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DON <VS> State CapiTol
aight crew battle
verses due by 9 15 so theres no prewrite house rules 10 lines good luck verses due in 50 minutes at 9 20 pc |
damn the lucks on your side right now...I just woke up and im lazy and can barely see..BUT EVEN SO STATE SPITS FLAMES SO LETS GO..checkin in so i have 50 mins from now cuz thaz when i saw it...........
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no u got till 9 20 it dont matter wen u saw it u shoulda seen it wen u logged on the verses are due by 9 20 no bitchouts no matter wen u say it
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yo really this is fuckin cheap i cant even think.....do i have to do it now? can't youi wait an hour??
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no u gota do it now like i am stop postin and do it this is more like a real battle im not givin u hours to think about it u challenged us so now u will spit in a short time u lucky this aint live cause u jus upset cause u cant find ur notebook please i seen ur battles all u use is prewrites so stop postin and start writing before u cant post anymore god jus do it u gota do it now
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stop bitchin and get to da battlin, anyways drop a vote in my battle in da sig. And I will drop a vote when this battle is done, i have nothing else to do.
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ur made of more bullshit than a politician
think your Jordan and black...cause you rhyme about being shot...
like him you can retire and comeback but nobody'd notcie...cause you still wouldnt be hot...^^^his sig you can keep your title of president cause to you i am a God... and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod... you challenged my weak crew thinkin youll win...its your simple herb logic... your entire Klass is only Sick...cause they caught herpes ridin DON's dick...^^^look at his sig again klass sicks i bomb this capitol like baghdad...leave you hidin in a hole and lonely... everything you say...is more played than my stereo from SONY... when you said you'll win...you werent aware of what you were STATEing... cause your Bush and I'm Kerry...Im bout to win this approval rating... |
kid your a fuckin bitch..you know your gonna lose so you have all the advantages on yoru side..........FUCKIN PUNK...grr that makes me soo mad..is that how your crew wins battles..yall fuckin cheat to shit..FUck this..you want till 9 20 fine then bitch...
heres my verse patna....stay up...but stop tha tnon sense you prolly pre writ your verse if not your already done have your verse..thaz cheap..aiight lez go Spit-Flames, Rip-Lames, Mer-Kin Don, From Dust Till-Dawn........... Leave you dead on my front lawn, your rap status Is similar To Pawns...... your Highly Unknown, wore a du-rag and still couldn't get "waves"..... Murder You, Leave your cascatte next to your great grandma's Grave....... Kid Spits Wackness, Like Shaq's 3's you Need More Practice........ You Don't win, everything was given to you like a hollywood actress....... Blast-Nines, You Don't-shine, Like Black lights.......... Merk this kid quickly, have him on the First Flight......... Blast My Gats Right Through Your Grandma's Rockin' Chair......... Through your Moms Apron, And it aint Stoppin There....... stupid punk ass bitch ...lucky i wasnt on my bset...i will merk you..AND U FUCKIN SED MY SHIT WAS PRE WRITES U STUPID FUCKER ILL FUCKIN KILL U I FUCKIN HATE THAT BULLSHIT I DONT FUCKIN PRE WRITE I FUCKIN HATE PREWRITERS UR A FUCKIN PUNK.....ARGHHHHHH U FUCKINNNNNN BITCH STOP SAYIN MY SHITS PREWRITES IF I WAS NEAR U ID FUCKIN SLAP U RIGHT IN UR FACE FOR PRE WRITES..UR JUS JELOUS CUZ MY SHITS SICK....jus becuz someone has sick shit duznt make it prewritten holy fuck that pisses me off.......each battle i had i made it 10 mins after they called me out..how the fuck culd i pre write..foo |
haha everyone knos u prewrite thats why u werent on ur best here cause ur noit used to comin up wit a verse in half an hour and i am thats more like a real battle so quit complainin its no use if u slapped me id kick ur ass anyway haha thats why ur shit aint hot in this battle cause u actually had to write it within an hour ur used to writin it in 24 hours well dont hat me hate battles cause son thats how it goes in real life cept u gota come up wit disses at the drop of a toilet seat cause in real life its live aight so quit complainin wit those weakass thing u think r rhymes aight let ur verse do the talkin i aint cheat here i jus simply made u drop within the hour so ppl could vote due to how good we are not how good our verse is after we have 24 hours to write it so if u wana slap somethin slap urself for writin somethin that weak get used to it u prewriter
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alright kid..how you gon' send me a message at like 8 50 and tell me my verse has to be up by 9 20 ....if you let me wake up and give me atleast 45 mins fire would of been spit...and as i told everyone before..im here to elevate i didnt come here to win i dont give 2 fucks about winnin..but losin to a sorry ass bitch who has to pre write and cheat to win is what pisses me off.... i dont care if i lose im here to elevate and get better so my audio is tighter prewrittens doesnt benifit me gettin better so why the fuck would i do it...its clear your verse was pre written you didnt have any lines or comments i said now it was all from like a while back and you only gave me a half hour to drop and you've been online for a whiel..you had all day to write your verse...cause ive seen yoour normal shit..it aint as good as this..PUSSY ASS BITCH
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therefore i freestyled and your shit was written so how is that fair?..its not......im sittin here pissed off cause you think i pre write that pisses me right off cause i know with my own fuckin 2 eyes that i dont.....and im awake now...but i cant think....and thats pretty hot for less than a half hour while im half asleep.........
