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bumpin this shit for Distilled...quit sleepin hoes...
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damn so this is why you so inactive? distilled's in love.
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Shup you leavin hoe!!!
And Drop me some Feedback. Namsayin...noun |
Bumpin you hoes.
Don't Sleep. |
waoh your more good than i thought... nice piece.... 8/10..
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Thanks man.
I got a lot more to come aswell. |
Once More
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Uppin this again before I leave.
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Crit Me Please Fools
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I am Dead.
I hope your happy. |
Fuck It, I'll bump this in time for the Nominations
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personally i dont think there's any places u can improve on this piece it's got good lyrical content and tha structure is near perfect. It all flowed well and was real original.....keep doin wut u do n return da favor in my open mic called Fearless.....1
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Peeped and left feed yo.
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i liked that part of it alot very creative and it was just poppin the flow was there and it had these great twists to it very good first part of the verse in here has a 1,2 step kinda ciara flow to it lol... 2: hmm i liked this one too great creativty to pretty much had the same thing to the first verse in creativty n shit but i liked this one a lil more but you solidly droped on all part of this shit...good job... 3: this one was my favorite i liked the vocabulary you used in this one...and it was very creative n shit i really liekd the stucture you used on all the verse 1 2 and 3 they were all good flowing n everything good job... fav lines: 3 years later, And I'm clean, over you, through the counselling, Thats when the phone rings, Pick it up to hear you answering, Suicide is now an option, How could this come from Perfection? As I stare down the Barrel of a gun, I write My Story As A Lesson. they both had there flow and vocabularu and emption to them good job... .................... return the feed on my OM's links in the sig... -Parallel |
Thanks Parrbool.
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