i never understand why ppl complain bout the length of the line, as long as the person keeps it an intergrul part of the story does it really matter.
anyways i like it, very easy to picture within the head an yah word play made it easy to follow an enjoy, very deep homie a good contender for open mic july.
peace

Thanks Alot Everyone...
And The Line Shit Doest Piss Me Off When Everyone Complains...
But Whatever, I'm Working On It...
Upping...
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lotta emotions.. very vcreative, liking the topic, ur structure is gettin better, just use the font of tahoma, that'll fix it, that was the oonly thing i didnt like, otherwise this was dope! 9.5/10

Wow...lmao this shit was wack as fuck :spit:






















































































































































































just playing good shit lot of emotion nice vocab imagery shit very nice drop
feeling it work on your struc though other than that good shit :thumbup:

Upping This Shit...
Lol And Daym, Everyone Stealing My Ideas While Im Out...
Suddenly Everyone Turns Their Topicals Into Open Mics...
Real Original, :thumbup: ...
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