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Old 10-10-04, 02:50 AM   #1
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True Love (Part One) Dedicated to Monique Tsosie

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True Love
(Part One)



Verse 1

Yo dont think nobody could love you like I could...
I'll be kind, nice, active like a lover should...
If I was wit you you wouldn't kno wut harm is...
I dont stalk you dont worry I'm pretty harmless...
Before i die and go to heaven i want a kiss B...
If i die gunned down would you mourn and miss me...
For all i can see and say your a good hot life saver...
Your bueaty is legend and you love aint worth no wager...
Your love is pricleless cant be bought gotta be earned...
If i dont see you yes i would be worried sick so concerned...
Trus me i love you enuff i dont want it to be dead...
I kno you kno me can love girl you heard every thing i said...
You listened to me my love wont rest until it is fed...
Baby you haunt me at night your engraved in my head...
Wuld you believe me if i told you wutz all in my head...
I can give you so much love make a good love life...
When i grow up i would do anything for you to be my wife...
All the time i cry and my mom asks me why...
I love you thatz why but cant get to you Monique why...
Take Craig outta it is it even at all possible...
Itz not minez or your fault that you so irresistible...
My crazy love for cant be inexistable itz alwayz full...
Here is wut i gotta say to you...
Baby is your love for sure true...

Chorus x2
Girl i kno i got a syndrome of true love...
I aint scary to girlz i dont do crazy stuff...
Plz baby is my even enuff...
I aint truble you wont see me in cuffz...
Baby i'm crazy bout you...
Crazy crazy crazy for you...
Could this really be true love...

Verse 2

Monique your in all my heaven love dreamz...
I think you could love me but nuttin is as it seemz...
But i wont give up my love for you NEVER...
I want us to stay together for ever and ever...
When it comez to bueaty all otherz surrender...
Nuttin is more fair than you girl you the finest...
When i rhyme to you itz all me bein honest...
You say i'm super cool and funny az hell thanx...
Well at least i kno i'm in the damn rankz...
When it comes to me and you hate dont appear...
Baby believe me my love for you is so sincere...
When i see you the path to paradise is so clear...
I want you to come to paradise wit me in the sky...
All my friendz and even yourz say i'm the right guy...
Gansta will be gone if you want anything...
I'll control my rage hardly ever throw swingz...
If or when i git wit you nuttin will ever be the same...
Right now i'm so vulnerable and in so much pain...
With out you life suckz itz way too plain...(Fo Real)
Yo baby its time to take control of me wit ur power...
Bueaty conquerz all rest of the girlz cower...
I dont kno how my heart gets these desires...
Dont worrry never fear my love for you wont expire...
I alwayz think of you...
Girl can i getta clue...

Chorus x2
Girl i kno i got a syndrome of true love...
I aint scary to girlz i dont do crazy stuff...
Plz baby is my even enuff...
I aint truble you wont see me in cuffz...
Baby i'm crazy bout you...
Crazy crazy crazy for you...
Could this really be true love...
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Old 10-10-04, 02:51 AM   #2
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i think this shit will win her heart...
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Old 10-10-04, 04:02 AM   #3
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it was a good flow cuzzo no doubt it prolli could get hur hart mayn
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Old 10-10-04, 02:42 PM   #4
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for a love song it was nice and it will prooly get you laid if it the right girl so i give it a 5/10 not hate i just not into love songs
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Old 10-10-04, 03:10 PM   #5
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coo coo thanx ya'll uppin for some more feedback...
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Old 10-10-04, 03:33 PM   #6
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that shit was great man I was feeling it alot 8/10
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Old 10-10-04, 03:37 PM   #7
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whoa thanx knew you'd come thru... pz uppin...
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Old 10-10-04, 07:38 PM   #8
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yo no propz no feedback form ya'll...
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Old 10-11-04, 05:58 PM   #9
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c'mon ya'll view this shit...
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Old 10-11-04, 08:12 PM   #10
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god dammit view...
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Old 10-11-04, 08:24 PM   #11
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lol upping so many time's?

this is good. For a love peice.
But why so much effort g speed?.Say anything to a bitch and she's in love.lol......
but yeah if this doesnt win her over she isnt worth the struggle homie..
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Old 10-11-04, 08:38 PM   #12
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but do you think it will... she dating sum1 now but she isnt sure of what she wantz...
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Old 10-11-04, 10:35 PM   #13
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yo this would win hur back guarantee mayn no doubt it was tight
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Old 10-12-04, 06:05 PM   #14
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aight thanx... uppin...
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Old 10-12-04, 06:15 PM   #15
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Aight, I'm pumped the fuck up on pain killers right now, so I have no desire to give you any negative comments. But I know you're trying to elevate, so I'ma be real with you, here goes...
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Verse 1

Yo dont think nobody could love you like I could...
I'll be kind, nice, active like a lover should...
Active? That kinda sounds like you wanna date RV...
If I was wit you you wouldn't kno wut harm is...
I dont stalk you dont worry I'm pretty harmless...
Don't put the possibility of being a stalker into this, it's a turn-off. It'd be better if you left this out...
Before i die and go to heaven i want a kiss B...
If i die gunned down would you mourn and miss me...
For an effective piece, try to use probable situations...meaning if there's no chance of you being shot don't mention it.
For all i can see and say your a good hot life saver...
Your bueaty is legend and you love aint worth no wager...
'Good hot life saver" didn't make much sense to me, it seems as though you were just trying to rhyme with "wager"...and "legendary would've worked better.
Your love is pricleless cant be bought gotta be earned...
If i dont see you yes i would be worried sick so concerned...
Good flow, but it sounds a little too overcaring. This should be used if she's into you and you know you'll be together.
Trus me i love you enuff i dont want it to be dead...
I kno you kno me can love girl you heard every thing i said...
^Huh? Once again, don't use "love" if you're not that close to her...
You listened to me my love wont rest until it is fed...
Baby you haunt me at night your engraved in my head...
Wuld you believe me if i told you wutz all in my head...
I can give you so much love make a good love life...
When i grow up i would do anything for you to be my wife...
All the time i cry and my mom asks me why...
I love you thatz why but cant get to you Monique why...
Take Craig outta it is it even at all possible...
Itz not minez or your fault that you so irresistible...
My crazy love for cant be inexistable itz alwayz full...
Here is wut i gotta say to you...
Baby is your love for sure true...
The rest of the verse you really need to take into consideration about changing. Reword the line about "taking Craig out" and quit saying you love her so much - it's called overkill...

Chorus x2
Girl i kno i got a syndrome of true love...
I aint scary to girlz i dont do crazy stuff...
Plz baby is my even enuff...
I aint truble you wont see me in cuffz...
Baby i'm crazy bout you...
Crazy crazy crazy for you...
Could this really be true love...
Wasn't really feelin' this chorus, lines came off simple and not too well thought out...
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Aight, there's my feedback of the first half, I'll have my thoughts on part 2 soon...
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