-UNF- vs Apostrophe
 

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DQ'ed.. asking for votes

-UNF- has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-05 06:04 AM.

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****

.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics

*http://community.rapverse.com/showt...p?t=156047-girl problems hes GAY FOR FUCK SAKE!
**hes not good enuf for heavyweight so shud try lightwaight
***Lucifer=old name(alias)
**** nameplay A-a size is proly his girl(not good)

Apostrophe has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-19-05 01:55 AM.

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LoL owned this cat this gotta be a win.........................

wurd triigas in the building upping.......................

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Checkin Them Polls...

Nice battle here...

thx barz !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!

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Voted For: -UNF-

checknnnnnnnnnnnn polllllllllllllllllllllz
aight wun

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take away dat vote
damn i keep do'n dat shit
ma fault

lol dumn ass...uppin...............................

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Voted For: Apostrophe

UNF:

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
Weak Punch, bad attempt at multies. 1/5
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
A little less weak. 2/5
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
Stupid punch attempt. 1/5
.:: Finish It ::.
Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
Again, less weak. 2/5

UNF, I think you need some work dawg. I aint tryna be a prick by saying this either, I just wanna help you out a bit, ya know? First of all, try using some harder personals in your battles. Your nameplay line was weak, Lucifer line was medeocre, heavyweight line was blah, the gay like would have been alright if you worded it better. Another thing is try not to rhyme sets of words together too much in 1 bar. Example: Lead-in-waist, Head-off-place, heavyweights. Just get right to the point of the punch man. Dont waste time tryna make youyr verse all fancy with rhymes and multies everywhere. So basically hit with harder non-multi punches, and use more personals about your opponent.

Overall - 6/20

Apostrophe:

who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
Nice partial personal/punches. 3/5
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
Starting to fall off a bit. 1/5
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
Ok punch, could have worded it better tho. 2/5
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
Weak Closer. 1/5

Apostrophe, you had a better verse than UNF. However, I would also like to give you a few areas for improvment. A few of your bars were border-line self glorifying yourself, if not past the border. Examples: "watch him get spanked this time", "when i say i might kill ho'z", "put the steal toed boots to your back", "cause its no doubt i've already won"....see what I mean? You gotta spend less time worrying about making yourself look/sound all good and spend more time making your opponent look/feel stupid. By making your opponent look stupid...right there it automatically makes you look good if you do it right, ya feelin me? Use personals about them, thats key. The votes enjoy reading personals that hit hard. A lot of your punches came weak as well. Dont type punches that you aint feeling, cause then nobody else will be feelin them either. All-in-all, just try to use personals, and try not to talk about yourself in a verse that is supposed to be directed at an opponent, hense the term "rap battle"...go cypher if you want otherwise, lol.

Overall - 7/20

V/Apostrophe..................................

im glad u were honest.. even tho is was a little harsh it was appreciated..

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Voted For: -UNF-

unf killed him without a doubt, just totally dunno wot else ta say

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Voted For: -UNF-

weak battle this first text battle ive peep'd since like 04 an shit was pretty weak but theres gotta be a winner....apostrophe your shit was pretty weak dawg never had a hard hittin punch structure was aiight though personals none overall 3/10

UNF had some punches although weak was still better than apostrophe had some personals witch helped overall you got this =1=

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Voted For: -UNF-

who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
not a very good opener kind of a personal i guess :/
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
this was a played concept
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
no personal but this was a good line prob ur best
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
bad closer u glorified urself

u need to work on personals some of ur concepts are played so work on creativity the bott line was good thogh u have really good wordplay and structure but thats it

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
a personla not a great one but yea i think hes fruity too
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
lol this was a played concept but ut was really funny and there was a personal
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
probably ur worst bar first was ok but the other was bad lol

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Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
this was a good line creative and i think it was true ok im giving this to you because u had a few good personals and u made me laugh the optic line was the truth and it was funny
u need to work on ur structure and ur starting to use more personals but id like to see more
props to both but likee unf said i thik u underestimated him and dropped weak props to both though


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ROFL...... alrite ....upping this i guess.........

yo will woznt in ma crew wen he dun that..............

Voted For: -UNF-

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
^
Nice build up line, could of used the pun/personal in the second line more effectively tho 5.5/10

I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
^
seemed a little played, but...I liked it, made me laugh, nice 7/10

Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
^^
Little stretched, but it was a good hit 6.5/10

Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
^
Real nice...Good multies, good flow, an the metta in the second line was dope...8/10

Not a bad verse, seen better from you -UNF-...Few lines was a little stretched, but it was good for the most part, nice multies, few alright mettas, wordplay was good too, decent verse, should get you the win, an if it doesnt, you get my vote anyway.


who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
^
Nah wasnt feelin it, came across as a little forced 4/10

UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
^
Good punch, made me laugh 7.5/10



i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
^
nice idea, wordplay was there, but you could of used the pun in the second line a little better 6/10

F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
^
I dont get it?...First line was self glory, well second was 2, but you included BQ In ya verse an i'm failing too see why? lol

Closer did it for me, ya verse was flowing alog nicely, but ya closer ruined it, NO HATE...Just wasnt feeling it at all, I think UNF was more creative with his wordplay an punches, but it was a close battle, should be intresting too see how the polls stand on this one, UNF Took it but barely.

