J DOT vs Lyrical Havok
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 09-29-04 at 04:55 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

LyriCal HavoK has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-29-04 03:15 PM.

J DOT has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-29-04 03:15 PM.

aight...check it

he can connect wires and flip the switch...but still wont see the light//--1
shows his verse has no power behind it...technically he's outta sight//--2
compare our might, in physics his skills are grounded...while mine are outta sight//--3
claim to beat me is like peasents say they're god...you just dont have the right//--4
im in this fight, call you an oreo the way your black...yet you talk and write white//--5
your underwear is on too tight, if ya wanted to lose ya virginity..shoulda slept at M.J's Last night//--6

um...no hate on M.J just used what people claim...innocent until proven guilty...

Even if you made the biggest loogy, you still couldnt spit
Your wack lines are limited…like cell phone minutes
you'll get cut off in a instant, you’re a Lyrical “Chaos"
5-0 means I owned you, just call me boss
I’ll turn you into my slave, like the roots of ya kins
Even with yo copied lines, you couldnt a win
Don’t make me expose you to these folks, I had second thoughts
I got connects on RV, I’ll watch yo little ass rot


-i got things to do...6 lines, round 2 after you spit

upnnnnnnnnnn thissssss shittttttttttttt

uppin 4 votes...

Voted For: J DOT

You get this one cause your punches were abit harder. It seems like the other guy keep repeating himself wit da words he used to rhyme wit. His punches were ok too. Your structure wasn't all that and could have been better but you get this one.

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aiyo...uppn this...good lookn...i was thinkn that too...he kept repeating hissself...uppn, need more votes

Voted For: LyriCal HavoK

I was feelin J Dot's but LH's flow got my attention, the closer was ill

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Voted For: J DOT

i wasnt feeling lyrical havoks flow...he had too many repeated flows, and too many nursery rhymes. j dot didnt come as hard as some verses i seen him create, but he had like 2 or three ill punchlines...this battle didnt have too many personals...
lyrical havok- work on your structure and your rhyming, j dot got you on that, other than that, you probably wouldve took this one...my vote goes to j dot, good battle

big woody d/r votes gunna get dq'd tomorrow...how unexplained...aiyo...gotta up this

still no votes....uppn this battle....

Voted For: J DOT

Vote J dot

Harder hitting punches and better use of wordplay....

Even if you made the biggest loogy, you still couldnt spit
Your wack lines are limited…like cell phone minutes
Could have hit harder if worded different

you'll get cut off in a instant, you’re a Lyrical “Chaos"
5-0 means I owned you, just call me boss
This was good

I’ll turn you into my slave, like the roots of ya kins
Even with yo copied lines, you couldnt a win
Descent
Don’t make me expose you to these folks, I had second thoughts
I got connects on RV, I’ll watch yo little ass rot
Good


L havok too strecthed and played punhces, i though you would have come harder but i guess not.....

he can connect wires and flip the switch...but still wont see the light//--1
shows his verse has no power behind it...technically he's outta sight//--2
This started off dumb and ended ok

compare our might, in physics his skills are grounded...while mine are outta sight//--3
claim to beat me is like peasents say they're god...you just dont have the right//--4
didnt like that how you used outta sight like that 2 times

im in this fight, call you an oreo the way your black...yet you talk and write white//--5
your underwear is on too tight, if ya wanted to lose ya virginity..shoulda slept at M.J's Last night//--6
this was wack and plain ole stupid.....
probably lost the battle for you

Be more creative both of you


he can connect wires and flip the switch...but still wont see the light//--1
shows his verse has no power behind it...technically he's outta sight//--2
compare our might, in physics his skills are grounded...while mine are outta sight//--3
claim to beat me is like peasents say they're god...you just dont have the right//--4
im in this fight, call you an oreo the way your black...yet you talk and write white//--5
your underwear is on too tight, if ya wanted to lose ya virginity..shoulda slept at M.J's Last night//--6

Vote J DOt

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This was feedback posted for J DOT
 

Oh wow, both of ya'll need to do some serious elevatin but overall, I think red beam won it simply cause his verse made sense and was a lil bit more understandable....Lyrical Havoc u gotta fix ya structure man and put a lil bit more thought into your punches...

