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09-29-04, 04:38 PM
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Word's are used to obliviate perception's...
nerd's are abused to proliferate direction's... herb's are amused by the stupidiest connection's... we live like worm's .using rock's to change effection's... but police investigate us to instigate fuss... claiming money's remaining unpaid ... I tryed to hide were the gun laid... A deadly combination is a medly from the nation. money issue's give homless reversed constipation... way's of healing's disccused but people feeling distrust.... interlectual's who are trying to inspect all.. If we get money..goverment's tryna collect all... I have none so why the fuck am i in debt yall?.. This shit was typed out quick after debt collecter's left my house. if you want an explanation on any of the line's just tell me which line.. Any comment's welcome.............pz Last edited by @. : 09-29-04 at 04:49 PM. Reason: structure<<<<<<<<<<<<< |
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09-29-04, 04:47 PM
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That was dope, good wordplay, and nice ass multies, dont really need any explainin, all makes sense really. Only thing that could use work is the structure, but the content was v. good.
Peep my open mic, Called Victim
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09-29-04, 04:51 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
thnx for the feed. I tryed to change the structure. does that read easier now?
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09-29-04, 05:01 PM
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^^this was good, for a lot of reasons, your flow was on point, you used nice vocabulary, and i feel you on this subject, this is well put together, lol, damn debt collectors, nice job
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09-29-04, 05:12 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
thnx for the feed. ....
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09-29-04, 07:49 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
upping for more comment's please.....pz
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09-29-04, 07:59 PM
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Lol It Was Dope Homie
Wordplay,Vocab,Flow,Structure, Every Thing Hit Hard Keep It Up Ya Style Is Nice. Dope Few Lines Homie ~1~ Keep Um Comin |
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09-29-04, 08:33 PM
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IP: D26C 0847
hey that shit was hot...and since me being 26 i get that shit all the time...meaning bill collectors...with student loans...and credit cards that i "had" but failed to realize they wanted the $ back...lol...the point is i felt what you were saying and how you said it...1
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09-29-04, 09:10 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
damn 26 ...lol.. na 4 real thnx for all feed. Any comment's welcome......pz
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09-30-04, 12:43 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
upping for more
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09-30-04, 02:56 AM
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This wuz nice. I like the flow,vocab,structure,ect.
^This wuz deep.^ Keep it up.! Thanx fo your help to. |
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09-30-04, 06:29 AM
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niiice...this had some nice flow to it...lines hit hard..and i feel you about them bill collectors..i play games w/ em now..but i feels ya
good shit return the favor Sage-How to Breathe through the Disease
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09-30-04, 08:30 AM
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Black Poet
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IP: 2041 AFC0
Sup @ everythings been said already, hott verse which flowed nicely nice vocab
as well. *Hott Shit* |
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09-30-04, 09:52 AM
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IP: 9253 500F
yea for the shortness of it it was good cuz ya jus whipped it up quick n it made sense n is so very true
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09-30-04, 01:37 PM
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STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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YO GOOD SHIT I FEEL YOUR BARS SHOULDVE BEEN LONGER BUT YOU HAD GOOD VOCAB AND NICE SHIT REGARDLESS NICE
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