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True Love (Part One) Dedicated to Monique Tsosie
True Love (Part One) Verse 1 Yo dont think nobody could love you like I could... I'll be kind, nice, active like a lover should... If I was wit you you wouldn't kno wut harm is... I dont stalk you dont worry I'm pretty harmless... Before i die and go to heaven i want a kiss B... If i die gunned down would you mourn and miss me... For all i can see and say your a good hot life saver... Your bueaty is legend and you love aint worth no wager... Your love is pricleless cant be bought gotta be earned... If i dont see you yes i would be worried sick so concerned... Trus me i love you enuff i dont want it to be dead... I kno you kno me can love girl you heard every thing i said... You listened to me my love wont rest until it is fed... Baby you haunt me at night your engraved in my head... Wuld you believe me if i told you wutz all in my head... I can give you so much love make a good love life... When i grow up i would do anything for you to be my wife... All the time i cry and my mom asks me why... I love you thatz why but cant get to you Monique why... Take Craig outta it is it even at all possible... Itz not minez or your fault that you so irresistible... My crazy love for cant be inexistable itz alwayz full... Here is wut i gotta say to you... Baby is your love for sure true... Chorus x2 Girl i kno i got a syndrome of true love... I aint scary to girlz i dont do crazy stuff... Plz baby is my even enuff... I aint truble you wont see me in cuffz... Baby i'm crazy bout you... Crazy crazy crazy for you... Could this really be true love... Verse 2 Monique your in all my heaven love dreamz... I think you could love me but nuttin is as it seemz... But i wont give up my love for you NEVER... I want us to stay together for ever and ever... When it comez to bueaty all otherz surrender... Nuttin is more fair than you girl you the finest... When i rhyme to you itz all me bein honest... You say i'm super cool and funny az hell thanx... Well at least i kno i'm in the damn rankz... When it comes to me and you hate dont appear... Baby believe me my love for you is so sincere... When i see you the path to paradise is so clear... I want you to come to paradise wit me in the sky... All my friendz and even yourz say i'm the right guy... Gansta will be gone if you want anything... I'll control my rage hardly ever throw swingz... If or when i git wit you nuttin will ever be the same... Right now i'm so vulnerable and in so much pain... With out you life suckz itz way too plain...(Fo Real) Yo baby its time to take control of me wit ur power... Bueaty conquerz all rest of the girlz cower... I dont kno how my heart gets these desires... Dont worrry never fear my love for you wont expire... I alwayz think of you... Girl can i getta clue... Chorus x2 Girl i kno i got a syndrome of true love... I aint scary to girlz i dont do crazy stuff... Plz baby is my even enuff... I aint truble you wont see me in cuffz... Baby i'm crazy bout you... Crazy crazy crazy for you... Could this really be true love... |
i think this shit will win her heart...
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it was a good flow cuzzo no doubt it prolli could get hur hart mayn
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for a love song it was nice and it will prooly get you laid if it the right girl so i give it a 5/10 not hate i just not into love songs
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coo coo thanx ya'll uppin for some more feedback...
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that shit was great man I was feeling it alot 8/10
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whoa thanx knew you'd come thru... pz uppin...
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yo no propz no feedback form ya'll...
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c'mon ya'll view this shit...
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god dammit view...
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lol upping so many time's?
this is good. For a love peice. But why so much effort g speed?.Say anything to a bitch and she's in love.lol...... but yeah if this doesnt win her over she isnt worth the struggle homie.. keep dropping.. pz |
but do you think it will... she dating sum1 now but she isnt sure of what she wantz...
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yo this would win hur back guarantee mayn no doubt it was tight
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aight thanx... uppin...
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Aight, I'm pumped the fuck up on pain killers right now, so I have no desire to give you any negative comments. But I know you're trying to elevate, so I'ma be real with you, here goes...
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Aight, there's my feedback of the first half, I'll have my thoughts on part 2 soon... |
well nice feed back... and there is a chance of me gettin gunned down...
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So those are my thoughts. I got a piece from a while back that might help you out with how to do this properly. Although, it's kinda more of a story than an actual love song, but it might help - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139258 It's been dead for quite some time, so I'm not saying you should drop feedback, but if you feel a need to revive it, go right ahead. Peace. P.S - Do I think it'll win her heart? I'll holla after you've made changes, if you decide to do so... |
yeah well i'll check ur story or song...lol... and remember thats part one... theres gonna be a part two...
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3/10 needs so much work...
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uhm yeah uppin...
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uppin... plz leave feedback and vote...
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aight this was tight.....but on the real you coulda done a lil better and left out the thing bout craig and some other stuff but i liked it keep it up i was feelin it tho
nice G$peed..aka ruff tuff thug lol |
...dont save her she dont wanna b saved dont save her she dont wanna b saved...
..haha get that song by three 6 |
what the hell you talkin bout...
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pretty sure it will cuz i can tell alot of work was put inta it.
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lol its a song
three 6 mafia - dont save her |
he didnt bite shit.
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wtf???? manneeeee i dident say he bit anything damn im jus sayin he needs to quit tryina save that girl mane jus listian to the damn song
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best thing youve ever dropped.
flow was actually pretty good, lyrical content needed a little work but what i have learned from this type of venture is that rap usually wont work unless youre just ill as fuck. aka, dont try it. but you are definatly getting better kid. pz. |
hey how come no one view this and leave feed back. socrates lets have a battle. i jus wanna see how it is to battle proz. alright lets go.
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whack as hell lmao you trash son get over it
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