*confessions*
 

Baby Girl, There Is Some Things Ive Done, And Its Bout Time U Knew
Da Only Reason I Neva Told U Before, Was I Feared For Me And U
I Neva Brought Any Of Those Things U Wear, My Friend Gave me The Money*
I Know Thats Small, But It Gets Worse As I Tell U More Thats Botteled In Me
I Know It Was Wrong Of Me, But Its Time U Knew The Truth
U May Be My Only Girlfriend, But Not the Only Girl Im Talking To**
To Everyone Else That May Sound Odd, But Its Still Not Cool To Do
Member That Day We Made Love In That Bed, I Said There Was Nothing
This Thing Is Pretty Important, It Aint Funny, I Have A Lil Something
I Only Told U A Lil Bit, And Already Ur Thinking Bout Leaving Me
Im Sorry, But Nothing I Say Can Make Up For Giving U HIV
It Was Just So Good, I Couldnt Think Straight, I Jus Went Hard And Nutted
Not Thinkin That We Were Both 14, Jus Bout Love, And U Are Now Pregnant
We Are Jus Going To High School, Im Not Ready To Be A Daddy
I Jus Hope Cuz Of This Revelation, Ur Not mad At Me, But Who Wouldnt Be
I Also Should Have Told U Before, I Love U Now, But I Jus Loved Before Ur Body***
Now Our Parents Hate Us As A Couple, And Think They Can Keep Us Apart
But Nothing, And I Mean Nothing Can Keep Me From What I Want****
But Dont Give In, Or Forgive Me Just Yet, All mainly Because
This Is Jus Part 1 of This Niggas Confessions*****

*-she thinks i brought it with my money....when my friend gave me the money to buy the jewlery she wears...
**-i may go with her...but i am hollaring at other girls....trying to get a lil something....
***-now i love her for her.....before i jus loved her body....
****-no one will keep her from me.....
*****-part 2 and 3 coming as soon as it happens in my real life

positive feedback plz.....real story.......this shit is really happening...i jus neede somewhere to express myself.....


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=201773

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Pretty deep, flow was off in parts structure was ugly but i like how you expressed yourself,

up the flow and vocab in future.

Not bad!

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Wordox. This was pretty good, but some of it didn't rhyme. Teenage pregnancy is no laughing matter, and neither is abortion or shit... can't really say the topic is original, but it's a sad one nevertheless. You going to show your girl these pieces? Keep on dropping them, let out some emotions, don't go all sadist because I like impaling sadists.

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very emotional....rhyme scheme was kinda off but emotion held up for it umm vocab u needa up that......and just keep lettin out ur emotions.......ur doin good.....hey rtf on my o/m please its in my sig

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thats was nice, but yo the situation was bad but ya flow as good

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u ruined ur chicks life if u really gave her that shit......yung ass kids thinkin that shits a game wear a condom out of respect for your girl....u dont love her...thats selfish shit.....if u truly loved her you woulda never did that shit....as for your story u need to elevate a lot....
uno*

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