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Vaskez vs Wayne
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12 lines exactly No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 50 Check in by: 08-23-05 at 07:02 PM Must drop verse in 1920 minutes after check in. |
Vaskez has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 11:03 AM.
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Wayne has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-23-05 01:41 PM.
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I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS
bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS |
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Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane IF YOU DON'T GET THE WORDPLAY DON'T VOTE. Should be obvious, except maybe this one Wayne in = "weighin' in" (they sound the same) |
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Voted For: Vaskez
I Aint Even Got To Explain This Shit Yo HaHa Vaskez Took You Wayn You Suck Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane vs nothing v/Vaskez... he had better punches and wittier wordplay... Wane was one of my vocabulary words, thats a coincidence... yea I see you on here now...keep it up my nig Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Vaskez
Fat bastard wanted lunch before he checked in to post his verse I'd smack his chin, but gotta figure out which one to hit first ^^did he ever post his pic?..if so..post it..if not..fake personal..3/10 I'ma make this bitch hurt, quick to diss flabby gits after checkin Started writing when I saw Wayne in...at 300 pounds was this cretin ^^fat jokes again...just cuz he said he gotta go to lunch isn't proof that he's fat..3/10 Never met 'im, but we expect Wayne to drop wack in confrontations Dumbass has "stand up" in his location... ............................but still falls short of expectations ^^stand up/fall short lines are played..2/10 Battle has many connotations, for me, there's only the win to gain And if I was facing the loss........I'd just turn my back on Wayne ^^OK..ur best lines so far...4/10 Ya got no game and like to capitalise your rhymes like a beginner While I just capitalise on your wackness to emerge as the winner ^^not much of a punch..self glorifing..1/10 Even in 'er, ya girl says all she ever sees is you shrinking, shame Even the dictionary agrees: "decrease in size"=definition of Wane ^^coulda been better with some wording n shit..but it...5/10 OK..flow n structure was ite.But you had a lot of fat jokes in there..all becuz he said he was going to lunch.Just cuz he said he was goin to lunch doesn't mean he's fat.If he had posted a pic or something..then it'd be a good personal.U also had self glorifing as well.SG is good for filler or set-up....but not for a punch.that last bar with decrease in size coulda been far better as well. I smoke any that diss us we get to CLAPPIN-THE-STENCILS I POPING-U-PIMPLES i'll put a "END TO YALL MANUSKRIPTS' by fuckn SNAPING-YALL-PENCIALS bitch this RAPING-IS-SIMPLE you all out of PLACE u CRAZY-DISGRACE I bust on "YA MOMS WILL TAKE CUMSHOTS" and call her BABY-FACE!! im DEMANDING-YA-HOES u cant OUTSTAND-ME-YA-KNO? cuz ppl feel frozen (aka Vaskez in the hood ) like they was STANDING-IN-SNOW leave u bleeding and UNSTABLE-WHEN-GLOCK-HITS- im a don u not ABLE-TO-POP-THIS cuz the flow send off "STATIC" like fucked up CABLE-BOXES nothing but VENOM-SPITS come out of these LIPS bullets tear flesh intill ya fuckn DENIM-RIPS cuz im fuckn up ya "NERVES" like im giveing the DENTIST-TIPS death will BEND-YA-LIPS and TENTET-BITCH if ya bitch open her legs ima be "LIKE A ANAL" i'll be IN-THE-SPLITS OK...first off.That structure was horrible.I mean..damn.Don't write your shit in parahraphs no more.Write it line for line.Not all bunched upp together.I can't break it down line for line due to the structure.And I noticed you had some multis in there..but it didn't help.Multis can do wonders for your flow..if done right..you didn't use it right.Stop with the dashes,qoutations,n capitals as well.That kinda shit ain't neccesary.I also don't recall seeing any dope punches neither. Vote-Vaskez RTF BELOW http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205271 |
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Voted For: Vaskez
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O snap wrong button......Sorry :(...................
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Voted For: Vaskez
Flow was great, vocab was nice, wordplay was nice also, overall better verse, V/Vaskez Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
aaaaaaah man! Can you people leave some proper feedback please? This shit just got reopened....
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