Natural killa vs Young Montana
 

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Check in by: 08-16-05 at 02:56 PM

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Young Montana has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-15-05 03:16 PM.

ur shit trash, and your, wack, therefore you wont last to score
approach and ill leave u stretched like that dude from Fantastic 4
my choppers defeat, mine is well quit cus im on top of the G (Game)
b real, u beatin me is like seein sumbody robbin a theif
unlikely, ur unlike me, cus girls got me straight and delight
this nigga became happy, wen he found out he wasnt the only nigga Gay On The Site
u prolly want to get wit the q and start layin the pipe
buh u ugly as shit so he would prolly rather run away witta wife
i stay witta knife, and ill shank ya easy, i see wa the fuss about
Natural Killa? i hope u kno playin Grand theft auto doesnt count
1st ima end ya internet career, then ya life is next
this dude'll prolly still b a virgin if the nigga didnt hav Cyber Sex
i got tools to leave you bruised, so its best that you play it cool
you shoulda learned not to fuck wit Montana, next time bitch stay in school
you da lamest dude, fall back, cus my hammers explode clips
and itll make ya ass lose weight faster than Anna Nicole Smith...........

Natural killa has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-15-05 03:50 PM.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=177840
^^HIs pic,

wanna pick a vet and lick the threats,while dying to stick with text
when I'ma stab ya massive chin,pull ya braids,and kick ya breast
see,it's all simple,you and the pimple,too ugly,ya wouldn't be a model for shit,
so hear what kid,go to here,and buy yaself a bottle 'a this
ya too lame to substain,puttin ya son in his shame when your frontin in exchange
cuz only your own verses alone are as played as puttin young in a name
ur stayin for blades after i start raiding ya place,makin u bathe wit grenades
your not even a welcomed guess (guest) when your playing charades
i'll spill your blood while ya see ya brother cough it,simply off this
only str8 facts (fax) you spit,is writing ya shit in your mother office
ya homies whack nigga,I'm beatin them down for meetin the wrong route
n it proves ur a pawn,joinin crew,named after leader's hometown
muting ya flows,without the bootin n smokes,when i'm shootin ya clothes
so it's suitin ya blows,n even he knows he a clown,his AIM's DaFutureJoke
Montana be jugglin with the flutes,while the real cats be tucking in the loot
I'm tellin u suckers the truth,n life's only hard to ugly mother fuckers like you


READ HERE
check his profile...aim is DaFutureJoke....and his crew's name is TriggaTown..which is where Tony Green(the leader) puts as his location.

Don't understand anything else..don't vote...

Understand both verses or don't vote...Good Luck Young Montana :thumbup:

lol.........good shit son, good luck, uppin............................

yea....nice verse by you too......good luck homie..

Voted For: Natural killa

hmmm pretty decent battle here.....
young montana- i think your punches were too simple...you could have come much more complex with them and more original....your structure was off therefore it didn't flow as well.....you had a few lines here and there that were quite funny but not enough to take the win.....
natural killa- flow was on point and you came original with the punches....i liked your opening lines....
see,it's all simple,you and the pimple,too ugly,ya wouldn't be a model for shit,
so hear what kid,go to here,and buy yaself a bottle 'a this
^^^that was funny.......wordplay was nice.....you did enough in this battle to take the win....
vote- Natural Killa

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This was feedback posted for Young Montana
 

Real hot battle here fellas...

Checking them polls

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Voted For: Young Montana

checking polls..............nice verse both of ya..............................

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oh shit get that removed.....................

sorry ya'll............................. :huh:

Voted For: Natural killa

killa........decent verse, you had a nice flow with some good hitting personals in there. try not to use the links in your verse becuz that is considered played on RV. anyway, some punches were weak, but a lot were hard hitting, u were real consistent in this battle, nice wordplay throughout, although sometimes you got a little basic, the rhyme scheme was cool and shit, you cud get a little more creative at times but overall some good shit.

montana.....nice flow, but to me your verse seemed a little basic in places, not as consistent as killa's was, ure punches were weak or average, maybe one or two hard hitters but mainly they need work, ure wordplay was ok in places, u cud try to beef that up and just get more creative with your punches for better affect.

overall i think that killa came more consistent in this battle and had the hard hitting punches and personals, both y'all need to drop the links and shit cuz they are played out but still good battle from both y'all.

V/ - Natural Killa

Voted For: Young Montana

uhhm, being totally and brutally honest, this battle was kinda whack.

but im giving it to YM, because he was more consistent with punches, his personals were more creative, nothing was forced....uhh, but still, some shit was stupid.........NK, you just had a lot of simple stuff, and concepts that aren't that hard hitting,.........like the facts one; its not effective when you say that the only facts he is spitting.....cause now you're calling him a liar, and that's on the boundary of fake personals....and actually, his aim is thafuturejoka, with an a, so yeah, but YM, need to try a little harder, last half of your verse saved you, Q jokes are played, game jokes are played............word...., heres the lines i liked

1st ima end ya internet career, then ya life is next
this dude'll prolly still b a virgin if the nigga didnt hav Cyber Sex
i got tools to leave you bruised, so its best that you play it cool
you shoulda learned not to fuck wit Montana, next time bitch stay in school
you da lamest dude, fall back, cus my hammers explode clips
and itll make ya ass lose weight faster than Anna Nicole Smith

vs

see,it's all simple,you and the pimple,too ugly,ya wouldn't be a model for shit,
so hear what kid,go to here,and buy yaself a bottle 'a this
ya too lame to substain,puttin ya son in his shame when your frontin in exchange
cuz only your own verses alone are as played as puttin young in a name

both ya'll need to step up your game, too many links were used......uh YM, get a lil more creative, NK, stop focusing so much of your verse on multies....alot of punches/rhymes come off as forced because you try and word punches around multies

v/young montana

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Voted For: Natural killa

NK - you came with original concepts. & they hit harder. nice personals, specially this :

muting ya flows,without the bootin n smokes,when i'm shootin ya clothes
so it's suitin ya blows,n even he knows he a clown,his AIM's DaFutureJoke

overall you had a deeper verse, enjoyable to read. better wordplay/punches and had good personals.

TM - decent verse, you had personals but they didnt conenct as well as NT' did. few bars were just completely weak. your best bar was :
unlikely, ur unlike me, cus girls got me straight and delight
this nigga became happy, wen he found out he wasnt the only nigga Gay On The Site

overall you just didnt come harder than NT.

overall vote - NT, for being better with wordplay/punches & personals.

NT, rtf in my sig or ill have this vote DQd.

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Voted For: Natural killa

Structure-Niether had very well structure, young montanna your lines is sorta stretched,NK you verse was a little better structurized but still off at that...

Vocab-Again both had simple vocab nothing appealing to the eye....both up on your vocab to enhance your verse.

Punches-Young montana had better punches that hit harder.Nk had some good punches but didnt hit hard as Young Montana.

Multis-Its clear to see that Nk's multis were more appealing and hott....good creativity....which mad his verse more enjoyable.

Personals-Just check NK'S verse full of personals that were hott and hard hitting....Young montana had iight personals but not as appealing ya dig?

Originality-NK'S verse was more appealing fresh and original.....Young montana...didnt really feel your verse is capable of beating nk's

v/natural killa

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