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Check in by: 08-23-05 at 07:02 PM

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Vaskez has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 11:03 AM.

Wayne has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 01:41 PM.

I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS
bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!!
im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW
leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES
nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS

Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse
I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first
I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin
Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin
Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations
Dumbass has "stand up" in his location...
............................but still falls short of expectations
Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain
And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne
Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner
While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner
Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame
Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane


IF YOU DON'T GET THE WORDPLAY DON'T VOTE. Should be obvious, except maybe this one Wayne in = "weighin' in" (they sound the same)

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel

Voted For: Vaskez

I Aint Even Got To Explain This Shit Yo HaHa Vaskez Took You Wayn You Suck

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Voted For: Vaskez

Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse
I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first
I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin
Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin
Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations
Dumbass has "stand up" in his location...
............................but still falls short of expectations
Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain
And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne
Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame
Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane

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nothing

v/Vaskez... he had better punches and wittier wordplay... Wane was one of my vocabulary words, thats a coincidence... yea I see you on here now...keep it up my nig

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Voted For: Vaskez

Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse
I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first
^^did he ever post his pic?..if so..post it..if not..fake personal..3/10
I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin
Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin
^^fat jokes again...just cuz he said he gotta go to lunch isn't proof that he's fat..3/10
Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations
Dumbass has "stand up" in his location...
............................but still falls short of expectations
^^stand up/fall short lines are played..2/10
Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain
And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne
^^OK..ur best lines so far...4/10
Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner
While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner
^^not much of a punch..self glorifing..1/10
Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame
Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane
^^coulda been better with some wording n shit..but it...5/10

OK..flow n structure was ite.But you had a lot of fat jokes in there..all becuz he said he was going to lunch.Just cuz he said he was goin to lunch doesn't mean he's fat.If he had posted a pic or something..then it'd be a good personal.U also had self glorifing as well.SG is good for filler or set-up....but not for a punch.that last bar with decrease in size coulda been far better as well.

I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS
bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!!
im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW
leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES
nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS
death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS

OK...first off.That structure was horrible.I mean..damn.Don't write your shit in parahraphs no more.Write it line for line.Not all bunched upp together.I can't break it down line for line due to the structure.And I noticed you had some multis in there..but it didn't help.Multis can do wonders for your flow..if done right..you didn't use it right.Stop with the dashes,qoutations,n capitals as well.That kinda shit ain't neccesary.I also don't recall seeing any dope punches neither.

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel

Voted For: Vaskez

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Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

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Fee Fi Fo Fum, now bitch I'm a giant
And your ass is like Jack, but your magic beans is wack
Skills is what you lack
I'm like a Benz, you ain't even like a Cadillac
Ya more like a Reagal
I'm a pittbull and you's a beagel

Voted For: Vaskez

Flow was great, vocab was nice, wordplay was nice also, overall better verse,

V/Vaskez

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