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Word's are used to obliviate perception's...
nerd's are abused to proliferate direction's...
herb's are amused by the stupidiest connection's...
we live like worm's .using rock's to change effection's...
but police investigate us to instigate fuss...
claiming money's remaining unpaid ...
I tryed to hide were the gun laid...
A deadly combination is a medly from the nation.
money issue's give homless reversed constipation...
way's of healing's disccused but people feeling distrust....
interlectual's who are trying to inspect all..
If we get money..goverment's tryna collect all...
I have none so why the fuck am i in debt yall?..


This shit was typed out quick after debt collecter's left my house.
if you want an explanation on any of the line's just tell me which line..
Any comment's welcome.............pz

That was dope, good wordplay, and nice ass multies, dont really need any explainin, all makes sense really. Only thing that could use work is the structure, but the content was v. good.

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thnx for the feed. I tryed to change the structure. does that read easier now?

^^this was good, for a lot of reasons, your flow was on point, you used nice vocabulary, and i feel you on this subject, this is well put together, lol, damn debt collectors, nice job

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Lol It Was Dope Homie

Wordplay,Vocab,Flow,Structure, Every Thing Hit Hard Keep It Up
Ya Style Is Nice. Dope Few Lines Homie

~1~

Keep Um Comin

hey that shit was hot...and since me being 26 i get that shit all the time...meaning bill collectors...with student loans...and credit cards that i "had" but failed to realize they wanted the $ back...lol...the point is i felt what you were saying and how you said it...1

damn 26 ...lol.. na 4 real thnx for all feed. Any comment's welcome......pz

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This wuz nice. I like the flow,vocab,structure,ect.
^This wuz deep.^
Keep it up.! Thanx fo your help to.

niiice...this had some nice flow to it...lines hit hard..and i feel you about them bill collectors..i play games w/ em now..but i feels ya

good shit

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Sup @ everythings been said already, hott verse which flowed nicely nice vocab
as well.

*Hott Shit*

yea for the shortness of it it was good cuz ya jus whipped it up quick n it made sense n is so very true

YO GOOD SHIT I FEEL YOUR BARS SHOULDVE BEEN LONGER BUT YOU HAD GOOD VOCAB AND NICE SHIT REGARDLESS NICE :thumbup:

This was a very nice drop...the multies it what stuck out the most. Nice work...peep mine...link in my sig. You could work on your stucture just a tiny bit more though...but overall nice work, keep it up.

thnx for the feed. All comment's are welcome and all favour's will be returned.......pz

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Nice drop. I felt the concept and that nerd line made me laugh bullets. One of your funniest,greatest pieces in a while "@". Nice job man, All I can say Is quit elevatin' Cause your hogging' The elevator key man. :) lol

p3c

-wreckage-

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nice concept wordplay and flow dope is all i can sya good work @.

i was feeling this all throughout no need for explainin great wordplay .. nice volcab .. sick multi's...all was to the point and i just thought it was off the hook.nice man keep it up...i seen some of your shit and its tight...so its just natural for you i guess.hahah.peace~1

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lol, i could see this was a freestyle :)

very very good!! your vocab was very nyce..ur structure was very nyce.. n u were very much on topic (cuz there was no topic) lol... you are actually pretty good... I liked how you rhymed alot with one word... and now that gives me an idea..:) Just make it longer or w/e next time.. :) lookin forward to more :) 8/10