Veyetal vs Ikso
 

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~EaSy~

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-10-05 at 01:32 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Ikso has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-07-05 01:32 PM.

veyetal has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-07-05 07:06 PM.

came over from another bored, cause ik's verses placed them all to sleep
leave, cause the only 'flava' you'll be having here...is the taste of defeat
spring on this bitch, he'll be fall'in back quick, ik better be'leaves'
he's hands down the greatest because thats all his verses ever recieve
never achieve fame, like sitting in the stands, iks'so apart from the game
but i bet he can leave a crowd roaring..........the start of his name!
what a lame, '~EaSy~'? well you could give up now if thats what you prefer to do
nice rules, if only you were in a crew i could say they all referred to you
fuck this fool, wishin' he could ride this one out....not even if you prayed on pedals
this wannabe pulling away with the win?.....not even if it were made of metal
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i will break this one down, because some people do not get shit.
1st bar - ikso is from rapflava.
2nd bar - sig play.
3rd bar - name play.
4th bar - read what he wrote in the rules.
5th bar - sig play.

if you still do not get anything, please, refrain from voting, or pm me and i can explain further.

`Rock ya head’ till your fukkin `dome shakes’, kuz after this you’ll `never be the same` like `two snowflakes’
Your` two week’ like poor `room mates’, Bitch hows the gore taste! I’ll make this slut bow down till the whole floor breaks!
I `rip threw more veyens/vines’ then `tarzan’,Burn ya fist till your palms spand,kuz your punches `poorer’ than `boxers on far lands’
I `float threw streets’ while your jus `waitin ta make moves’ like `car jams’,im a `beast’ wit Lines while your like hermaphadites..Only `part Man’!
Rip `V’s neck’ worse than being `careless wit white T’s’, keep ya `chin up’ when you fight me kuz I ‘take more jaws out’ than pochers and `shark sightings’.(jaws/movie)
If this battle was a `brand of condom’ I must be `Ruffyn the beating’, im `playin willows’ wit him the way I’ll `stump-in/stompin your weeping’*
This chump is a weakling, my fist have ya `voice box’ doin more work than `def children when speaking’!
This like livin in the hood..your lifes toast!`walk all over your bars’ wit out `payin attention’ like `drunk men wit blind folds’
I out `shine most`, and this bitch isn’t near `the light’ like `dorfs reaching 4 light bulbs’, I fukkin knife skulls,and ` demand more bones’ than ‘burglars leavin heist notes’~!**




*Willow Is A Weeping Tree..Stump/Tree Stump…Stump-in/Stompin*
**Bones is also a slang word for money**


~GoodNight~

....~vote up~.....


good luck kidd...

~GoodNight~

hey, don't you think you could have self-glored a little more?
your wordplay didn't even diss me, lol.

Voted For: Ikso

v/ Ikso

Punches: Ikso (You Had All Punches Basically)
Personals: Veyetal (Basis Of Ya Whole Verse)
Creativity: Ikso (Da Punches....)
Wordplay: Ikso
Multiples: Ikso
Structure: Veyetal (No @ Ikso...Strected? Yes)
Vocab Use: Ikso (V Used Simple Shit)

Opener: Ikso (Had Humor)
Middle: Tie (Both Had Nice Middles)
Finisher: Ikso (Creative Finish...Gave That A 9 Outta 10)

Vote = Ikso...Veyetal Tried 2 Use Punches But They Were SOFFFT Or Worded Badly...Not Alotta Force Used In His Verse So Gave It 2 Da Otha Nig

RTF

Voted For: veyetal

Ikso - Stretched, Stretched, Stretched...Like you have some great concepts in all your lines and everything, but the flow is so far off that it just makes it difficult to read. You have some decent wordplay, some pretty good multies in there and all. Not really any personals or anything...but some solid punches. You need to work on making your lines shorter, so it has a nicer flow to it/have a better structure, and you should be able to come out with some wins..

veyetal - Good verse..Great structure, and flow was right on point. You did your research on this guy and had some great personals on him. Some solid punches in their, with good wordplay...ex. The opener...You also had some good multies within in your verse. Nice hard hitting punches and personals, with a great flow won this battle for you..

