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mizz fyre vs Drama Queen
~Official Battle: Best Femcee Award (April)~
Drama Queen vs. mizz fyre Battle Type: Topical KO= 5 votes. Note: 3 votes will be provided by me, Flow, and Deadly (the award mods) if the battle's open past the 15th of May. Topic = Deaf Ears ~Rules~ 30 Lines Max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit 2 full days to check in, 1 half-day (12 hours) to drop your verse. Both have accepted, therefore no excuses, so check in and drop a nice topical piece! Good Luck both of you, feel free to let your imaginations run freely. ~Lady Fiya Minimum posts to vote: 1000 Check in by: 05-11-05 at 02:55 PM Must drop verse in 720 minutes after check in. |
Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-11-05 11:25 AM.
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mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-11-05 02:30 PM.
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Dear Mr. President, . . . Writing down this letter due to the ravages of your greed Children bleeding on the street, dead bodies on concrete Shattered hopes of a dismantled society and for what? About the atrocious cruelty, I cannot keep my mouth shut Don’t you hear the screams at night, haunting your dreams? You did not free the Iraqi people, just switched regimes . . . Maybe that black, precious oil blinded your eyes from truth Because of your lies, soldiers out there wasted their youth Don’t you hear the millions of prayers by their loved ones? Maybe your ears have been deafened by the sound of guns This war isn’t about justice or freedom, it’s about foolish pride Firmly walking in daddy’s footsteps but despised worldwide . . . Houses turned to ruins, children to corpses, life to death Your hands covered with crimson blood that’s been shed Wiping it off with tons of green papers you earning now Such an obdurate creature, without problem you disavow Just ignoring helpless pleads of an innocent population People like us but were born on an unfortunate location . . . The realization of biggest fears resulting in salty tears Yet our soft shrieks seem to be falling in deaf ears . . . The world |
One chair in a room darkened, absence of illumination
The place chosen to consume her self made medication Creating a painful sensation, tho easing her greatest fears Erasing tears, secrets she told evidently fell on deaf ears…… At the beginning Sunshine blessed days, she graced lives with a simple smile Loved by many, irrespective that her moods were so versatile Hostile one minute and the next she was acting so contented Reinvented people’s views, so found she was misrepresented Creating a compartment in her mind, containing her feelings Invaded by secrets who could she talk to about her dealings? Turning to her family, but her deepest woes were discarded Her heart barred, like expensive jewels, securely guarded Mental breakdown, so unstable came the doctors prediction Childhood gone, times when candy was her biggest addiction Now facing troubles alone, a spacious world she’s unknown Her life once in flight but its clear that this bird has now flown now........ One bed centered in a room darkened, its there a body lies A note hidden in the corner illustrating her final goodbyes Sunlight from the window presents such a peaceful scene Up in the skies no more deaf ears, finally she’s a queen…….. |
This was feedback posted for mizz fyre
checkin the pollz, should be a close battle....good drop chick.
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Bumping this battle up, is gonna be close indeed...strong drop...
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strong drop from you to dq and thanx T
uppin ya'll |
...Upping this shizzle to get some fucking votes...
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Voted For: Drama Queen
I think DQ took this one. I was feeling her verse wayy more. I think her verse was a lil more interesting, and understandable, and wayy more creative. I like how you stuck to the topic, and never fell off during yo whole drop. Your vocab was nice, and your imagination was also better in my opinion. Nice drop. Mizz Fyre-you had a nice drop, but I wasn't feelin tha whole thing. No doubt you came out nice, but I think you drifted off topic a lil near the middle to the end. But, you had somewhat good imagination, but I didn't see too much creativitie in yo verse that made me want to think twice about my vote. Your verse was just nice to me. Nothing big! Overall-My vote goes to DQ because she came with more consistency. She came out strong and really hit the topic well, and I felt she stayed that way throught the whole verse. That's why she got my vote. and her imagination was just a lil stronger, and her verse was more intelligent. plz RTF on this battle link http://community.rapverse.com/showb...47&page=3&pp=15 ~1~ |
^Thanks for fully explained vote, much appreciated :thumbup:
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Uppity Uppity Up Up Up!
