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08-20-05, 02:10 PM | #1 | |||||
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Missin You ft. NiggaPlease
IP: 59A2 9AA1
Nigga Please Piece:
Mental mishaps life taking mismatch now so lonely Astonishing car crash made her life past god owes me Now im lonley not feeling cozy missing my loved one Pausing in this moment her life came to enclosement im her son Mother no longer living no longer giving tears roll from my eyes I look to the sky's for the reason why for my mothers demise Life is getting hectic i just cant except it she wont rest in peace She deserved this the least Pain was increased now shes deceased No answer for the killer a homocidal thriller who could this man be Why would they kill or make her ill a women that is so sweet Emptyness in the mind this man should be confined i lost my love Tears running from my cheek im feeling weak she watches from above Stop to reminisce reliving our last kiss before i went to bed I turn to sigh WHO IS THE GUY that made my mother dead My anger is flaring my patience is wearing he must be executed At the trial dad adresses hes the one he confesses now my minds polluted Parents gone I guess life goes on I shall remember what he did Now im on my own his cover was blown i walk the streets but im only a kid 2Fast2Furious: One faithful night it was all taken away, I was took back, and put back into place. I don’t know how, still don’t know why But only thing worthwhile I can do is sit alone and cry. Gone is your smile, your laugh, your tears, The voice I knew for many long exciting years. Thinking back now, I remember how I took things for granted but now I wish I could show you; no more greetings, Good-byes, no hugs, infinite cries I try to bring you back Wish you hadn’t gone that night, but only God knows the answer to that. They played your favorite song you know? I heard your name over the radio, So young, so full of life, you wouldn’t believe who showed up to say goodbyes. Bro and Sis were there, I stood right near them as I blocked teary stares Everyone wanting the same thing, the split second before our lives all changed. Everything rearranged wow, life’s so different. Going on living without you will be a life not worth living.
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08-20-05, 02:13 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 2E43 6BFE
structures were completely fucked lyrics were basic i mean coulda thrown some wordplay in.. topic was aiight overall you both need some improvement in various areas keep droppin...1
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08-20-05, 06:10 PM | #3 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
uppin to the top.....lets go
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08-20-05, 07:17 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 8D1E DB17
Drop a link or this will be closed
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08-20-05, 08:18 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: 0DB3 4A20
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Sig Provided by: Christianite 3 nails + 1 cross = 4given No matter how good you are there's always someone better. I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be. |
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08-20-05, 11:39 PM | #6 | |||||
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IP: E97F DFF7
uppin 4 some feed
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Sig Provided by: Christianite 3 nails + 1 cross = 4given No matter how good you are there's always someone better. I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be. |
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08-20-05, 11:53 PM | #7 | |||||
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IP: 3240 794D
Yo man/girl, this piece was very emotional ya structure was very of but other than this it was a good concept fellt the emotion felt niggaplease had a stronger verse due to better vocab and multis his story was more intact....but 2 furious felt ur verse also very emotional just up on ur structure and ull be tight no doubt keep it up 8/10
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08-21-05, 12:18 AM | #8 | |||||
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IP: E97F DFF7
thanks fo real, ya i felt nigga too, lol. But uppin!
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Sig Provided by: Christianite 3 nails + 1 cross = 4given No matter how good you are there's always someone better. I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be. |
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08-21-05, 01:38 AM | #9 | ||||
Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: D88E 1F84
this was good, as they said structure needs work, but other than that it was pretty good, vocab was decent on both parts, felt both parts equally, flow was good, nice use of emotion on both parts, keep it up you two
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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08-21-05, 08:21 PM | #10 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 0825 899A
^thanks man appreciate it.....now lets get ta given more feedback guy/girls!!
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08-22-05, 12:57 AM | #11 | |||||
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uppin^.................
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08-22-05, 01:19 AM | #13 | |||||
A Life Of Chryme
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thanks man appreciate x100....keep it flowin in :thumup:
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08-22-05, 12:32 PM | #14 | |||||
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08-22-05, 04:18 PM | #15 | |||||
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