Vote: veyetal

wow.
did you not pick up that half of his disses were self-glore, the other half were random wordplay.
he only really dissed me on a couple bars, all the rest he bragged about how he is going to rip me or some shit like that.
but whatever.....i wish you could have expanded a little more on your breakdown a little more comprehensively.
bump.

I was way to lazy to type out a huge explanation about Self Glory, he still had some good concepts..

Self Glorification is wack as fuck...here is an example..

This kids signs are vital, watch me rip this bitch veyetal
People feeling my shit more than 80s girls and Billy Idol

Fuck I'm godly...

^ More Self Glory...get it foo

Weerd basically veyetal took this easily...I don't know what AckRite read? But weerd...I was just being cool...

Love you both...:love:

*wow*.. His Verse Was FUkkin Wack... Garbage... Punches Were Played And Beyond CHildish...

Any Way Wuit Swayin Kidd You Got Murdered...

*smh*

Yes, I'm swaying to all these people that cannot see the verse. You know that voters can only see the verses and no other posts untill they vote or leave feedback? So nobody is swaying in anyway possible..

Kids these days..:nono:

`Rock ya head’ till your fukkin `dome shakes’, kuz after this you’ll `never be the same` like `two snowflakes’
Your` two week’ like poor `room mates’, Bitch hows the gore taste! I’ll make this slut bow down till the whole floor breaks!
good wordplay, yet your punch was self glore
I `rip threw more veyens/vines’ then `tarzan’,Burn ya fist till your palms spand,kuz your punches `poorer’ than `boxers on far lands’
I `float threw streets’ while your jus `waitin ta make moves’ like `car jams’,im a `beast’ wit Lines while your like hermaphadites..Only `part Man’!
nice punch, but you still managed to self-glore
Rip `V’s neck’ worse than being `careless wit white T’s’, keep ya `chin up’ when you fight me kuz I ‘take more jaws out’ than pochers and `shark sightings’.(jaws/movie)
all self-glore
If this battle was a `brand of condom’ I must be `Ruffyn the beating’, im `playin willows’ wit him the way I’ll `stump-in/stompin your weeping’*
This chump is a weakling, my fist have ya `voice box’ doin more work than `def children when speaking’!
all self-glore
This like livin in the hood..your lifes toast!`walk all over your bars’ wit out `payin attention’ like `drunk men wit blind folds’
I out `shine most`, and this bitch isn’t near `the light’ like `dorfs reaching 4 light bulbs’, I fukkin knife skulls,and ` demand more bones’ than ‘burglars leavin heist notes’~!**
not bad of a concept, poor wording though....and this actually had little to no self-glore at all

so basically, you relied on multies way too much man, you have nice wordplay, but you don't have the right concept of a punch.....diss me man, not try to make yourself look good....and you need to connect your shit better, alot of stuff was very random, mainly because you tried to multify everything.

played eh? when basically the whole verse consisted of personals
you're fucking whack dude, and you dont know how to write worth shit
go die.

Voted For: veyetal

Veyetal-Ha nice Personals and punches bruh. Had some good wordplays. The flow was good, the best aspect in your verse was them wordplays, and punches with t hem personals.

The best bar from your versre was

fuck this fool, wishin' he could ride this one out....not even if you prayed on pedals
this wannabe pulling away with the win?.....not even if it were made of metal
^^ I like that good ass wordplay bruh.

FOr those (Ikso) dont know....Magento has the power to pull metal things...K? Good.


Ikso- Aiight bruh, to tell you the truth, that was sloppy. Not only the structure. The wordplays was Nice, but the punches and your wording was BLAH!. Nice wordplays but you need to word your sentences to make it a effective punch. And You had no personals was so ever, None.


Overall=Meh this was a good battle, well blah. Veyetal had a nice verse with punches them set up lines was sik man hot damn. Uh the wordplays was nice, the personals you had made your punces more effective. Ikso, man you had good ass wordplays but you need to word your sentences to Punches, it was str8 wordplays with a little effective punches, and you had no personals making your Punches more weaker...So my vote goes to Veyeral.....Peace.

