Ye ......ya boi Montana, quick 16
.....Nuff' Said.....

"Couple niggas talkin" so i get to sparkin, show em' theres no Bitch-in-Me
ill spit the heat, clips'll be in they frame, so they'll b "bullet heads" litterally
im offically gangsta, ill leave you missin, wen i send them hollow tips for free
and if you dont wanna end up wit the fish-in-sea, then advice is dont mention beef
im trigga happy, and alot of niggas need to fall back and dont act slick
cus my gats spit and itll leave you in a fuckin body bag zipped
i try to stay cool, buh some how beef remains chasing me
made one move, now niggas hatin me,fuck it, niggas could taste the heat,
im on top, so yall could take a seat, or ya chests' the target
IM da best regardless, bein near me, will b the only way u "Next to the hardest"
my tecs is the largest, so if any crew try to step, then a whole flock'll b missin
im as hot as a kitchen, act slick, then ya left cheek'll be where my Glocks Positioned
ill clap the steel, at these motha fuckin R.ats A.t W.ill
when Montanas there, you kno its a wrap fa real
guilty conscience, thinkin this rap is aimin at chu, then nigga Fuck You
itll be back luck, wen i show you what a slug do

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Rapdemon: fuck man
DaFutureJoka: wa?
Rapdemon: u=dope
DaFutureJoka: lol
Rapdemon: im goin thru ur whole soundclick
DaFutureJoka: thanks?
Rapdemon: haha
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Good man, wasnt really fealin it thouht u had decent multis.....good rhyme scheme gangsta concept.....but up on ur vocab.....make it elevate as ur verse goes along makes in more enjoyable to read.........ummmm....structure wasnt on...didnt catch a good flow, make sure all ur lines end up at the same spot.....
blah blah blah blah
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blah blah blah blah............rtf man

..........Uppin.............................

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Young Montana

"No More Mista Nice Guy"





Rapdemon: fuck man
DaFutureJoka: wa?
Rapdemon: u=dope
DaFutureJoka: lol
Rapdemon: im goin thru ur whole soundclick
DaFutureJoka: thanks?
Rapdemon: haha
PSA

Uppin................

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Young Montana

"No More Mista Nice Guy"





Rapdemon: fuck man
DaFutureJoka: wa?
Rapdemon: u=dope
DaFutureJoka: lol
Rapdemon: im goin thru ur whole soundclick
DaFutureJoka: thanks?
Rapdemon: haha
PSA

I felt this man....everything was on point...take taz's structure tip though....woulda helped create a better flow...up on vocab...multis was iight...keep postin/elevatin 7/10

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Its aight dawg............ vocab was aight and structure ok.It wasnt bad but it was dope.
7.5/10