Bumping this all the way to the top! |
Voted For: mizz fyre
I liked the concpet you choose to use for your drop....you had a strong message behind your lyrics, this was a very unexpected route u took on this topic but u worked it nice..which I liked...u had strong vocab...good flow but u lacked any multies, your strucutre was solid though..dats really only weak spot of ya verse. Missfyre......you had a very expected topic...u flipped the title into a story which is what i expected both yall to do...however your story was good..had nice imagery...an it developed well, had a few rough spots but overall story was told nice...ya vocab was good alil inconsistent but for most part strong....your flow was good an had a some good mutlies here & there not many but enough. Overall: both of you had good drops...it was a very close battle..only blaring difference between the two was content...I gave it to drama becuz her content was alot stronger than mizz..other than that it was pretty much even..but great job to both. Vote: DQ Vote switched |
oops my bad yall i meant to vote for drama queen...y'all could have that changed..my fault
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Uppity Up Up........................................
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This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
if i had the posts this how i would of viewd it...
woah this was a good battle... i liked the choice of topic and how both of you gifted ppl portrayed it... before i start propz to both of you.... Drama Queen - your verse was dope.... your structure was set up pretty much perfectly, your vocabulary and use of emotion in this peice was brilliant, flow was on point the whole way throught the peice from the start to end it kept to the topic and painted the picture well good verse... 8.5/10 Mizz fyre - you also had a dope verse, great structure, i liked ur choice of vocabulary, but you didnt have as much emotion as what DQ had, your flow was good and stayed on most of it but fell of in sum parts overall you had a good verse too 8/10... vocab - DQ flow - DQ creativity - DQ structure - Tie enjoyment - DQ over all - DQ enjoy ur femcee of the month DQ u deserve it girl... propz to mizz you a great femmcee too... |
^Thanky spanky
Bumpity Bump Bump Bump *bounces off* |
uppppppppinnnnnnn for votes.......................
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Uppity Up Up......people vote up!!!
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Voted For: Drama Queen
nice drops...... an interesting approach to a fairly difficult topic, it took me two times to read through and finally get what you was saying. ya stayed on topic throughout which was good, once again ya structure was flawless, a nice use of multies in some parts also which added to ya flow....the vocabs was nice, nuthin overly basic, ya had some complex stuff in there. the imagery of ya verse was cool, some nice emotion and felling in there and overall a good drop.......7/10 again, another nice approach to the topic....structure was flawless to as was mizz fyre's.......ya drop had a nice feel to it, a lot of emotion in it and putting it in the form of a letter was a nice touch. ya delivered a real good image of the whole idea you was talking about.....ya vocabs was nice in the drop although i felt mizz fyre had ya beat slightly....i was definitely feelin ya verse and it was very easy to understand so props to that cuz the topic itself wasn't the easiest!!! 7.5/10 OVERALL: this was a close battle, a lot closer than last time but i think that DQ edged it out because i felt her verse was easier to understand and related to the topic more than mizz fyre....also becuz i didnt have to read DQ's twice before i actually got it, but then maybe i am stupid!!! :thumbup: V/ - DQ |
Thanks for honest and explained vote, upping for some more!
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uppppppppin ya'll lets rap this one up............
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Hoooooooooooooooly sh*t....
Upping this shizzle |
Voted For: Drama Queen
i loved mizz fyre's imagery in her piece.. and your interpretation of deaf ears as a female in an institution that has gone crazy.. i think that was creative and your flow made it sound nice. i loved Drama Queen's emotion in your piece.. and your interpretation of deaf ears referring to politics was very nice, i like how you connected with the reader on what could have been a dull topic. the best part of this was: Don’t you hear the millions of prayers by their loved ones? Maybe your ears have been deafened by the sound of guns This war isn’t about justice or freedom, it’s about foolish pride Firmly walking in daddy’s footsteps but despised worldwide ^^this was very well written, and what made me lean more towards your piece than mizz fyre's.. i think you both did well but Drama Queen's piece had a greater effect on the reader which is the main goal to writing a topical. To have readers drawn into your piece and keep them interested. my vote = Drama nice job ladies. |
Whoa, thanks for vote! Like I said, I really enjoyed mizz fyre's drop too, that girl got talent and I think we gonna see a lot from where this came from!
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^^^lol thanx dq.....much respect to you..........
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Voted For: Drama Queen
Drama Q Aiight First Off You Had A Nice Verse, Alot Of Vocabulary In Here Creative Piece, You Came With A Nice Verse, Structure Was Decent You Had Nice Imagery In Here, Over All You Had A Decent Verse Which Got You This Batte, Nice Piece, Good TOpic Mizz Fyre Aiight Guh You Had A Nice Verse To You Came Creative On Alot Of Parts, Vocabulary Was Good, Structure Was Aiight Cool, Alot Of Deep Shit In Here, Over All Your Verse Was Good Just Didn't Match Up Well Enough Against Drama Q's, Nice Piece Though Vote-Drama Q Return The Favor Links Are In My Sig |
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