Missin You ft. NiggaPlease
 

Nigga Please Piece:

Mental mishaps life taking mismatch now so lonely
Astonishing car crash made her life past god owes me
Now im lonley not feeling cozy missing my loved one
Pausing in this moment her life came to enclosement im her son
Mother no longer living no longer giving tears roll from my eyes
I look to the sky's for the reason why for my mothers demise
Life is getting hectic i just cant except it she wont rest in peace
She deserved this the least Pain was increased now shes deceased
No answer for the killer a homocidal thriller who could this man be
Why would they kill or make her ill a women that is so sweet
Emptyness in the mind this man should be confined i lost my love
Tears running from my cheek im feeling weak she watches from above
Stop to reminisce reliving our last kiss before i went to bed
I turn to sigh WHO IS THE GUY that made my mother dead
My anger is flaring my patience is wearing he must be executed
At the trial dad adresses hes the one he confesses now my minds polluted
Parents gone I guess life goes on I shall remember what he did
Now im on my own his cover was blown i walk the streets but im only a kid
2Fast2Furious:
One faithful night it was all taken away,
I was took back, and put back into place.
I don’t know how, still don’t know why
But only thing worthwhile I can do is sit alone and cry.
Gone is your smile, your laugh, your tears,
The voice I knew for many long exciting years.
Thinking back now, I remember how I took things for granted
but now I wish I could show you; no more greetings,
Good-byes, no hugs, infinite cries I try to bring you back
Wish you hadn’t gone that night, but only God knows the answer to that.
They played your favorite song you know?
I heard your name over the radio,
So young, so full of life, you wouldn’t believe who showed up to say goodbyes.
Bro and Sis were there, I stood right near them as I blocked teary stares
Everyone wanting the same thing, the split second before our lives all changed.
Everything rearranged wow, life’s so different.
Going on living without you will be a life not worth living.

structures were completely fucked lyrics were basic i mean coulda thrown some wordplay in.. topic was aiight overall you both need some improvement in various areas keep droppin...1

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Yo man/girl, this piece was very emotional ya structure was very of but other than this it was a good concept fellt the emotion felt niggaplease had a stronger verse due to better vocab and multis his story was more intact....but 2 furious felt ur verse also very emotional just up on ur structure and ull be tight no doubt :thumbup: keep it up 8/10

thanks fo real, ya i felt nigga too, lol. But uppin!

this was good, as they said structure needs work, but other than that it was pretty good, vocab was decent on both parts, felt both parts equally, flow was good, nice use of emotion on both parts, keep it up you two

^thanks man appreciate it.....now lets get ta given more feedback guy/girls!!

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thanks man appreciate x100....keep it flowin in :thumup:

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this was ok, yall should have picked better colors tho i can't even see 2fast2furious's piece. but overall it was decent. structure and flow were both good. maybe work on puttin some more metas in there. Niggaplease had the better verse to me but 2f2f was ok too. There was alot of imagery in here tho which bumps the quality of the piece up for this type of Open Mic'. 7.5/10
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hey man, i appreciate your feed!! keep it coming!

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nplease not that bad u could have came up witha better topic though car crash nah come up with something creative ur flow and vocab are good work on ur structure and creativity a bit
and 2fast2furious i dont know lol im not reading that yellow it hurts my eyes

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This was preety good piece,Both had good verses,the structures were ok and i think ya worked preety well with eachother 8/10
Keep rapping both of ya....1....

thanks man appreciate it........much respect fo u narc!......1

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yes ill give an honest vote....but in like an hour.....cuz im bout ta go take a shower and.....have dinner wit tha g/f iight 1

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Aiight Piece Here Yo. Rhyme Scheme Was Nice On NP's Side..Structure Was Nice As Well 2Fast Had Some Emotion In Here Nice Imagery From Both Was Good Keep This Up For Really.
Holla.

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bump.............

structure was ok but niggaplease had a betta verse do t vocab

^man this shit is mad old lmao...i remember when i wrote this....but i changed my name since....
and i had a better verse cause of vocab? how bout my multis or structure? i could care less who had the better verse....i would want to know.....the breakdown of both verses...just ur lesson on how to give proper feedback