Voted For: veyetal

`Rock ya head’ till your fukkin `dome shakes’, kuz after this you’ll `never be the same` like `two snowflakes’
Your` two week’ like poor `room mates’, Bitch hows the gore taste! I’ll make this slut bow down till the whole floor breaks!
^^good flow/setup was long thou, punch was on the weak side
I `rip threw more veyens/vines’ then `tarzan’,Burn ya fist till your palms spand,kuz your punches `poorer’ than `boxers on far lands’
I `float threw streets’ while your jus `waitin ta make moves’ like `car jams’,im a `beast’ wit Lines while your like hermaphadites..Only `part Man’!
^^decent, but again setup n punch last relevency with eachother,but punch got better from ya opener
Rip `V’s neck’ worse than being `careless wit white T’s’, keep ya `chin up’ when you fight me kuz I ‘take more jaws out’ than pochers and `shark sightings’.(jaws/movie)
^^nice, punch lacked personal, but best yet...cuz it was stretched like the others
If this battle was a `brand of condom’ I must be `Ruffyn the beating’, im `playin willows’ wit him the way I’ll `stump-in/stompin your weeping’*
This chump is a weakling, my fist have ya `voice box’ doin more work than `def children when speaking’!
^^koo, nice setup, punch was ehh...
This like livin in the hood..your lifes toast!`walk all over your bars’ wit out `payin attention’ like `drunk men wit blind folds’
I out `shine most`, and this bitch isn’t near `the light’ like `dorfs reaching 4 light bulbs’, I fukkin knife skulls,and ` demand more bones’ than ‘burglars leavin heist notes’~!**
^^decent closer, feeling the setup but punch was iffy
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alot of forced punches n vocab that was ok, but not needed n had
no real point of being there, all your setups couldve been more
personalized n capitalized with the punches you used..
nontheless, nice verse...but thats not really 5 bars..lol...more like ten
your lucky i kno how to read this type of text cuz other may
try nDQ you for going over the line limit... nice job :thumbup:
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came over from another bored, cause ik's verses placed them all to sleep
leave, cause the only 'flava' you'll be having here...is the taste of defeat
^^decent opener/punch lacked n didnt connect thou
spring on this bitch, he'll be fall'in back quick, ik better be'leaves'
he's hands down the greatest because thats all his verses ever recieve
^^nice play off his sig, good wording too,nice punch
never achieve fame, like sitting in the stands, iks'so apart from the game
but i bet he can leave a crowd roaring..........the start of his name!
^^decent, IMO it couldve been worded more effectively...
what a lame, '~EaSy~'? well you could give up now if thats what you prefer to do
nice rules, if only you were in a crew i could say they all referred to you
^^i wasnt feelin it ...weak all around bar
fuck this fool, wishin' he could ride this one out....not even if you prayed on pedals
this wannabe pulling away with the win?.....not even if it were made of metal
^^got the concept n what you tried to do but the 1st half of
your second bar threw it right off....n punch was good, needed some reworded perhaps
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overall you started out good, had a couple nice bars but
that crew/you bar was weak i think ..sig play was nice
that bar along with a consistent verse got you my vote, it was close...props to both

came over from another bored, cause ik's verses placed them all to sleep
leave, cause the only 'flava' you'll be having here...is the taste of defeat
2nd line is beyond played//simple...and fukkin wack
spring on this bitch, he'll be fall'in back quick, ik better be'leaves'
he's hands down the greatest because thats all his verses ever recieve
no creativity here..no real punch and a pathetic display at an attempted personal
never achieve fame, like sitting in the stands, iks'so apart from the game
but i bet he can leave a crowd roaring..........the start of his name!
lmao
what a lame, '~EaSy~'? well you could give up now if thats what you prefer to do
nice rules, if only you were in a crew i could say they all referred to you
wack..no punch nor wordplay...just flow
fuck this fool, wishin' he could ride this one out....not even if you prayed on pedals
this wannabe pulling away with the win?.....not even if it were made of metal
if i prayed on pedals?..eh..yea i get it ..childish..and wack

let sum rf heads read this shit..Propane..Dizzie Sum one with talentt to show case..*smh* pathetic

hmm, perhaps, but half your shit didn't even diss me, if was just wordplay with how you're going to rip me. you had no personals, except the vine line, which was such a crap attempt because you changed the spelling of my name. but i did infact see the battle set-up, wrote this in 20 minutes, and dropped the same day, like i was suppose to. you, however, did not even follow your own rules and dropped more than a day later upon check in. whatever, i dont give a hoot bout this battle, because it was keyed up, if you wanna battle again, sure, why not

but please, dont talk like your verse was any good, maybe if you actually had effective punches, but it was aimless wordplay, with forced multies, and self-glore
pz

good.... set us up again...

