uppin.............................................

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

you got this, iggys drop was nice to but i think you came harder.

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

This one goes to one step

My words lethal like aids, to them u won't find a CURE
My punches hit u harder than 50 to Jada in "THE MASSACRE
SET UP WAS GOOD BUT THE PUNCH WAS WEAK(we all know jada will kill 50)
I'll strip~your~skin, pick~up the~win, while commiting only one SIN
take ur prewritten verse but to where you found it, in the recycling BIN
BAD SET UP BUT MULTI EVENS IT OUT, GOOD PUNCH
You'll never see the SIGN, all you see are lyrics that RHYME
me ripping your brain is the only way, u be expanding your MIND
DECENT SETUP DECENT PUNCH
Dawg, ur still on the ground, i'm in the ABYSS
I'm hitting your balls from side to side like we playing TENNIS
DECENT SETUP PUNCH WAS WEAK
what kind of name is Onestepbeyond
u'll be one step beyond life cuz 6 feet underground is where u'll be found.
BAD SETUP BAD PERSONAL BAD CLOSER

Wanna buck up? hahahahaha.. Try it and one day you bastards lay,
this faggots comin at me 'weak' as fuck, like sunday to saturday,*
DECENT SET UP GOOD PUNCH GOOD OPENER
So how you gonna beat me, you can't so just hold me back bitch,
Or you'll get wrapped up in plastic, like a bologno sandwich,
DECENT SET UP DECENT PUNCH
This is like my fourth or fifth post, bitch im sure your scared,
Me not sick is like seein M. Jackson, and sayin theres no perverts there,
BAD SET UP BAD PUNCH MJ JOKES ARE THRU
On the bottle it said take two, but instead I took fifty,
Thats why I don't need no vibrater to have you 'shook quickly',
DECENT SETUP GOOD PUNCH
Look Iggy, you can hate me, but if you ever try to touch my shit,
I'll stomp ya face flat with timbs and start yellin "suck my dick!"
DECENT SET UP LED TO WEAK PUNCH THOUGH
Then i'll fuckin eat it for breakfast and pretend its a pancake,
You can't rap for shit, and im not syain that cuz you match a bandaid..**
BAD SET UP, DECENT PUNCH BUT A LIL RACIAL (NOT COOL)

anyway i look for punches in a battle and i gotta give this one to one step

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uppin.............................................

uppin.............................................

This was feedback posted for OneStepBeyond
 

i was feelin one steps punches more cuz they were more creative and hit harder. plus his vocab was good.
alot of mc iggy's bars didnt even rhyme hardly at all so thats a big minus, work on that MC

uppin.............................................

comon peeps, keep the votes coming, ill return the favor for sure

Voted For: MC IgGY

MC IgGY I GOT TOGIVE IT TO U BECAUSE THE OTHER NIGGA COUNDNT REALLY RIME SO

VOTE,MC IgGY

haha, oh yeah, i didn't ryhme... faggot... uppin...

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

close battle, heres what i see

IGGY
>My words lethal like aids, to them u won't find a CURE
My punches hit u harder than 50 to Jada in "THE MASSACRE
-nah, wasnt feelin it....4/10
>I'll strip~your~skin, pick~up the~win, while commiting only one SIN
take ur prewritten verse but to where you found it, in the recycling BIN
-not a bad line, second coulda been worded better 7/10
>You'll never see the SIGN, all you see are lyrics that RHYME
me ripping your brain is the only way, u be expanding your MIND
-played, plus first line was dumb 4/10
>Dawg, ur still on the ground, i'm in the ABYSS
I'm hitting your balls from side to side like we playing TENNIS
haha, this line made me laugh 7/10
>what kind of name is Onestepbeyond
u'll be one step beyond life cuz 6 feet underground is where u'll be found.
-uh, horrible structure, weak too 2/10

overall: 24/50.........not a bad verse man, some lines seemed like fillers though and that you didnt really try, some lines were hot, but set up lines and wordplay killed them....you got some skills, just need to elevate on structure, vocab, and wordplay, i think, cause you got the right idea with punches man, keep up

OSB
>Wanna buck up? hahahahaha.. Try it and one day you bastards lay,
this faggots comin at me 'weak' as fuck, like sunday to saturday,*
-this line i laughed, nice opener man, good shit 9/10
>So how you gonna beat me, you can't so just hold me back bitch,
Or you'll get wrapped up in plastic, like a bologno sandwich,
-meh, 2nd line was weak....5/10
>This is like my fourth or fifth post, bitch im sure your scared,
Me not sick is like seein M. Jackson, and sayin theres no perverts there,
-jacksons lines are played, but this one made me laugh, 7/10
>On the bottle it said take two, but instead I took fifty,
Thats why I don't need no vibrater to have you 'shook quickly',
-meh, decent 6/10
>Look Iggy, you can hate me, but if you ever try to touch my shit,
I'll stomp ya face flat with timbs and start yellin "suck my dick!"
what? 4/10
>Then i'll fuckin eat it for breakfast and pretend its a pancake,
You can't rap for shit, and im not syain that cuz you match a bandaid..
-coulda been better, and what are you eating? 5/10

overall: 36/60...........not bad, pretty weird in places, weak too, but i think that the punches that landed, hit alot harder than any of iggy's, so thats why your gettin my vote, for harder punches/personals, plus, i think you had better structure, flowed alot nicer as well....work on gettin multies, and up vocab and wordplay...wordizzle, keep up yo........plus, opener was best line in the battle from either of you, good shit

v/onestepbeyond........rtf if you could be so kind

Voted For: OneStepBeyond

Voted for One

yo overall this battle was a good one so shout outsa to both of you on ya verses but I felt ones verse alot better he had sum good vacabulary to his verse n it looks like he put alot more thought into it

Mc ya verse was a little plain fo me Ya vocab was a little original n sum of ya verses really did click in my mind man.

Mc Bad Line:
My words lethal like aids, to them u won't find a CURE
My punches hit u harder than 50 to Jada in "THE MASSACRE
(Nah wasnt feelin it, Opinion, blah)


Structure on both was good as well as the flow didnt see any multies so it came down to punches n in my mind One came alot harder

One ya need to get a little more severe wit the punches n touch up on ya structure a lil bit

MC ya punches need to elevate alot gotta hurt him, not throwin petty shit at him ya structure like his needs a lil touch up

Didnt see any personals so that is a nobrainer

So overall:
Flow- Tie
Punches- One
Multies- None
Structure- Tie
Personals- None

Good battle to both of you, elevate on the tips n keep rappin, good battle

holla