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State Capitol u got ur first lose. Cuz, how long does it take u to write a verse it takes me 10 mins, i thought i was slow. Like i said before stop your bitchin
Flow-State your flow aight but not great, you said somethin about murdering 3 times in 10 lines. YOur verse felt rushed, no hate, but u aint goin to get better by pre-writin. DON , ur like a classic veteran creatin verses easily, ur things are always so easy to read. Punches-I'm not sayin this was a weak battle, it was good. You both had good punches. Mulites- You both had a couple in there. Complexity-Don had a more advanced verse, which comes from experinece. State again u felt rushed sort of sayin the same thing 3 times. Overall-Close battle but DON took this one. State looks like ur first lost, sorry to say it. Please return da favor, link in da sig. |
ok..
multies: both had soe but dons were better.. flow:don punches:don.. basically don took it in every catorgory Vote:DON Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
^ the smiley thing i messed up on wat i really ment Vote: DON
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aight well I dont know soo much about structure, punches etc..but if one of those raps were meant to be done on audio Id pick state capitols since it has more flow and rythm plus the rhymes are better and make more sense.
Don, yours werent bad either but some of the shit just sounded straight outta kindergarden Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Well, you said give an honest vote.. I feel that this was an ok battle..
Don came a little bit harder thouugh.. his punchlines were'nt all that good, yet he had a couple ok okay ones.. even though i didn't the bush line.. State Capitol's structure was good, but he didn't really come as hard as Don did to me, just tellin the truth... V/Don |
oh yea, return the favor in my battle
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upppppppppppin this......................................
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yo i hear u pm'in ppl for votes wasup wit dis i can tell too not only cause i was told but those votes sounded like favors not honest votes and his verse would sound better on audio isnt an explanation u dumbass newb this is a battle its meant for dissin each other not makin music uppin
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uppin dis battle
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-Don.
think your Jordan and black...cause you rhyme about being shot... like him you can retire and comeback but nobody'd notcie...cause you still wouldnt be hot...^^^his sig average flow, good wordplay, decent punch you can keep your title of president cause to you i am a God... and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod... average flow, good wordplay, played punch you challenged my weak crew thinkin youll win...its your simple herb logic... your entire Klass is only Sick...cause they caught herpes ridin DON's dick...^^^look at his sig again klass sicks flow was coo, wordplay was good, punchlines played i bomb this capitol like baghdad...leave you hidin in a hole and lonely... everything you say...is more played than my stereo from SONY... liked the flow, wordplay was good, aight punchline when you said you'll win...you werent aware of what you were STATEing... cause your Bush and I'm Kerry...Im bout to win this approval rating... average flow, god wordplay, aight punchline -Statecapitol. Spit-Flames, Rip-Lames, Mer-Kin Don, From Dust Till-Dawn........... Leave you dead on my front lawn, your rap status Is similar To Pawns...... good flow, weak wordplay, aight punch your Highly Unknown, wore a du-rag and still couldn't get "waves"..... Murder You, Leave your cascatte next to your great grandma's Grave....... coo flow, weak wordplay, weak punch Kid Spits Wackness, Like Shaq's 3's you Need More Practice........ You Don't win, everything was given to you like a hollywood actress....... liked the flow, punchline was good as was the wordplay Blast-Nines, You Don't-shine, Like Black lights.......... Merk this kid quickly, have him on the First Flight......... flows good, weak wordplay and no punch Blast My Gats Right Through Your Grandma's Rockin' Chair......... Through your Moms Apron, And it aint Stoppin There....... coo flow, weak wordplay and punch Overall, Don got this. State had the best line of the battle, but Don was more consistent with his punches. Seems like State's last 2 couplets were rushed. Aight battle. One of the better ones I've seen in the Front Lines. State had the flow. Work on consistency both of you. You both got potential in the league if either decides to go. Vote - Don. |
upppppppinnn....i will return the favour/...............