Maybe Next Time You'll Actually Use Punch/Wordplay/CREATIVITY/Originality... Your Whole Verse Was Based On Personals... Not Just Personals WhenA Battle.. You Have TO Be Creative.. Whiche Your Ve5rse Lacked Everything About It... Fucken Wack...*smh*


Up^

^ well then i could say your verse only had creativity.....and that does not win battles, maybe throw a punch in the next battle, or else drop when you are suppose to. lay off the ego man, you're not the best thing to happen to text.
bump

lol @ Creativity Not Playin A Biga Part Of A Battle...Pft,,, Your Pathetic..

Up...

bump..............................................

creativity is a big part of a battle....but you did not use it effectively, just to let you know.
bump.

This was feedback posted for veyetal
 

pollss............................................ ....

LMAO...

Get people from RF, they will tell you I'm dope..

Wack..

bump/////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

Voted For: veyetal

veyetal... ya verse was full of personals, punches and wordplay. structure was great. opener and closer could of been better. punches were good... some were hot some were not... but the verse is definatly good enough.... easy win

Ikso... first of all...EVERY bar was stretched except ya last one... structure was horrible... everything could of been pre-wrote and used for anyone... didnt have any kind of personal to it... ya got some elivating to do... keep ya chin up though

Isko dont be bitchin at the battle... ya got merked... do some elivatin and come back harder
damn... i would battle ya... but i dont want an easy win... ha

Voted For: veyetal

vey:

came over from another bored, cause ik's verses placed them all to sleep
leave, cause the only 'flava' you'll be having here...is the taste of defeat
pretty decent
spring on this bitch, he'll be fall'in back quick, ik better be'leaves'
he's hands down the greatest because thats all his verses ever recieve
forced w-play in 1st line im sure u meant thumbs down in 2nd line
never achieve fame, like sitting in the stands, iks'so apart from the game
but i bet he can leave a crowd roaring..........the start of his name!
neh... could of bin a good punch if worded better
what a lame, '~EaSy~'? well you could give up now if thats what you prefer to do
nice rules, if only you were in a crew i could say they all referred to you
a blah punch ^ sorry
fuck this fool, wishin' he could ride this one out....not even if you prayed on pedals
this wannabe pulling away with the win?.....not even if it were made of metal
again a "blah" punch : /

1st punch was pretty nice/witty looked like a promising verse. a couple of other decent/ok punches after but it was slowly down hill for the rest of the verse.


ikso:
Rock ya head’ till your fukkin `dome shakes’, kuz after this you’ll `never be the same` like `two snowflakes’
Your` two week’ like poor `room mates’, Bitch hows the gore taste! I’ll make this slut bow down till the whole floor breaks!
blah ^
I `rip threw more veyens/vines’ then `tarzan’,Burn ya fist till your palms spand,kuz your punches `poorer’ than `boxers on far lands’
I `float threw streets’ while your jus `waitin ta make moves’ like `car jams’,im a `beast’ wit Lines while your like hermaphadites..Only `part Man’!
apart from some extremely forced wordplay this was a blah punch
Rip `V’s neck’ worse than being `careless wit white T’s’, keep ya `chin up’ when you fight me kuz I ‘take more jaws out’ than pochers and `shark sightings’.(jaws/movie)
If this battle was a `brand of condom’ I must be `Ruffyn the beating’, im `playin willows’ wit him the way I’ll `stump-in/stompin your weeping’*
blah
This chump is a weakling, my fist have ya `voice box’ doin more work than `def children when speaking’!
This like livin in the hood..your lifes toast!`walk all over your bars’ wit out `payin attention’ like `drunk men wit blind folds’
I out `shine most`, and this bitch isn’t near `the light’ like `dorfs reaching 4 light bulbs’, I fukkin knife skulls,and ` demand more bones’ than ‘burglars leavin heist notes’~!**
blah blah blah

seriously man you just drivlled on about nothing. multies don't win battles... punches do. also if you tried cutting your lines shorter the reader would be more interested in reading it. maybe this sorta stuff works for audio but in text it's totally different.

v/ veyetal