For$akeN vs phatinum
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-31-04 at 08:40 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

phatinum has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-28-04 08:41 PM.

For$akeN has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-28-04 08:43 PM.

U better flee bitch before ya head gets a 3 stitch Ill burry you in my shed you cant kill me I was born dead im locked in a cage you cant pass me my rage is on a level im a fckin devil I take shit to the depths of hell my hate grows bigga while I got my finger on the trigger you aint a real nigga realise you aint 4 real you dreamin ill slice you throat bitch you bleeding times up you screamin and half these niggas tryin 2 put me down yea and im a grenade I need a hand throw me a spade im in a trench im bout 2 blow my lyrics rite to da heart of ya soul its time to go home and tink wid brain cells pumpin this deep your lyrics come cheep
Now im on the suface clinging on2 da world like a leech when will da rasicm stop only way I gotta express is hip hop im naughty by nature its da way god made me ill do anytink to win even if I have to sin im a nigga straight thuggin half the niggas in da world just muggin im leavin now cause im sick of your rymes its times like dis wen you speak wid out a thought you so short u got rapped by a jelly baby u aint a real lady your just a wanna b slim shady I leaving cause bitches got this world turning the otha way from a betta day

first time wasn't enough because you came back for more
the audience wouldn't make a noise for your drop if they snored
herbs battle me everyday of the week like i'm a damn holy vet
this punk owes me a lot of shit like he was in my fuckin' debt
this is just another easy win ready for me to take of course
only way you could break anything apart is by getting a divorce!
blah! all you do is walking around like you tough and a thug
this motherfuckin' fake is stepped on more times then a rug
wasting a perfectly whack verse on you what a good thing to do
your rhymes are shitty and herbish...even in a blind man's view!
even your names wrong Phatinum what does that thing even mean?
you couldn't even flow if you lived in a underground submarine...

quick ass keystyle

Voted For: For$akeN

basically you had a better structure beter flow better punches that other dude had his verse in paragraph form
WTF? good drop

drop an honest one on this battle...lmao

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Voted For: For$akeN

wutever u did u won, cuz i could read it
first time wasn't enough because you came back for more
the audience wouldn't make a noise for your drop if they snored
u won wit that, cuz i knew it was a bar.
v/Forsaken

uppin my bitches........................................... ...................

This was feedback posted for For$akeN
 

well 2 be real i didnt really like either verse due too the self gloification and everything, but i had 2 use da metas since i can't understand personals nemore... so the best metas go too.......Verse number 1

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This was feedback posted for phatinum
 

phatinum first line looks like a quote from big l- just re worded

Big L's Line- " You Betta Fleep Hops, Or Ya Head Gets
Flown 3 Blocks" - Big L - Dont Front First Line
And " Its The Tripple 6 In This Shit, Im From H-e Double Hockie Sticks, Im The Son Of the Devil Like My Song Said, Break Niggas Like Corn Bread, You Cant Kill Me I Was Born Dead" - Same Song Just A Little Bit More Into It

And Phats First Line Went "U better flee bitch before ya head gets a 3 stitch Ill burry you in my shed you cant kill me I was born dead " <-

Just Something To Think About....

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Voted For: For$akeN

forsaken took this no comp.. phat ya verse had no structure or flow... and it wasnt a battle verse.. forsaken takes this.. although his verse was pretty weak too.. but it had flow n structure AND most of all... punches... so...

v/ forsaken...

and btw, could you return the favor on me vs eye in my sig..

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Voted For: For$akeN

aight not much comp here,flow punches,structure,vocab,all go ta verse 2,pretty weak battle but an easy decision phat you gotta elevate alot before ya battle anymore dawg..i think you should go read da tutorial n practice..forsaken i thought your opener was your best bar...

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Voted For: For$akeN

fORSAKEN TOOK THIS BATTLE FOR BEETTER PUNCHES AND PERSONALS, HIS LINES WERE STRCTURED WELL AND HIS FLOW WAS GOOD.. AGIN PHATINUM DOESN'T STRUCTURE HIS LINES AND HE IS LOSING POINTS FROM THAT.

vOTE/FORSAKEN

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