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punches i think state got it cos don kept talking about sucking his dick and so on,son it aint running u shud have changed speach a lil in ya punches...hope ya digs...as for the flows the both af 'em went well...i liked it....
vote :state capitol |
multies...don
flow...don punches....don must i say anymo? Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
I didnt pm people for votes!!...im the leader of my crew and i wouldnt put my battle on the line.......and i know the rules i am not a cheater like half these fuckers on here....uppin
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think your Jordan and black...cause you rhyme about being shot...
like him you can retire and comeback but nobody'd notcie...cause you still wouldnt be hot...^^^his sig Good opener..nice punch 7.5/10 you can keep your title of president cause to you i am a God... and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod... lmao, i like that.."and you suck my dick like the presidential scandal... all your head does is nod..." nice..8.5/10 you challenged my weak crew thinkin youll win...its your simple herb logic... your entire Klass is only Sick...cause they caught herpes ridin DON's dick...^^^look at his sig again klass sicks Nah, weak..weak punch..coulda done betta off the name 'klas sicks" 5/10 i bomb this capitol like baghdad...leave you hidin in a hole and lonely... everything you say...is more played than my stereo from SONY... ..weak damn..uh oh..the rest betta be nice..this was weak 4.5/10 when you said you'll win...you werent aware of what you were STATEing... cause your Bush and I'm Kerry...Im bout to win this approval rating... ..weak..your done with the presidential shit..wack closer.. 5/10 comments: You were blazin hot when you was spittin' in the beginnin..then i kept on readin..ugly punchlines..ugly closer..you can say half was hot half was ass.. averaged: 6.1 Spit-Flames, Rip-Lames, Mer-Kin Don, From Dust Till-Dawn........... Leave you dead on my front lawn, your rap status Is similar To Pawns...... Nice opener aswell..7.5/10 your Highly Unknown, wore a du-rag and still couldn't get "waves"..... Murder You, Leave your cascatte next to your great grandma's Grave....... Wack..I liked the first part then U fucked up at the second 5/10 Kid Spits Wackness, Like Shaq's 3's you Need More Practice........ You Don't win, everything was given to you like a hollywood actress....... The first line is played, the second line is iight 6/10 Blast-Nines, You Don't-shine, Like Black lights.......... Merk this kid quickly, have him on the First Flight......... Wack..ain't like it..weak 5/10 Blast My Gats Right Through Your Grandma's Rockin' Chair......... Through your Moms Apron, And it aint Stoppin There....... Wack closer..ah man...5.5/10 comments: damn man..state i thought u had this battle..u can give any excuse you want but still..people can drop verses in 10 mins..i mean..u cant give any excuses on battles it just makes your shit look worse. averaged: 5.8 Vote-DON -------------------------- can yall vote on my current battle drop a honest and professional vote.. http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133085 |
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I won't post who I think won. I don't wanna sway or ne thing.
But good battle to both. good job. |
Hmm... Both of your verses lacked from what i saw... DON your verse lacked any stucture whatsoever... So u lose... Capital... I like to see more Personals... Seemed a lil played out... But you win cause you tried to make your lines neat...
poll vote on that one battle, i upped it... |
anxiety that vote is bullshit uppin this battle.....
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uppin this ish fo my boy don
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aight this was a pretty close battle... good over all battle and i was feelin both of your verses, both had good drops.... don had slightly better structure and rhyme scheme but on the other hand State had better punches and personals... punches and personals are what really wins battles and his flow was really on lock... im gonna go with state on this one but no hate to don... this was a close fuckin battle and a good one....
VOTE- STATE need votes below http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133107 |
Don- nice drop dogg....you had some nice punches and some nice personals...
struc was aight and your flow was good....overall a nice verse just hit a little harder with punches.. overall:7.0/10 State- ok nice drop but to me you didnt hit as hard in this battle as others and you lacked in personals....the only thing working for you was your struc and your flow was ok.. overall:6.5/10 vote-Don |
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