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This was feedback posted for Verbal
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Voted For: Intrepid
Fuck that was so close to vote on i almost wish i could vote for both of you but wouldn't be a point in that so on to the breakdown. Verbal- Solid verse good job that retiremnet line was good but your next meta took away from your verse the PHAT ANOREXIC thing is to played the spit better spits line was weak as well the edited rhetoric was good pointed him out as being a recycler but if he does that in this battle he can get a DQ hence the rules your closer was set up OK and then your last line was just straight up fire very nice... You could have took this battle with a line like "Intepid" should avoid humiliation and "Dodge" me Just a though Intrepid- You started the battle of a little weak that fruity loopz line didnt work cuz half the people on that site got fruity loopz so your dissin you audience as well as your opponent not a good thing to do. But then you made up for it with your next bar which was pretty funny i thought next line was OK then the picture one was nice anothe Ok one and then a nice on (Do you see a patern?LOL) The stutter line wsa dumb since it isn't an audio batle could have used dislexic would have been more suitable. Your finisher didn't make sense at first but then i read it 2 more times and i was like thats pretty fuckin smart and thats what pretty much got you the win.... Return the favor on my battle link in sig no hate votes please this battle has been open for like a month and a hallf please drop an honest vote with a good thorough explanation that won't get diqualified like half the votes in my battle i took my time so take yours thank you |
Voted For: Intrepid
checkin this out............... think intrepid took this one...on account of better idea and alot more imagery.....verbal, you had a decent piece, but a little too basic, vocab could be better, and i wasn't really gettin any mental images.....but keep workin on it and you'll do fine.... verbal, thought some lines coulda been worded diff, some were a little simple, but for the most you stayed consistent, nice visuals created, strong emotion....nice twist at the end....keep up and maybe you'll be godly.....maybe, haha, word nice battle v int rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=186164 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=185292 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=187167 |
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