The hood is my battlegrounds
This is the intro one of my songs wit my group Lil Rascals....
this is juss somethin i wrote that was intended for the song, but i later put it in this art exhibit in Sacramento and the exhibit gave me a mp3 player for my contribution..... some lines is streched kause....IT IS NOT A FLOW!!!...its just my thoughts in a rhymin kind of way.... so please....be honest and tell me what ya'll really think! :thumbup: . . . On my block I see crackheads, more drugs and even more violence Niggas I grew up wit are dead kause all they knew was defiance And we banged our alliance and did what we believed Best believe, the only thing we did right was not to mislead One another in the wrong way, listen closely to what I say We always thought we might not see the next day Kause on my block niggas dont play; THE HOOD IS MY BATTLEGROUNDS I walk around wit a frown to let ya'll know I dont play around And those who stepped up were left parallel with the ground Now as bad as that may sound...still a clown And YES, not everyone from the hood is HOOD Like hataz, I wish they would and poser wish they could And these niggas new room is surrounded by wood I mean 6 feet deep, they should've stayed good But we cant reminisce off one, THE WORLD STOPS FOR NO ONE And the one's with the guns are dominate like the ancient HUNS Shit what did I tell you, in my town, the hood is my battlegrounds So remember...disrespect this and my smile will turn upside down |
O yea, this is my first OM
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no one?? plz say somethin damn
a noob, a newb, a vet or an admin someone! |
But we cant reminisce off one, THE WORLD STOPS FOR NO ONE
And the one's with the guns are dominate like the ancient HUNS Shit what did I tell you, in my town, the hood is my battlegrounds So remember...disrespect this and my smile will turn upside down ^^^^^^ Good shit homie....i give it 8/10.....good imagery good structure..multies were on lock...cnt be mad at this RTF to my OM - BATTLEFIELD SCARS.....link in sig thanks |
yo u wanna join the Darkside???
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I cant even do that 1 bro, this be LL for life (or til we disband) you could've at least dropped some feed....
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uppin..............dis.......bitch
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Yea, nice shit, good rhymin structure (altho ya didnt think that was gud) and gud wordplay all round. The only thing I'd say wud be more vocab coz ya got everything else nailed.
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g00d shit bro...uppin dis mayne
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Yah Good Drop Hommie i liked this, Enjoyed reading it, Structure, Flow, was on Point.. I wanna hear this when you put it audio..
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^ ^good lookin^ ^, ima go to the studio in like 1 to 2 weeks from now, the intro is hella funny though...when my group and i clear some differences we got then we should be all good....good lookin on tha feed to bro
cheA |
uppin dis 1 mo time
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good structure, good flow
dope with the multies in there.... idea was nice, you had good imagery 'n' shit........... overall a very nice piece...........7.5/10 keep it up........ |
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bumpin dis bitch.........
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bumpin dis bitch.........
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New rule requires link yo be dropped in every "up" you post.Read rules
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Good Drop Son, You Cuda Used a lil bit moer vocab and originality and MAYBE a LITTLE bit more structure...but it was good you got everything else...i enjoyed reading this...Good Work
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real nice, I like this gangsta creativity, lol, 8/10 you could have some hooks on it.. nice flow n structure, multi's well played... nice homie... peace
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good lookin, song is in produktion rite now, i'll put it up asap
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yea homey this was deep and hot although some multiks and metaphors would've really set it off for real listen
On my block had to tote a strong glock an unknown shock// see crackhead and their facts led// to an od on drugs cats during my chilhood style was good// is now dead somehow misled to gunplay no fun today// |
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