from behind the BARS part 1 f/ Taz
 

this is part I of a III part series..
so look out for part II and III


Sick
im confined for a chryme i didnt commit
ya i shot the bitch... but i didnt touch her shit
so now i got rape... seven to life in this peice
no chance of parol... no chance of release

Taz
i hear ya story man... now listen to mine
in gym class i pulled the nine now im confined
i need to catch a grasp to make my life last
i need an escape plan before my lifes past

Sick
we need to... get with the bloods get with the crips
we need to start movin drugs... start stacking chips
get with the essays... tell them of the profit
theyll confront the blacks... tell em to get off it

Taz
the key to this plan... is to not get caught
remember what u were taught no trust can be bought
the aryans are our allies but trust them not
before the riot stops... well meet up at the spot

Sick
time to inform the southsiders... of the snow
thats movin with the essays right under they nose
i see six single southsiders move across the yard
i see six single southsiders ready to meet god

Taz
the aryans see them niggers fighting for there lives
so they jump in the riot making sure they dont survive
the riots taken place so.... we be making haste
we meet up in the mess hall and dissapear without a trace

to be continued .......

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also check out these OM's by myself and Taz

im the future - Taz

best ive written - Tha Sick One

weve both posted feed on eachothers OM's so there legit

uppin for feeeeeeed^^^please i will rtf

same here.. you post for us.. you get 2 feedbacks in return :thumbup:

uppin come on.... dont sleep on this its hot for real

thanks for the feed bc... uppin for more

It was iight could of been better I aint really like the structure but the flow was coo and so was the rhymes I'd give this a 6.5/10 keep elevatin yall!

its was decent...structure was aight...flow was pretty good...keep progressin and shit...ill be waitin for the next 2 parts.....
$$izno shady$$

thanks for the feed yall.... keep it comin

decent.....pretty good and pretty deep....keep doing wat u do niggaz....up ur vocab...but good emotion and imagery.....8/10.....dope.....

thanks.. but im not a negro lol... uppin

drop some fuckin feed yo lol

uppin, feel free to leave feed

i like da topic da drops altogetha good concept...overall vocab, multi'z, structure, originality & all was nice str8 fire from both of y'all i can relate 2 it myself ...keep writing

feedback much appreciated please continue to give it!!

ya kids.. keep it rollin in

this shit was fuckin hot!

Hey dont post bull-shit feed.........give proper feed, or none at all

uppin for some more feed

uppin fam........let it roll on in come on dont be shy

I didn't like this piece, I'm not into the gangs, guns, rape, etc... verses. It was ok, rather simple rhyming and nothing original. I raped this, I shot that, you get my point. Kinda put me to sleep.

everyone has there own opinion....but respect us as mc's as u would urself and if ur gunna take the time to point the negatives u damn sure as well better have time to show what we could do to get better, or what we did waht was good.......no hate no beef just stating my opinion........

uppin...................

damn this is pretty ill, I like how u guys divided it cuz it sounds like a big story, I like tha flow and the vocab. as well, this was a great piece..im definitely looking forward to 2 and 3, keep writing guys.... and if ya dont mind can ya vote on my topical battle or the other ones too?? but this piece was excelent 10/10..-PEACE

thanks for the feed ^^^ still uppin

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thanks for the feed ^^^ still uppin

thanks man... uppin for more

uppin for feedback dont be shy...

so now i got rape... seven to life in this peice

^^^^YO ITS PIECE...NOT PEICE......GRAMMAR LESSON ANYONE?

are you retarded ? lol
how did you JUST NOW notice that ? like shouldnt you have read it once or twice before seeing as its a colab WITH YOU lol uppin

Uppin For Some Feed Please Dont Sleep

very good piece you two, really liked it, flow and structure were good, liked the story line, can't wait to read the other two parts, imagery and emotion were good also, keep it up

i see some potential not quite there though, the imagery was pretty good emotion really lacked and the fact that yall never show ya emotion i read it but i need yall to show it then i know when to pause then go again ya know thats what emotion is, anyway the flow was good vocab lacked multiples lacked, nothin else really to mention about ya know but keep elevating 1

thanks man.. uppin

uppin.....let us get some more feed, good or bad let it role in^^thanks paranoid much appreciated

face blind scars behind bars many mind bazaars take place// need fresh sense solid like a mesh fense a lame attraction dang chain reaction on the brain// this jazz not slick dun hey TAZ and SICK ONE need advice to proceed in life// look boss habits are like soft fabrics they wear thin and tear on skin this stuff will stress a slob need a desk job like secretaries //

Good topic, decent flow, up ure vocab but decent drop, will be lookin out for the next version...7/10

thanks peeps... uppin

i liked how u guys were talking to each other n could sorta picture it... but yeah.. it was sorta simple.. the conecept was tite n stuff.. n a lil creative.. but really just seemed like another reg. OM but different cuz ya are talkin to each other...but it was cool.. i liked it.. hopefully others are better..