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Denied Truth vs {Propain}
Topical Battle
Topic- Warrant For Your Arrest Unlimited bars No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 06-14-05 at 07:09 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
{Propain} has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-11-05 07:10 PM.
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Denied Truth has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-11-05 07:29 PM.
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.:A Warrant Out For My Arrest:. Its the early 1700s but Ima Modern Christian And I Aint Jus Bumpin My Gumz, I'm Preachin What I'm Livin And It Seems I Got Da Odds Stacked, Variables Against Me.. Cuz America Dont Like Niggas and Damn Sho Dont Feel Women So Dese Quote "Law Enforcers", Wanna Confiscate My Life When I Open My Bible, I Gotta Be Like Santa, Check n Think Twice .: There's A Warrant Out For My Arrest :. Ima young Nigga, Husslin Out On Da Block And I Know I Gotta Keep A Watch Out For Da Cops Now I Popped Da Glock, I Aint Like Da Gang He Was Claimin So I Put Still His Mouf N Put Him Six Feet Under Pavement Now Da Lawz Trynna Constrew My Detainment Wages Of Sin Is Death, And I'm Trynna Run From My Payment.: There's A Warrant Out For My Arrest:. Well Years Have Passed But Ima Captive Of This Time Frame Forced To Pick Cotton, Grow Tobaco, N Harvest Brown Grain Massa Sez That I'm The Worse, He Cracks Dat Whip And I Was Tired Of The Bullshit, So I Decided To Split I Wanted Freedom, Now I See Pictures Of My Valuable Face Ery Place That I Go, Dey Trace, Now I'm Not Safe .: There's A Warrant Out For My Arrest :. We All Gon On Now, Da Reapers Reception Tried Different Perceptions, Constantly Fearing Apprehension Retention Of My Life Depended On The Decisions of the Rest And The Decided Death, Sleep Had A Warrant Out For My Arrest ...Church... |
(Late in the evening)
SWAT arrives for my arrest but I see it Coming Early Hear the door rattle and I look, its them Knocking Surely Posted on the front porch, got me on point with Guns My Way I go for the back door and Run Away (Troopers load their rifles and follow behind) . . As I run through the woods Im Followed By The Heat Sprinting through weeds as brush break at Bottoms Of My Feet A strong breeze hits my face, look to the sky and light Shines In My Eyes On the run, I look behind to see Nine Of Those Guys (Sounds of a chopper can be heard in the distance) . . Come from the woods and into the Middle Of A Street I aint playing but my lifes still Fiddiling With Heat Run to a dead end with no place to go, is it the end of this Rat Race? The same questions asked as guns load and Gats Blaze (Gun fire lights up the night and rattling can be heard) . . Shells whistle by my head and captains are Shouting Out To Blast Bullets hit the ground and dirts jumping Outta The Grass I stand in the spotlights, surrounded by trigger Happy Feds Covered in cross-hairs, and I aint talking Nappy Heads (Make a break for it!) . . I start to run foward but suddenly I Fell On Back Smoke fills the air as multiple Shells Attack Been through Hell On Back and now my life Flashes Before My Eyes Guns rattling and bullets Smashing Me 'Til I Die (A Pool of blood emerges from my motionless boy\dy) |
Voted For: {Propain}
On snap this was a dope topical 1st of all Denied Truth - I really enjoyed the creativity in the middle adapting it to slavery with some good imagery Well Years Have Passed But Ima Captive Of This Time Frame Forced To Pick Cotton, Grow Tobaco, N Harvest Brown Grain Felt the flow was ok, needed to incorperate some multi's to help it smoother but i suppose its not worht sacrificing the content Good drop Climax - I thought ur story was dope, no real flaws, some nice metaphors I stand in the spotlights, surrounded by trigger Happy Feds Covered in cross-hairs, and I aint talking Nappy Heads Flow was nicer cus didnt have multis still but shorter lines still incorperating the creativity Overall this was mos def close but ima have 2 give this to propain for a more enjoyable read Respect to both |
Alright thanks Dizzee..
