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CriTiC vs SUPERVILLAIN
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*Topic Trapped* 15 ~ UNLIMITED Lines No ~ Crew Votes No ~ Recycling No ~ Biting Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 11-25-04 at 03:01 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
CriTiC has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-22-04 03:02 PM.
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SUPERVILLAIN has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-22-04 03:05 PM.
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CRHYME SINDICATE vs. MIND OVER BODY
Topical : Trapped “The Grand Rap Trap” welcome to the music business… deep n my soul I got da hunger for mo after eatin cats at a house party show if da cash flo reflects my success then of course I need it, I must hav dat doe makes no sense 2 say no, shit no, cents is pesos, enuf gathered is a payroll since im tryna get a big say-so, I need 2 be greedy and start a bankroll flip it…come bak then make loans, gain sum take home n stay paid full rather then b a victim of circumstance trapped, ima b da one 2 take souls industry vamps suk harts dry n even leev bone marrow siphoned being narrow minded… theres no chance of hope n no way 2 find it paradise can b leased 4 a price, all dat island sunlite can leev u blinded but my sight?...my vision?...ill try 2 defy it! im on point like an arrow guided if ever n a denero crisis, im ai-ite goin bak 2 da neighborhood dat i lived chillin at home with a wife, kids, the white fence...the private life shit ive ben told those used 2 holdin c-notes wont return 2 dem streets broke instead they sell their souls for hot singles, loose ho's and lots of c- oke not everything can be controlled, one can only play the hand u hold trust me i know...yo...we all believe that we wont be the ones to fold dont b lured by da money, da dames, da druggies, dope buggies or fame they’re all priveledges and perks...but this job is work and its all a game r u willing 2 play? theres alliances n broken ties, triumf and hopeless times dyin and growth of life, all suplied if ya signin, autografin thos dotted lines ask da best...success n excess leads to unrest…and much stress 2 depress mo money, mo problems...often no funding or solvin so we robbn wit teks more often then not today, the main vets trade respect for paychecks they drained payments, now these brain deads sank depths over great debts should’ve paid less for the gray lex., eight ‘vettes and gay plane/jet its insane that bank comes and goes quick enough to maim n break necks its safe 2 say the only way to escape is to fail…or do a child porno tape retire early…or die in a hail of bullets…formally our normal fate whatever the case, we were born irate, so however high the stakes… ima wait n reign as da great, ‘till dat new face comes and takes my place watch ya neck n expect da same, protect ya space n just respect da game stay awake, this is a dangerous trade but dont reflect just da danger n rage it’s a tricky game, traps r laid at all times, only da fit survive, go decide if its worth da risk, go along 4 da ride, jus buckle up n keep ur arms inside …and wait that muhfucka out…whatchu got 2 lose……its only ur life???… …supervillain of the crhyme sindicate… |
I punch and kick,. trying to escape this hell I’m hidden
Forbidden to see my prison or the beast that I’m ridden It’s not my decision,.. being trapped in a living prison Risen from a seed I have grown here without emission I seem to be developing and growing bigger by the day My mind grows complex, in some odd mysterious way But to stay here any longer my mind will begin to stray And won’t obey what I say, so all I can do is sit and pray Suddenly I began to turn in a circular motion I’m getting a sickening notion Being trapped in this ocean With frightened emotions Lost without devotion Moments after my contemplations I got a coking sensation And a vocal vibration, because my umbilical changed location With out hesitation two hands plucked me from the situation Add started pulling me out from the tube to my next destination After nine months of isolation I saw the women behind my creation After a minor operation I was in my mothers arms in deep relaxation |
Some SV nice drop,,... GL man.....
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tight drop homie.....now lets get these votes in.
stay up fam. one. ...the super... |
This was feedback posted for CriTiC
checkin the polls.......very nice critic.....SV not bad...lol
uppin this |
Uping
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Uping this crew battle,,....
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Come on now 94 peeps and not one vote...
Uping this battle please,... |
Voted For: CriTiC
wow! now this is a good topikal battle... good verse from both sides here..... ut my vote has to go to critic..... you start of very nice.... good multies and structure and flow was brlliant.... but this part wins it for you Suddenly I began to turn in a circular motion I’m getting a sickening notion Being trapped in this ocean With frightened emotions Lost without devotion ^^^VERY NICE...... some good thought went into those few lines.. and still going strong with the multies.... and you finished it off well... overall.. 9.5/10 supervillian.... good... just for a bit of feedback i think you need to work on you speeling.... mybe just proof read it once or twice before you drop.... well you definatly win on muties.. but your rhymes are pretty simple.... thats one thing to work on.... notice that when critic rhymes his words are big and he uses a wide range of vocab.... eg hidden ridden prison emission sensation location situation destination creation relaxation and your words are alot more simple mo show flo doe alot of your rhymes are pretty forced.... i think you need to take some more time in thinking your verse out before you drop... anyway vote to critic.... for a brilliant topikal verse....... |
good lookin'.
yada...yada...yada...uppin'. s.v. |
Up~ing for votes,,...
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Voted For: CriTiC
...nice verse....werd...tightness....checkin tha pollz....werd Vote Removed |
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