RTF Y'all on any of my battles you see floating around

G'luck both.

Peeeeeeeeeeace...

Voted For: -UNF-

Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
lol good punch could have been worded better
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
lol good liked this played concept though real funny lol
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest***
seems a bit forced first line woz better

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Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
creative n treu he underestimated you in the verse

good personals but you need to work on ya structur a bit more


who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
ok opener ok personal
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
lol nice better than your opener
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
lol aight
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won....
self glorification isnt cool ....

you seem to have underestimated him you had aight personals but he got ya just good battle close

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Voted For: -UNF-

lucifer?...i remember when this dude was nu mayne...u've elevated bro..(xcept if i aint mistakin person tho)...anyways nice job there...

but...

UNF stuffed in more...would i say...hardness?..he seemed to not come soft in any of his lines and just had what was in his head droppin like bombs...structure kinna needs work here tho but metas and vocab were more decent...they were a handful compared to apostrophe...tho he got u on structure and flow yo...but you still got this on my honest opinion cos ur verse was a lot more harder than ur opponents...

drop honest votes on minez

holla

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ok i cant in rob as hes in ma crew n ma homeboy but i will do dj bananz later 1

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..because I'm cool like that.

ok y jus about all ya votes gettin takin away.....

Voted For: -UNF-

UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'

vs.

IP:


Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**

v/ unf

not a decent battle really. both came pretty weak. i felt unf came more consistant. apos i fink u had one punch that stood out from the rest.

unf you could use some better concepts..

pz

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yo i woulda given this shit UNF definately...its easy as hell to see that he took it...yo UNF wen i git in a battle...rtf

Voted For: Apostrophe

Easy shit for Apos. Let me break down what lost it for you UNF.

You try to be too hardcore, that whole online thug thing is not appealing. Aswell as your multis which in battles do not really matter whatsoever. You need to work on your punches. and try to fix your structure up a little bit man, its not easy to read.

Apos- Decent punches.... and was EASY TO READ. A few decent punches in there but some of them weren't all too great. First bar was about the best and all you really needed to beat him.

Just work on your punches UNF.

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who is this herb?? ur rec's nice.. but watch him get spanked this time..
and i know your eagor to get the win.. but kid im not doctor frankenstein..
^^ok wordplay but could've been used better
UNF im not violent.. so dont take this personal when i say i might kill ho'z
and i would say that your skills are kosher.. but i think ur more into Dill Doe'
^^hehe, ok
i'll strap on my kicks.. and just put the steal toed boots to your back..
and you could have some construction shoes and still be toe tally wack..
^^attempted wordplay not really logical, nice try tho
F.uck Y.our I.ntelligence shit kid you know that we are next to none...
So BQ give me a holla back girl.. cause its no doubt i've already won..
^^nah, unless there's some personal I'm not getting

vs.


Look, I'll Put Yu Six-Deep And When The Clips-Reap And Have Ya Skull Bone Touchin-Maggots
Slaughter With Automatics, Topicals On Hetro Sex When On The Real You A Fuckin-Faggot*
^^ok, but not too original, nice flow tho
I'll Put The Lead-In-Waist And Have It Rip Thru Ya Dome And Knock Ya Head-Off-Place
Go For LightWeight Belt, Cuz Like Failures In Weight Watchers U Couldnt 'Cut It Wit HeavyWeights**
^^played, but ok, but don't explain punches! If they need explaining they're worded badly or not based on public info
Why Run... 10 Feet And Im Like Lucifer I'll Leave Ya Staminia-Wrecked Each Glock Goes Bam-Thru-Ya-Chest***
Believe Me Dude TheOnly A's I Wud Even Come Close To Feel' Rests On Top Of Ya Girls's-Chest****
^^heh, ok punch, but ya rhymed the same word = bad

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Readily Holdin The Glock-Bitch Ready To Pop-Triks Intendin To Stop-Kids
Dude Underestimated Me, He Turned A Blind Eye On This Battle Like I Cut Out His Optics
^^kinda stupid wordplay, no diss

if I could vote it'd be v/apostrophe
please check this:

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205714

Voted For: Apostrophe

-UNF-

Decent verse...nothing special...You had some multies, but thats not what wins a battle...punches and personals are...Although you had punches, you kinda lacked in the personals category, and the punches you had weren't all that nice or creative.

Apostrophe:

Decent verse from you as well. You had decent punches, but some could've been worded better, or been a little more creative. Threw in some personals, they were pretty weak, but you did have them. Both need to up your vocab.

Overall, this wasnt that good of a battle. Both need to be more consistent with punches, but Wet Willy gets my vote.

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