Thats 1-0 me. Uppin for more votes |
Voted For: {Propain}
Iight its like this: {Propain}: Really nice verse here fam. Really great emotion and imagery. You described it so well, I could see the story happening in my head, which is a major plus! Flow was fine, this would sound real nice on audio, but anyways, you did a really nice job on this topic man, I am really impressed. Denied Truth: This verse was not good at all. You lacked emotion and good story telling, because you kept switching what you were talking about, and your verse had no depth to it, so basically, it was just boring. Imagery wasn't that good, because at times it was hard to follow your story line. Flow was fine however, I'll give you that, but this verse was just weak. Vote/ {Propain} |
Voted For: {Propain}
yo this was a pretty nice topical...ive seen better though.... but ima have to say pain on this one cus he got alot more deep into the topic and a lil more detailed fav lines: Come from the woods and into the Middle Of A Street I aint playing but my lifes still Fiddiling With Heat Run to a dead end with no place to go, is it the end of this Rat Race? The same questions asked as guns load and Gats Blaze I stand in the spotlights, surrounded by trigger Happy Feds Covered in cross-hairs, and I aint talking Nappy Heads ^hah..really liked this.. and also pain had a way better flow than Truth..even though flow dont really matter in topicals im jus sayin..and he had better multies and truth some of ur shyt didnt even rhyme... like And It Seems I Got Da Odds Stacked, Variables Against Me.. Cuz America Dont Like Niggas and Damn Sho Dont Feel Women but w/e... v/ Propain |
Uppin.. women and me rhymes when i sayz it but i'm from da souf so i'ono if my pronunciation maybe different from yoz... Its Cool Thought This IS MY First Topical battle which iz hott...... Church |
Voted For: Denied Truth
Opionion- I was feelin D.T.'s drop more than propain. aint nuffin wrong with propains just that DT's felt like it had more dept to it. it was also creative. Thaz why i give it toDT's than Propain. DT's showed it from the eyes of many other people along with their timelines while Propain just showed it from one poin of view Verdict- Both Mc's post were all on point and pretty much even In detail. Nuffing wrong with either post and it was pretty much even out. But im giving it to DT's for creativity with the time line and differnt respective Winner= DT |
Uppin For Votes..Church |
Wow...
Uppin for some fucking votes in this bitch |
Cmon people.....fucking vote you lazy muthafuckers.
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Voted For: {Propain}
can't say a joke on here..... you suck but i will vote for you tun...tu....chhhhhhhhhhh Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
^Shut up faggot..Im sure id murk you without effort.
Uppin for votes (3-1 my way) |
Cmon people..it doesnt take that much effort to vote.
Uppin |
uppin..yuppin...crupp;in...pukin... |
Voted For: Denied Truth
guys this was a top battle...both you came strong..... but theres no deneying the truth......... D.T took it..... multis flow and wordplay won it for him no hate propain you came strong too but d.t jus edged it..... |
Ima girl but its all good... UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG |
Voted For: Denied Truth
Both yall took the topic the same way..I woulda liked to have sene someone spit this origianl but neither did but anways Story development: Denied Vocab: denied Flow: denied Structure: denied Creativity: Neither...tie Metas: Neither...tie Overall both yall had poorly developed stories but denied's jus was put together better....propain stopped every 4 lines to tell us the sceen had changed<--thats wack...write ya story so people will know the scene changed instead of u having to dictate it to them. |
Uppin Let's Get This Poppin... Church |
Voted For: Denied Truth
denied truth: i didn't even know u did topicals lol, i was feeling this alot... i liked the way you flipped the topic around and not play off the cop shit emotion was ight could so wit a bit of work though... it kept me interested which was the main part... imagination was good.... i just felt you couldav gone deeper into your topic but it aint no biggi coz you pulled it off.... Propain: no way near the best ive seen from you... i was expecting alot more... imagination wasn't as good as denied truth... u just did the basic topic and not put any twists in it, which made it boring ish... overall it wasnt that bad but i just wasn't really feeling the way you flipped it, flow was good and the emoton was ight.. v/ denied truth i felt that it was better, made a better understanding of the topic and flipped it quite nicely... no hate pz |
Voted For: Denied Truth
denied- i liked this drop not bad had good flow and made me think...keep dropping shit like dis nice piece pro-not bad either but could use alittle work....i like how you make it so it pictures it in your mind but i think denied got dis... v.denied |
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