Vote = Red Beam

Voted For: LyriCal HavoK

alright check it
lyrical havok u had some hard punches wiht the mj thing.
also u had some good vocab.so all in all u punches were harder and ur vocab was better.red beam u need to work on gettin harder punches then that. so my vote goes to lyrical havok
winner-lyrical havok

Voted For: LyriCal HavoK

i thought this was a pretty wack battle but ima give it to lyrical and heres y.....

opener lyrical
closer lyrical
flow red
structure red
punches tie
personals lyrical
vote lyrical

no hate return the favors on the links in the sig iight peace...........

that shit wasnt explained right...i won this shit, what da hell, his shit was weak, mine was too, but better than that...aiyo tho, we need to cop some more votes on this shit, no hate tho, i return a honest favor to you niggas

this is sad...niggas dont vote no more...aiyo, im uppn this shit so it can finally get closed

Aiyo...lets Cop Some Votes On This Here

Aiyo...lets Cop Some Votes On This Here....................

thanx...uppppn ..................
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This was feedback posted for LyriCal HavoK
 

lol................. terible terible.... i remember when u got you 3 dickriders to come and vote on our battle and i still beat your gay ass 5-3.

Voted For: J DOT

RED BEAM
Even if you made the biggest loogy, you still couldnt spit
Your wack lines are limited…like cell phone minutes
^decent opener
you'll get cut off in a instant, you’re a Lyrical “Chaos"
5-0 means I owned you, just call me boss
^um….no :(
I’ll turn you into my slave, like the roots of ya kins
Even with yo copied lines, you couldnt a win
^decent here
Don’t make me expose you to these folks, I had second thoughts
I got connects on RV, I’ll watch yo little ass rot
^pretty nice closer hea..

LyriCal HavoK
he can connect wires and flip the switch...but still wont see the light//--1
shows his verse has no power behind it...technically he's outta sight//--2
compare our might, in physics his skills are grounded...while mine are outta sight//--3
^decent opener
claim to beat me is like peasents say they're god...you just dont have the right//--4
im in this fight, call you an oreo the way your black...yet you talk and write white//--5
^hell no :( ..kinda wack hea
your underwear is on too tight, if ya wanted to lose ya virginity..shoulda slept at M.J's Last night//--6
^an ‘okay’ opener

Overall
RED BEAM gets my vote becuz
his punches came harder &
had a better structure
LyriCal HavoK …yo shit was stretched like
a fuckin stretch’d pussy…damn…slim ur structure
a little…and yo punches need to be harder

This was feedback posted for J DOT
 

cant vote!! not enough posts but good battle here!

This was feedback posted for LyriCal HavoK
 

you use the same rhymes twice to let ya know......

upppppn thisssssss

Voted For: J DOT

he can connect wires and flip the switch...but still wont see the light//--1
shows his verse has no power behind it...technically he's outta sight//--2
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ERM "OK:" PUNCH BUT PLAYED


compare our might, in physics his skills are grounded...while mine are outta sight//--3
claim to beat me is like peasents say they're god...you just dont have the right//--4
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ WEAK HOMIE NOT AN GOOD PUNCH


im in this fight, call you an oreo the way your black...yet you talk and write white//--5
your underwear is on too tight, if ya wanted to lose ya virginity..shoulda slept at M.J's Last night//--6
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ERM "OK" CLOSA NOT AN GOOD PUNCH BUT "OK" CLOSA


LYRICAL HAVOK-YA LINES WAS AN BIT PLAYED,ADN PLUS YA FLOW IS MESSED UP,LINES TOO STRETCH,AND DA PUNCHES WERENT REALLY HITTIN IT,NOT CREATIVE ENOUGH ,SO ELEVATE ON FLOW,PUNCHES AND STRUTURE ALRIGHT






Even if you made the biggest loogy, you still couldnt spit
Your wack lines are limited…like cell phone minutes
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ PUNCH GOOD OPENER




you'll get cut off in a instant, you’re a Lyrical “Chaos"
5-0 means I owned you, just call me boss
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ERM WEAK PUNCH LINES TO STRETCHA LIL BUT ITS COOL





I’ll turn you into my slave, like the roots of ya kins
Even with yo copied lines, you couldnt a win
Don’t make me expose you to these folks, I had second thoughts
I got connects on RV, I’ll watch yo little ass rot

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT AIGHT GOOD FLOW,,,,NICE PUNCHES,,,,,,GOOD WORDPLAYS


RED-BEAM-U HAD AN "OK" VERSE AND GOOD PUNCHES


OVERALL=DIS AN CLOSE BATTLE IN MY EYES,BOTH OF YA HAD AN "OK" FLOWZ,,,,,,,,,AND SOME ELEVATIONS TO DO,BUT IT CAME DOWN TO PUNCHES AND RED BEAM PUNCHES CAME ALOT HARDER HE JUST EDGE IT A LIL

LYRICAL HAVOK-U NEED TO ELEVATE ON PUNCHES AND FLOW,DA FLOW WAS A LIL MESSED UP,AND DA PUNCHES WERE TOO BASIC,NOT CREATIVE,

BUT KEEP BATTLIN AND KEEP DOING YA THANG~!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~WORD