of bullets…formally our normal fate
whatever the case, we were born irate, so however high the stakes…
ima wait n reign as da great, ‘till dat new face comes and takes my place
watch ya neck n expect da same, protect ya space n just respect da game
stay awake, this is a dangerous trade but dont reflect just da danger n rage
it’s a tricky game, traps r laid at all times, only da fit survive, go decide
if its worth da risk, go along 4 da ride, jus buckle up n keep ur arms inside

…and wait that muhfucka out…whatchu got 2 lose……its only ur life???…


…supervillain of the crhyme sindicate…

I punch and kick,. trying to escape this hell I’m hidden
Forbidden to see my prison or the beast that I’m ridden
It’s not my decision,.. being trapped in a living prison
Risen from a seed I have grown here without emission
I seem to be developing and growing bigger by the day
My mind grows complex, in some odd mysterious way
But to stay here any longer my mind will begin to stray
And won’t obey what I say, so all I can do is sit and pray

Suddenly
I began to turn in a circular motion
I’m getting a sickening notion
Being trapped in this ocean
With frightened emotions
Lost without devotion

Moments after my contemplations I got a coking sensation
And a vocal vibration, because my umbilical changed location
With out hesitation two hands plucked me from the situation
Add started pulling me out from the tube to my next destination

After nine months of isolation I saw the women behind my creation
After a minor operation I was in my mothers arms in deep relaxation

Some SV nice drop,,... GL man.....

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tight drop homie.....now lets get these votes in.

stay up fam. one.

...the super...

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Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

checkin the polls.......very nice critic.....SV not bad...lol

uppin this

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Uping


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Uping this crew battle,,....

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Come on now 94 peeps and not one vote...

Uping this battle please,...

Voted For: CriTiC

wow! now this is a good topikal battle...
good verse from both sides here..... ut my vote has to go to critic..... you start of very nice.... good multies and structure and flow was brlliant....
but this part wins it for you
Suddenly
I began to turn in a circular motion
I’m getting a sickening notion
Being trapped in this ocean
With frightened emotions
Lost without devotion
^^^VERY NICE...... some good thought went into those few lines.. and still going strong with the multies.... and you finished it off well... overall.. 9.5/10

supervillian.... good...
just for a bit of feedback i think you need to work on you speeling.... mybe just proof read it once or twice before you drop....
well you definatly win on muties.. but your rhymes are pretty simple.... thats one thing to work on....
notice that when critic rhymes his words are big and he uses a wide range of vocab.... eg
hidden
ridden
prison
emission
sensation
location
situation
destination
creation
relaxation

and your words are alot more simple
mo
show
flo
doe

alot of your rhymes are pretty forced.... i think you need to take some more time in thinking your verse out before you drop... anyway vote to critic.... for a brilliant topikal verse.......

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CrhymeSindicate

'Till Death

good lookin'.

yada...yada...yada...uppin'.

s.v.

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

Up~ing for votes,,...

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