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Verbal vs Intrepid
Battle Rules:
10 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 05-02-05 at 06:31 PM Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in. |
Intrepid has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-02-05 06:02 PM.
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Verbal has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-02-05 06:07 PM.
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An audio producer? this fag rides guys like moody dudes
He's obsessed with homo's voices, so he downloaded Fruity Loopz Step up to the next level, its obvious your gonna get owned You couldnt "raise the bar" if you bought a Cingular phone He's washed up, the talent flame no longer lit yah name Cuz he holds on to more memories than a picture frame You wont make it big, face it that u wont gain dreams Could go down the Mississippi river & still wont be mainstream Quit stalling, your wack as fuck, thats why ya stutter dude You can spit in front of a mirror and still wont get a double-you (W) If you dont get anything, don't vote. |
Kid's using an alias because he doesn't want his main to suffer a loss...
Other peeps noticed it too, that's why they simply told you to fuck off..* Don't give me an excuse, because yo, I've heard them all.. But beating you is like retirement...no real work involved.. This feline is lying, I knew I'd end up battling this wack cat.. But he must be anorexic...for some reason he still thinks he's phat.. Not adept enough to spit rhymes, but the kid thinks he spits better spit.. When you check his verses for punches all you see is edited rhetoric.. Battle for 10, 20 years as your loss column increases by increments.. Because I leave more holes in this kid's organs than cathedral instruments... *http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188881 AND http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=18881 |
Voted For: Intrepid
ok dope flow good punches good structure good wordplay overall this verse was good becuz he used word with more than 2 sylabels ok verbal.... flow was ight punches didnt really hit structure was good yer wordplay was shit muntil tha last two barz then it was too late but good try keep battlin dogg good dropz both yall but vote goes to intrepid word please return tha favour on any off my open battles |
This was feedback posted for Intrepid
Structure: BOth
Punchesline: INter Vocab: INter Metas: none Inter: your verse was better ya punches hit U had a good structure and all. it was a 7/10 verbal: your verse was iight not as good as inter. yuour verse was 6/10 |
=\ No vote? It's cool! I'll RTF in a lil bit yo .
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Upping this biznatch .
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Voted For: Intrepid
Eesh, Hard desision. I think both of your guysz spits were ok... Verbal your flow pretty ok but you lost my attention when you tried rhyming spit with rhetoric.....If you were trying to rhyme at all "Not adept enough to spit rhymes, but the kid thinks he spits better spit.. When you check his verses for punches all you see is edited rhetoric.." personals were alright, and punches were just mediocre.... I feel you coulda hit harder. Intrepid... Your punches were better but not by alot... pretty ok personals, and your flow was just a little bit more on key. Vote = Intrepid |
This was feedback posted for Intrepid
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Upping again! .
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Voted For: Intrepid
i was hopin to vot e for verbal cuz he drops good feedback but u gotta do wat u gotta do... verbal... 2nd, 4th and closer were cool da rest were filler...it was a good verse but u coulda done time wording...retirment line was funny as hell...closer was a ovbiouse but difficult to pull offconcept...u pulled it off great... intrepid... funny ass opener...my boy got dat program...some lines werent all that but it was solid, flowed closed out hot...closer was funny vote intrepid |
This was feedback posted for Verbal
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Vote people. Yes vote vote vote vote vote . :laugh: :cussing: :laugh2: :spit: :hump:
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Voted For: Intrepid
Fuck that was so close to vote on i almost wish i could vote for both of you but wouldn't be a point in that so on to the breakdown. Verbal- Solid verse good job that retiremnet line was good but your next meta took away from your verse the PHAT ANOREXIC thing is to played the spit better spits line was weak as well the edited rhetoric was good pointed him out as being a recycler but if he does that in this battle he can get a DQ hence the rules your closer was set up OK and then your last line was just straight up fire very nice... You could have took this battle with a line like "Intepid" should avoid humiliation and "Dodge" me Just a though Intrepid- You started the battle of a little weak that fruity loopz line didnt work cuz half the people on that site got fruity loopz so your dissin you audience as well as your opponent not a good thing to do. But then you made up for it with your next bar which was pretty funny i thought next line was OK then the picture one was nice anothe Ok one and then a nice on (Do you see a patern?LOL) The stutter line wsa dumb since it isn't an audio batle could have used dislexic would have been more suitable. Your finisher didn't make sense at first but then i read it 2 more times and i was like thats pretty fuckin smart and thats what pretty much got you the win.... Return the favor on my battle link in sig no hate votes please this battle has been open for like a month and a hallf please drop an honest vote with a good thorough explanation that won't get diqualified like half the votes in my battle i took my time so take yours thank you |
Voted For: Intrepid
checkin this out............... think intrepid took this one...on account of better idea and alot more imagery.....verbal, you had a decent piece, but a little too basic, vocab could be better, and i wasn't really gettin any mental images.....but keep workin on it and you'll do fine.... verbal, thought some lines coulda been worded diff, some were a little simple, but for the most you stayed consistent, nice visuals created, strong emotion....nice twist at the end....keep up and maybe you'll be godly.....maybe, haha, word nice battle v int rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=186164 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=185292 http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=187167 |
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